Space Hoarding: Building a Safe House for a Post-Apocalyptic Vacation

The following are purely personal opinions. I have read thousands of books at Qidian. It is the first time I can't help but give writing guidance. It may be annoying~ …………………… After reading ten chapters of the book, I have no personal opinion about the author, but I am simply uncomfortable with the writing style: Well, I just feel that the writing style is a bit pretentious~~ Writing is the same as daily personal communication. If you shouldn't save it, you can't. We can't always omit particles and prepositions. We often even omit subjects and predicates, and the meaning cannot be expressed clearly. What are we trying to do? It's not like sending telegrams in the early days. Why would it cost money to type a few more words? For example, the page I took a screenshot of has many problems. There is ambiguity in this sentence alone. Is the heroine walking away and out of sight, or is it someone who used the space to collect the car? Moreover, there was no follow-up after the heroine's instructions in the previous paragraph. How did the people in the car react, and what were the movements and expressions of both parties? Without interaction, words will not stick. . . . In the first ten chapters I read, this little discomfort abounded. When people communicate face-to-face in daily life, there are contexts, scenes, and facial expressions. Both parties can repeatedly ask questions and explain separately. This somewhat pretentious communication method will still cause information gaps, reduce communication efficiency, and cause the chat partner to feel frustrated and impatient. Writing novels also follows this oral habit, always stringing together some keywords in a fragmentary manner, which will give people a subtext of "I speak profoundly, but if you don't understand, you are all scum." If you read too much, people will be very irritable. . . If this was an essay, points would have been deducted in school and in the examination room, right? Novel uses words to construct the world in the author's mind. Readers have no mind-reading skills and no patience. Therefore, the author must be patient when describing things and tell them eloquently, without skipping frames. There is no transition, no connection between the previous and the next, a hammer here and a stick here and there, and the story is told in fragments, leaving it up to the reader to make up their own minds. Without a smooth and comfortable reading experience, no matter how good the imagination is, it will not catch the readers. A hammer in the east and a stick in the west are too uncomfortable.

I like raising girls. It's not about boys, but there are so many female protagonists about raising boys. There are so many that I would vomit. Especially in ancient times, if you question why you are not a sister or a daughter, book reviews will tell you that it would be unrealistic to play without men in ancient times. The invincible golden finger of the co-author is not as effective as his younger brother and son, so he looks for men to rely on, which makes him feel disgusted and rebellious when he sees his younger brother and son now!

Why do you want to help others raise their children? I'm speechless. Everyone should avoid this.

A little cutie gave me some very good suggestions, and I plan to change them according to his suggestions. If there is a little cutie who thinks something is wrong, you can mention it! Because only by mentioning it can I know what is wrong. As a new author, I need to practice more! I strive for progress, and I sincerely hope that everyone can enjoy it!

Is it because the heroine is working hard to build better and better, and when she leaves, she will let the adopted child inherit it, even if it is her own child. She has the secret of the system and is not afraid that the child will be a supercilious wolf. Or, when the heroine is gone, the child will become a chicken and a dog and ascend to heaven. It's great. I feel that Lei's child is Lei.

If you open the cheat code too much, it's like playing a game. If you open it, you can get everything easily, and the game will soon become unplayable.

Well written and beautiful

Is the novel fictional or based on the real world? In real life, you cannot burn the body of a dead person by yourself. Burning the body yourself is a crime of mutilation of the body.

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