Zhe Tian: We Are Engaged to Huo Lin'er at the Beginning!

1️⃣: The starting point of the protagonist is too high. The parent and son of the quasi-immortal king are invincible in the same realm as Zhetian based on his bloodline. Jumping up a level is like drinking water. Even if you can't kill him with a slap, your quasi-immortal king's bloodline is insulted. Only the chaos body and the innate holy body are considered opponents. The holy body is barely enough, even if your origin is damaged. I don't know why the author set up the protagonist's life experience to be so powerful, but it is not reflected in the whole text. It is better to set it as Qilin Immortal King, who is descended from the Immortal Ancient Period or the Chaos Ancient Period for who knows how many generations 2️⃣: There are also problems with plug-ins. Why does the counterfeiting system require a Taoist Companion Value? If you are lustful, you are lustful. Why does it have to be forced by the system? And the rewards of the system are really great. The shot is magic gold, the threshold of happiness is stretched too high, what you get is too casual, and the price you pay is too small 3️⃣: The protagonist has no arrogance and is too easy-going. It gives the impression that he is just an ordinary person who is playing cheap, and there is nothing attractive about him. It feels like you or me, but he cannot be the kind of person who can prove the truth and become emperor. He has no talent and relies solely on blood.

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I don't understand, as a descendant of a true immortal, he is so weak? The descendants of the great emperor are all born to be saints, let alone true immortals? Still the most powerful kind of true immortal

When writing about Zhetian, be careful not to use second settings, overwhelm combat capabilities, introduce too much perfection, or copy prehistoric settings. Just write in a regular way.

The son of a True Immortal Qilin is actually compared to the emperor's son in the human realm, and he is of the same race as Qilin 😥

It's difficult to break down. He wandered around when he was born. Does the protagonist have a masochistic constitution? I like being chased so much

Let's entertain yourself. Watch it for yourself. Don't you think the protagonist is an idiot? You know the plot and you are seeking death like this. You are speechless. And the ruthless emperor Daoguo has a name called Nannan. Have you read the original work to give him a name?

The Ancient Qilin Emperor is still alive, so you came here to make a fake marriage, and attracted the attention of the Ancient Qilin Emperor: Good guy, the pure-blooded Qilin left by the Immortal Ancient is a great supplement. If you take it, you can renew your life as a peak emperor and conquer the Immortal Road.

Nonsense, the Saint of Yin Yang Sect actually dared to take action against the Ancient Princess. The Beidou Human Race would only take action against the Human Race and the foreign races without power, and they would all kneel down and lick the Ancient Race!

So what about a fluctuating light saint? The protagonist of the Holy Ruins must be the Immortal Emperor or even the Taoist priest. Can she keep up? And he also talks about using Qilin as a mount. Since the protagonist knows the Ten Evils, he shouldn't let them be together. A saint wants the Ten Evils as a mount? Is she worthy? This sentence alone won't do it.

Why don't you change the name? Also the three major races, dragon, phoenix and unicorn? Let's leave this to write about the prehistoric times, right? Still a nine-color unicorn? Stop having fun! Look at the consequences of playing with flowers in the Zhe Tian animation. Fans of the original work of Zhe Tian really don't think that there is anything interesting about the flowers.

The protagonist is too bad. The descendants of the Ten Evils are not as good as the Golden Winged Peng King. The upgrade is too slow. It has more than 100 chapters and is less than 4 poles. If my guess is good, the protagonist will need 300 chapters to transform into a dragon and 30 to Sendai. Chapter 0, Chapter 300 to the King, Chapter 200 to the Saint, Chapter 200 to the Saint King, Chapter 150 to the Great Sage, Chapter 100 to the Quasi-Emperor, Chapter 80 to the Emperor, it's the same old routine again, the upgrade in the front is super slow, and the upgrade in the back is super fast.

Is this the ten fierce characters? Cloud?

After you have revealed the parent-child identity of the protagonist, don't try to make it perfect. Your combat power will easily fall apart.

In fact, the author has a good beginning, but I don't know why I feel a little frustrated. Whether it is fighting with Zi Xiaoxiao or almost being used as a pet by the Holy Maiden of Fluttering Light, the author shows that the protagonist has no choice but to rely on luck and plot advancement The protagonist's ability to control himself is too weak, I suggest the author try to increase it

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Seeing that the protagonist wants to pimp Ye Fan and the Purple Mansion Saint, I really want to persuade him to quit. I want to know if he will actually do it later?

Is the author really writing about the fairy saint and the ancient princess? I feel like it's about a prostitute, but I won't mention it earlier. What Ziwei Guxing Yao Xi said was so inconsistent and disgusting to me. I really can only read it as a pornographic articleread

You boasted so much at the beginning and got bitten by a dog, but you still can't beat him?

Not bad, highlight the pig's feet to weaken the system, don't write it as a system article Shading the sky means being domineering and leaking.

A wave of ice and pure jade

Are you sure that the part about using the Goddess Furnace to take in the ancient princess is not rape? The part about taking in Yao Xi is still understandable. After all, it was Taoist Crow who did it.

If you have a backup plan, you don't have to worry about this or that. If you are not strong enough, you can be a shadow ninja. Do you have to propose marriage if you go? I really don't understand what the author was thinking, and it made me feel really frustrated. It's more disgusting than eating 10 meals.

Above the Red Dust Immortal is the Sacrificial Dao? Scared me to death.

A pure-blooded unicorn must have reached the peak of dragon transformation even when it was born. It's hard for you to hit the life spring.

Don't unicorns lay eggs? The emperor's sons are all born from eggs.

When you read the pornographic articleread

Qilin, one of the Ten Evils, even if he is not a quasi-immortal king, is at least one of the top among the true immortals. As his descendants, why are they so stretched out?

Can't it be cut? What about updates?

The road is long and far away, I will search up and down