Heaven Is an Immortal, and You Must Commit a Crime at the Beginning of the Game

The author has regressed in his cultivation. You can write such a disgusting plot.

The biggest problem with this book is that the protagonist is always a loser, and there will always be people who are better than the protagonist to manipulate him. He is a small person wherever he goes, and is controlled by others. No matter how advanced the protagonist is, he will always be manipulated. It is a masochistic novel.

If you don't know how to write emotional scenes, then you should cut down on it. If you haven't been in love before, don't write those awkward love scenes. This is definitely a poisonous point. If you write a fight scene, it's so verbose.

Is it really true that Tu Shan, as the wife of Emperor Yu, was written so badly? At least there is a story about Wangfushi in the allusion. Writing like this is a bit insulting to our ancestors.

I want to write about being awesome but I don't dare to be awesome. Using someone else's skin, neither getting up nor getting down, and procrastinating.

It's a bit frustrating to watch. Although the pig's feet are beneficial, it feels like everyone is plotting against the protagonist.

I've only read a few chapters, and it seems like it's about officialdom disguised as cultivating immortals. I don't like this kind of stuff. It's already enough intrigue, but I didn't expect it to be like this in a book.

After only reading the three golden chapters, I feel that it is indeed a bit petty as the previous few said. The world background of Pi Neri in Journey to the West is more like a feudal dynasty. Although there are extraordinary powers, the relative social relations are still feudal society. Furthermore, the character of the protagonist feels a bit strange. The front leg is afraid of offending the Roaring Sky Dog. Then, after the Shouting Sky Dog leaves, he immediately stands up and talks about how he is afraid of owing a favor to the Shouting Sky Dog. Then the back leg hears that the Shouting Sky Dog is plotting rebellion, and is worried that it will implicate himself. It feels like the protagonist is like a little person, but if you think about it carefully, it corresponds to the treatment of the interns. Speaking of which, I feel that the most bizarre thing is the treatment of this official. Compared with the Geneva Convention, it is full of humanitarian spirit. It is purely like a pile of consumables and slaves. I could see that the author wanted to write it well, but it wasn't quite to my liking, so I couldn't read it. Novels, like life, must have bitterness and sweetness, otherwise where would people get the motivation to live? In this world, death is the easiest thing, but living requires some hope. In the first three chapters of this book, there is only suffering, which even makes me a little depressed. The most talented people in the world who become immortals are just consumables or slaves in the fairy world. Although they are responsible for adjusting the rules of heaven to harvest the faith and incense of all living things, in this book, faith and incense are the source and basis of maintaining the power of the gods in heaven.

Good guy, in reality, company interpersonal relationships are a headache. You are creating a heavenly version of the ancient dynasty mechanism, and you don't even have to rebel. It's a headache to watch.

What did you write? It's so messed up. You don't even know what you wrote.

Absolutely, this is not a fairy novel, but a novel about fighting corruption and eradicating evil in officialdom covered in heavenly literature.

The writing is not good, it's an old plot from a few years ago

The introduction looks like a cool article, but the golden three chapters gave me a slap in the face.

After reading more than a dozen chapters, I don't understand why I have to help a stranger for no reason and who has nothing to do with the protagonist.

You have long been a demon cultivator. No matter how grand the world view you write is, it can't cover up the petty nature of the content.

... There is a bit of a conflict between the crowd you attract and the audience for your article. Gee, why is it so focused?

Can't you practice hard and upgrade? What is this whole thing?

Harem? One? Many? You can be single and write something ambiguous. You can be single and say it at the same time. Even if you want to do it, I don't know what you want to write when you see that you are teleported to the fox bath and mounted on the tiger. The article is okay but the writing is too confusing.

Nowadays, when writing about Heavenly Court, Hongjun is always needed. To be honest, Hongjun is nothing but a god. Sanqing is the highest god in Taoism. Pangu created the world. Don't take Hongjun in the list of gods as a great god.

Why do you have to write about that B Jinxiu? I really have no way of understanding it. People are originally in love with each other. You have taken over her body and you can explain it clearly to others. But if you don't say it, you are so disgusting. You can only describe the feelings of that woman B towards this body. You can only write it in random words.

I am very satisfied with all the books on the shelves today. It seemed to be recommended by the Dragon Ball event before. I thought the title of the book was interesting, so I kept reading. There are many classic characters in the book. This is a natural advantage, but it also has an objective barrier. For characters that are too familiar to readers, it will be more difficult to control the dialogue or the way they deal with things. The more classic, the less room for error. Make the characters appear more reasonable and natural through the plot of events to promote the plot. Optimize the plot and polish the dialogue to make the characters fuller. Keep up the good work!

Aboriginal? ? So what do you write? ?

I can't feel happy. The protagonist is not in a hurry to improve his cultivation. He is a dwarf in every aspect. Plot conflicts are manipulated by people's realm. It doesn't matter if he is short outside, but at home he is still a tall boy.

The writing is very messy. I read a few pictures but I still don't understand them.

Is the protagonist a time traveler? If not, the protagonist's timeline is after the siege of Huaguo Mountain. Otherwise, how would the protagonist know about Sun Wukong? If so, how come the protagonist behaves so much like an aboriginal later on?

I just read Chapter 16, and I thought it was a little out of touch. You are writing about traditional cultivation of immortality. Why are you doing such nondescript things?

Okay, okay~ I've seen a rhinoceros! Have you ever seen a fox? Is your kid ri Jian Gang? Serve you~

It's a bit messy and confusing to watch, so what's the cool part about it…

I wish you all great prosperity and prosperity! Get rich! Get rich! I am a rather vulgar person, so I can only make a wish to make everyone super rich~ On New Year's Eve, five monthly tickets will add an extra chapter! I can't go out if I can't finish coding!

Every time I read a few chapters I can't stand it anymore, but after a while I see the title of the novel and click on it again