The Sound of Dust in the Night Begins

After reading five chapters, overall, the author's writing is pretty good. As a bookworm, I have a lot of reading experience. I feel that it can reach an upper-middle level. The writing style is good, fluent and smooth, there are no obvious loopholes in the logic, and there are not many flaws. These are already better than most authors. A few suggestions on these chapters 1. The number of words in each chapter is too few 2. Relatively speaking, there are still some flaws. For example, just a few minutes after falling off the cliff, he quickly told his master, "Everything is at your discretion." Trust was established too quickly when he had relatively little information 3. His master led him The return of the "daughter-in-law" appeared too quickly and too abruptly when the appearance was too short. It should have been filled in with another one or two hundred words. Then the protagonist "looked at it from a distance" and felt a little indifferent to life. If it were not the enemy protagonist who ignored life, it would not be good, unless the protagonist you want to write is the kind of "devil, evil" kind. Of course, it was mentioned later that his childhood experiences made him afraid of water, but here is another problem, that is, some words are placed in the wrong position. This explanation of why he is afraid of water should be explained when his master scolds him. The above is my humble opinion. It is a really poor opinion. I can't make any big suggestions. I hope the author can forgive me. If you think what I said is not good, just skip it. (Also, I'm sorry, I probably won't continue reading. It's not that the writing is bad, but I'm an old bookworm. There are very few books that can attract me anymore.) The author just treats it as a hobby for the time being, and just writes things to kill time during breaks. Don't hold too much hope, or even post it every time you finish writing. Don't look at the data directly, otherwise the enthusiasm may be gone. Read it after writing to a certain extent. You can also make some videos, go to Tieba Qidian and post for advice, etc., But I don't know the effect. I just saw a lot of people doing this. Of course, if no one cares about you, your enthusiasm will be gone 🤭 (If you really don't read the data and write wildly, you can make a video then. For example, if you listen to some bad guy in the comment area, I will write wildly. A million-word novel has been completed, but when I look at the data, no one is reading it 🤭 I guess it will be popular 🤭) It is very painful to have hopes and fantasies but not achieve the expected results, and it is very demotivating. I hope the author can survive this period, and then go all the way, and the master Shirogane can handle it easily