Rent Collection in Tokyo Starts from Tomie

The protagonist must have been a child before traveling through time, right? It seems that such a character has no experience in society.

Not bad, but when we first collected rent from Fujiang, it would have been better if the daily rent of 5,000 was clearly stated. There would be some really weird people who would just abandon the book without reading the rest of the article.

The main character is not good, it's a bit too gentle, like the main character style from Little Days. Especially if the online article you write is about daily life plus a supernatural plot, it makes the main character very stupid. Also, the psychological description in the front does not seem to have a basic outlook on life. Secondly, the university is written as a high school, which makes me confused. Do I still want to rush to the canteen in university? The result is that you directly apply the high school template to college. Why don't you just write that you are a high school student? This saves logic.

After being convinced, Tomie forced Gayako to bully him to the rooftop in the classroom and planned to jump off the building. After being saved by the backlash, the protagonist yelled at Tomie, but he was still wondering if Tomie had calmed down. This is amazing. In the photo, Gayako was bullied and wanted to jump off the building. It was not as important as Tomie to calm down.

Qidian's new books are now recommended only for reading. Everyone who can read the latest chapter should read it. There are quite a lot of collections now, but it is very dangerous if the collection-to-purchasing ratio is low. I beg you to read it. Thank you everyone, it will definitely be popular when it is released.

Do you have no feelings for the characters you write? Just cut it off?

It's abstracted. If you peel off the shell, it's the same thing, and your time is wasted.

Interesting but not much, the conflicts are really stiff

Author, if nothing else, this is a light novel, right? Do light novels need to have personal emotions? I'm not saying it's bad, but it's an irrelevant emotion, right? Gz? I can't say it has nothing to do with it, but this is a light novel, so it's straightforward, who did it? And this isn't in China, right? It's not that it's not possible, but it's not used in the exact situation and it makes people look funny. Also, the male protagonist doesn't seem to be too rude.

? I came here to see something weird, how could it turn into a youth campus love? The product is not the right version, please return it!

The overall direction is too strange, especially starting from catching the doll, the plot direction and the character dialogue feel very strange. Especially what is the current position of the protagonist? The member who rescued the girl? I really can't tell. Give me a main line. My current impression is that there is a hammer in one place and a stick in the other. Even the character of the protagonist is erratic. What is the purpose of collecting rent? Let the system set a main line. As for the current plot, if you, the author, want to write a romance plot, or you want to rely on this aspect to improve your word count, your current writing ability is really uncontrollable.

The main character is not very likable and seems a bit annoying.

Pretentious literature, I've read it too much, it's a bit stressful for me, I can't stand it anymore.

The sense of violation is too strong. You are forcing a bug to write a bug. You write "university" as "high school". No matter how you look at it, something is wrong.

Damn it, just write this, Qian is not a problem, the next book may not have as high data as this one

How to survive

It feels weird. It says it's from college, but it's written from high school. It feels so inconsistent.

This reminds me of a book called I Become a Teacher in Tokyo

Let me comment on your book. Many people say that the daily rent of 5,000 yen is too high. No, no, no, when he really understood the housing prices in Tokyo at that time, he would find that 5,000 yen was very low, and it was no different from doing charity to let people live. 🐶 For 5,000 yen in Tokyo, Japan at that time, to be honest, you really couldn't buy much. 🐶 It can be said that the economy in your book is most inconsistent with that era. 🐶

So far it seems pretty good, but can it really be grasped with just two female protagonists in the first three chapters? The author is probably a newbie, so if he can grasp it, it should be okay.

Wtf? Did you realize you had finished the book after reading it? ? ?

Ah? ! Why did it end so suddenly? At first I thought it was just a pause, but it suddenly ended.

Damn it, I cut it just looking at it.

It's okay, the little ones are cute too

I'll go ahead and cut it, right?

Short and weak🙂

What kind of Dragon King novel can have NPCs refreshed at fixed points even if you catch a doll?

It suddenly disappeared. It was quite interesting to watch at first.

If it's gone, it's gone. They sell dog meat with sheep's heads.

Tomie's character is not restored at all. She is selling dog meat with a sheep's head. You are just a charming girl, and then you call her Tomie.