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I have read many of the author's books, and I appreciate the author's insistence on writing about basketball for many years. I hope I can help the author with some small comments. Operationability of the system flow: I have seen the author's progress from English words to numbers, but I think the numbers can be given some meaning just like playing games. For example, when a Pokémon reaches a certain number, it can be advanced. If the number is too heavy, it will move very slowly, etc. Otherwise, the numbers are really just numbers. List a bunch of Duncan 100, Kobe 99, and O'Neal 98. When the reader sees that the protagonist's number is 95, he only has one thought, "Oh, Kobe is 4 points better than the protagonist", and then it's over. The author is often criticized by readers for one point, such as "Why can the protagonist beat the three players in the Spurs' troika with an average of 98 points with a combined score of 90?" It may be possible to emphasize the importance of skills from time to time. For example, the mid-range shot can be temporarily enhanced by 50 points to affect the player's physical condition, psychological factors, etc. At that time. Otherwise, new readers will often complain about this logic problem. The experience setting of the new book: I saw that many readers, like me, have a strong sense of "fragmentation" about the experience setting. When you see Kobe in reality, you will experience Kobe again. If readers don't follow along, it may cause chaos. But I think this setting is a good attempt. I think the author can improve the operability of this setting. For example, it doesn't necessarily have to travel forward, but can it travel backward? You can even keep up with current events and compete in the Paris Olympics? Or just stop dreaming, since you have the system anyway, it would be easier to just write a side story. The parents of the protagonist: The author has a high proportion of parents appearing in each book, so it is better to describe them in detail. For example, Jin Yong's The Condor Shooting has detailed descriptions of Guo Xiaotian and Yang Tiexin who are quick to take advantage of each other, and then lay out the story line smoothly. Or it could just be that the parents are a certain singer or a famous basketball star, otherwise the protagonist's parents will look like "lucky nouveau riche" In summary, the enhancement and reduction of your works: This part is my subjective suggestion. The author does not need to write about every game in the regular season. Many positions can be passed by Chunqiu's writing style. If it cannot be written well, it is better not to write about it and pick a few games that are good. Reading the author's book, in the part of the on-court game, unless there is something funny, refreshing or humane, I will skip it all and look at the results directly, such as 35 seconds and 13 minutes, funny, such as irritating someone and causing him to fight randomly, and humane, such as Parker being scolded for playing normally and losing. It is recommended to add more off-site parts, just like Kazuma Kiryu, the Dragon Among Men. He not only fights, but also has many side plots. Branch lines can feed back to the main line. Going to the next level? : I feel that every book written by the author lacks a "story". To put it simply, it is the set of movie/TV scripts. Don't say anything, just discuss one point, that is, what is the ending of the protagonist? What message do you most want to discuss and convey in the book? It is not difficult to find that the ending of every book by the author is the same. After winning Dynasty, three consecutive championships, it is over, and the whole thing is really over. Of course, almost every ball game script ends like this. But why did the audience have endless enthusiasm after watching Slam Dunk, and why did the audience feel full of youth after watching Adachi's Baseball. I think the author has persisted for so many years. If you have a higher level of heart and patiently polish a "story", you will write a work that is more personal to you and more touching.

These people in the NBA know all the virtues. Just write about a playboy, don't write about an innocent, billionaire playing an ordinary person, that's really poisonous.

The experience is too fragmented. You are not practicing for a game or something, but for a season. There are dozens of chapters that have nothing to do with the main plot, and it does not promote development. Just for a talent, you have to write tens of thousands of words purely about playing. It is too uncomfortable.

I always feel that there is something wrong with the author's writing, that is, he can't let people see what is so great about the protagonist? What impressed me most was when the protagonist scored more than 60 points. More than 60 points is awesome, but the focus of the author's description is that he was almost exhausted after shooting 60 points, rather than that no one could stop me from scoring points. This is actually very strange. Writing this way actually doesn't feel satisfying at all. The arrogance, arrogance, and kingly demeanor of a top athlete, It didn't show it at all, but instead gave people the impression that they were squeaking, grinding, and barely managing to get 60 points. Although in fact, getting 60 points is very awesome, the description is very average and cannot be expressed at all I don't know if other people feel this way, and it's not one point, not this point. From that time when the article was written until now, he still gives people this feeling, that is, there is no explosive power and no climax. The writing is indeed very smooth, but the emotion he gives is too peaceful.

A team with 70 wins beat Pierce 3-1 in the first round and ended up going to the tiebreaker. Do you think you are being humorous? Do you think you are so beautiful when you are young?

You're not a senior in high school yet, and you entered the NBA before you were seventeen. It's really poisonous and disgusting. The first hundred pictures are about campus basketball, so I skipped it straight from college. I'm sixteen, even if you start writing in college, it's okay. It's really a piece of shit for me.

Does the author like aj so much? It seems that all the novels choose aj. I have always felt that aj is not a good choice, or not a good choice for a dominant player, because he was overshadowed by Jordan from the beginning and it is difficult to stand out.

Xiaofeng feels that there has been no progress in the past few years. . . The problems that first appeared in the Basketball Devil still exist today. The first is nicknames. People are always given some very strange nicknames. Among the gangsters, they call Maddie a traitor to his mother. In this movie, the little fat boss is bald, which is a bit uncomfortable. The second is the slow tempo, which suppresses the protagonist but does not dare to press too much. For example, when I scored 82 points in the rookie game, I was speechless. The rookies on both sides did not play and watched you throw? You're not on the same team, your relationship isn't good, and you're still a yellow guy. . As a result, it is not very enjoyable to watch but is also unreasonable and lengthy and boring, which leads to the third point: water data. I want to write about every game in a season, and about half of it is a routine; so-and-so, in a certain quarter, how many field goals were made, how many three-pointers were made, how many free throws were made, how many points, rebounds, assists, steals, and blocks in total. . . For the main force of the opponent, I have to write several main and supporting characters. After the first quarter, I will write a paragraph of a few hundred words, after the second quarter, I will write another paragraph of several hundred words, and then after the whole game, I will write a paragraph. . . This is too formulaic. The last point is innocence, as if the NBA is a fairy tale world, and they are all good people. Not to mention the fact that someone like Jordan, who came to China without showing his face, can still choose a yellow high school student, it is magical enough. This is also a problem in previous novels. There is a lack of some contradictions. They want to suppress the protagonist and suppress it, both positive and negative. If nothing else, the protagonist with such early strength really won the championship with a few first- and second-grade little Karami, and it was not satisfying at all to watch. . . Even if you can win like this, when you grow up, will you have to fight against twelve? It's better to speed up the pace of the previous colorful pen period, lose when it's time to lose, and fail when it's time to beat, so that the season after the upgrade can be fun. Hey, come on, Xiaofeng.

Do you feel like you wrote this book to imitate that short-tempered and pretty guy who specializes in blackmailing James? Don't imitate him.

I saw the protagonist enter the NBA at the age of seventeen, and then be assigned the maximum consumption of tactical arrangements. I'm very optimistic that the protagonist will become the second Tyreke Evans, maybe not as good as him, maybe he will retire due to injury at the age of thirty.

Author, are you serious? Can James' defense compare with Howard in the 10-11 season? You can say that Howard is not worthy of being the number one center on active duty, but his defense is really not bad. In terms of defense alone, only Garnett can match James in the interior? Save it, that's not what you're bragging about, right? Is James worthy of matching Howard on the defensive end? The result of defending against Terry in the 10-11 Finals was that he averaged 19 points per game with a shooting percentage of 50%. Is this what you claim to be comparable to Howard?

It's well written, but I personally hate it because I just traveled through time and was on the court. It still feels like this at the beginning.

Force-feeding poison, why should the Bulls beat the Lakers? With the Lakers' lineup at the beginning of the season, how many championship teams can win? Kidd, Kobe and Garnett, I can't even imagine how this lineup could lose. The three of them are in perfect harmony with each other, and they are fully equipped for passing, controlling and attacking.

Extremely toxic. He skipped college and went to the NBA at the age of 16. I don't know what the author was thinking. Bye-Bye

The opponents are constantly strengthening, but my own team has not changed at all. I am losing in various ways. It is boring and my subscription has been wasted.

I feel that the protagonist's character is kind and amiable, without any temper.

No, the author has written several books. Why does his writing style really seem to have not improved? It feels like it is not as well written as the first two books.

Are the protagonist's parents and brothers also playing in the NBA? Each chapter appears several times

Entering the NBA directly is a real failure

It's all data, it's all!

I've only read half of it, but the character of the little fat boss in the early stages was pretty good, but it's a pity that Goldfinger was not utilized, and there was no off-site plot. I found it boring, so I gave up. I'll wait for your next book.

I feel like this book means something to Microphone a bit like "Over the Mountains" means to Ai-chan. It's not a matter of quality, but transformation. Starting from Over the Mountain, Ai Jiang tried to suppress his literary youth. The noise and proud style behind him tended to be cool and literary, and he soared. Starting from this book, Microphone finally got rid of the "little lolita, funny, experience cards" that he started with the book "Rogue" and began to write a basketball article seriously.

I know that every time I finish a season quickly, it is about to end 😢. Although this book is very fragmented, I still like your work. I hope you can write more interesting plots or match points, as well as personal plots during the offseason or after the game, because your pregame analysis and analysis during the game are too much without plot. I just read the analysis. I hope the next book will be published soon. Come on, the author supports you.

Even if I can't continue writing this one, there should be a new book!

The ending is a bit too hasty, half unfinished 😭

I have read all the books, and I feel that this one is the worst at it. The previous ones are still very good, but the biggest mistake in this book is that it is separated by experience. We read the book in chapters and then think about what is behind it. I personally can't stand it when you just interrupt this experience😱

What about your new book? You haven't conceived it yet?

Nab must be 18 years old to play. Although O'Neal and Bynum were 17 years old when they were drafted, they were all 18 years old when they played. The protagonist does not meet the requirements to appear.

The separation thing, how should I put it, is not ugly. It is also a good idea to combine different situations instead of a single combination.

What's the end of the situation? Shouldn't it be possible to change to a big city?