Douluo Tang San, Don't Roll Anymore

The protagonist is a bit brainless and makes so many people want to kill you. He even died once. If the author writes in such a frustrating way, everyone will probably run away.

It's best to change the title, it's too easy for someone to delete it

An introduction to dissuade everyone. Who doesn't read fanfiction to get their brains in love? The dry jade anus is small and deflated. Moreover, nowadays, the writings of gentlemen and gentlemen are not pleasing to the eye. It's really yours

At the beginning, it jumps repeatedly between the first person and the third person... It's quite confusing to be honest. Revise it when you have time, and use third person pronouns consistently. The three golden chapters are the key. If you do this in the beginning, many people will be persuaded to quit.

The part where Xiao Wu appears was written too stiffly and felt inexplicable.

It's a bit poisonous. . . A long stick with the thunder attribute. You choose the earth attribute for one soul ring and the fire attribute for the second one? . . You still haven't taken the path of the Five Qi Chaoyuan. . .

I think the three Shrek girls and Qian Renxue are pretty good! If you have a bad personality, you can train it. Please, what you write is fan fiction, not copywriting! Some people don't like it, but naturally some people like it. Everyone has different views and naturally likes different things. Don't force it!

It was not handled well around the 160th chapter. Poison immunity could be suppressed by Tangshan's hidden weapon, which delayed the time. Moreover, the strength of the two was so different that Tang San was not killed in a sneak attack. The protagonist knew that Tang San's appearance had changed and he should have the soul bone of the Blue Silver Emperor, but he didn't know how to do it. That part of the plot was a bit poisonous, and he forcibly protected Tang San from dying 😰😰

Judging from your introduction, it sounds a bit poisonous. Douluo has a love brain, and Tang San himself is disgusting. It's not just for black and black. Besides, in the end, Tang San, Tang Hao, Yu, and Xiaogang will definitely be killed, so don't passively torture Tang San. Take the initiative.

Douluo doesn't allow three wives and four concubines, right? Dai Hao has several wives and no one cares about them. To set up conflicts in this regard, it is better to design them so that everyone is very proud and no one is willing to share them with others. Even when Xiao Wu and Tang San didn't understand each other's emotions, they were able to make Lovesick and Heartbroken recognize their master. However, when it came to the protagonist, they both expressed their feelings to each other and couldn't recognize each other's master even after being with each other. The protagonist's emotional line is so aggrieved that I can't even say anything when being bullied.

Are you trying to be disgusting on purpose? Even if you happen to meet Tai Lung and his son, you won't let them go, right? Why don't you kill these two witnesses now and cause trouble for yourself?

Tang Hao's wife and soul bones were neither stolen nor killed by the Blue Silver King. Is it because of the shameless behavior of the protagonist of the fan novel you mentioned? If so, it can only be said to be too brainless 😅

12-Year-old mutual affection emmm🙂

Normally, Tang Hao would bring justice to the protagonist at this moment.

The sentences before and after are not smooth, and a bad point comes up every few days. The perspective is always on the protagonist's side, just like writing a novel.

The author's setting is really not feasible. The protagonist's martial spirit has thunder attributes. Logically speaking, the thunder attribute should be strengthened the most. Later, it can be set so that the thunder attributes accumulate to a certain level and the martial spirit evolves. For example, in the later stage, the martial spirit can be given a chance or eat some fairy grass to evolve the spirit, and then the master can be promoted. The combat power is also more reasonable, but if you insist on adding rock properties and metal properties, you are a bit at the expense of others. What is the difference between you and Yu Xiaogang who tricked Tang San Bluesilver Grass into adding poison properties? You are a non-poisonous grass, even if you add poison, do you still have a poisonous spirit? Just like the protagonist's thunder stick, if you add rock attributes and metallic properties, can other martial arts that already have rock and metal properties be awesome?

In order not to lower one's intelligence, it would be too poisonous 😳.

The protagonist still doesn't have his own position. Either he killed Tang San, or the Spirit Hall, or the Force Clan, and he still relies on Qian Renxue. He still doesn't have his own position. Will he let you go when Tang San becomes a god? This book does not abuse Tang San, it is all about him and no one else.

I will explain Tang Hao's question later. I think that although Tang Hao's character is not good, he is not that petty. As long as you don't show hostility and intentionally seek death, how can a Titled Douluo stare at you like a little brat? As for Xiao Wu's problem, you should at most keep an eye on it and notice it. It won't kill you just because you are close to someone. In their heart, you don't know that Xiao Wu is a hundred thousand year soul beast. Don't always make too malicious assumptions about others, otherwise the plot will not be written. The protagonist is Someone who doesn't like him can suddenly come and kill him. Tang Hao just has a bad character, but he is also an infatuated character. Anyway, in my book, Tang Hao will not use such far-fetched reasons to kill innocent people. I wrote it in the introduction. It is not unreasonable 🤤

I would like to make a suggestion, don't use so many personal items. Author, do you want to make money, or do you just want to complain? If you want to complain and don't want to make money, that's fine, but if you want to make money, it's best not to stuff too many private goods, because fans of Douluo Continent include fans of Sanshao, black fans and passerby fans. There are too many psychological dramas. If you favor Tang San, the black fans will be driven away, which will affect the viewing experience of passerby fans. Vice versa. If you want to complain, don't put it in the text. Don't have your own attitude towards Tang San and Grandmaster, but stay neutral. Wherever there is benefit, go for it. There is no need to deliberately beautify or darken the original characters. Use them when they need to be used, and sell them when they need to be sold. You are the protagonist now. If you want to be evil, be completely evil. Just don't imitate Tang San's double standards. Just like the Great Love God

When it comes to women later, it's really boring. 90-125 The entire thirty-five years are devoted to all kinds of troubles caused by women.

There are many problems. I can't write about love but I force it to be written. The introduction says that I am not a romantic person, but I don't do it that way. In addition, the protagonist has too many comments about the character in his mind. There are other things that are unreasonable. For example, if you don't like nobles, you have to live in Datongpu, a working-study house. I mentioned the space soul guide of the protagonist's parents, but the space soul guide is not a bad thing. In general, what the author wants to write is completely different from what he actually writes. The work lacks interest and the author does not target the target group.

If you can't get a godship by going to the City of Killing Wrath, there's no need to go there.

Come on! Support the author, the plot is very well written.

It would be better if the protagonist has the capital of Cao, so he can sleep with Lonely Yan. Otherwise, what should he do when he kills Lan Dian? Should he help or not? Which side should Lonely Bo take?

It is rare to write about time travel and have healthy parents, but this increases the difficulty, and there is no way to cheat on the background of the protagonist. Just like Tang San, his single-parent family can lead to the background of the Haotian Sect. And when you have a family, you have a weakness. You can't imitate Tang San and run away after a fight.

And since the selling point is the volume, don't eat any fairy grass, and open up some talents or other resources yourself, such as creating a soul guide to become a soul weapon master, and create your own way to control beasts, similar to the magic weapon young general.

Are you waiting for Tang Hao to rob and kill you before confirming your position?😳

When you have the strength to kill the King of Killing Wrath, you can go to the Capital of Killing Wrath and kill Tang Chen, the King of Killing Wrath, and force him away. Tang Chen's Sword You Shen Kao