The Enemy Is Too Strong to Defeat? Add Some Points

I'm a newbie, if I write something wrong, please correct me.

It can be seen that the author is indeed a novice, the content logic is relatively confusing, and he has almost no concept of the data he wrote. The subject matter is okay, but the writing style is too watery. I hope the author can learn from the experience and have more outstanding performance in the future. There are currently more than 60 chapters updated. I saw the protagonist transform into a 9-meter-tall giant and fight with ordinary warriors. I couldn't stand it anymore.

It feels like I have learned everything, first of all, the setting, just rely on the cheats? And since I said I'm a loser, does that mean I'll stop being a loser once the secret book is gone? Secondly, the level is not obvious. Finally, in terms of writing techniques, it is too watery. Thousands of words are wasted in one panel. Can it be more detailed? Personally, I suggest that you use less adjectives and water words in unnecessary plots. For example, if you are hungry in a paragraph, you have to write that you are gobbling it up and being in a hurry. There is a der for it, but this is not the main content. The content is bloated with a low number of words and looks awkward. Of course, if your core focus is on word count, just pretend I didn't say it. Unimportant foreshadowing plots should be passed over in passing, and what needs to be explained should be concise, concise and straightforward. Only the core content needs to be carefully carved and drawn, and it must have a sense of picture. Keep up the good work, writing a book is not easy, I hope it gets better and better. Come on!

The system capability is too strong. It was not long before I finished writing, and I almost couldn't finish it.

Stop giving out red envelopes, they are all robots, why not give you a reward?

And I would like to give some suggestions, don't use too many words with the word "bang". If you really want to write the details of the fight, you can use too many words. It seems very low-level to use the word "bang", such as hit, shoot, seal, take, hit, beat, wrong, block, chop, point, peck, flick, chop, press, etc. Deep in the Yangping Mountains, a man in brocade and three men in silver led a dozen warriors in black to besiege a tiger-headed man. A man in Jinyi (a knife is mostly used when holding the knife, if the knife is on the stand, use the handle). The Miao knife flies up and down (you can also pick it up and down), and the knife never leaves (the tiger-headed man is omitted here, Because the last paragraph explained the vital points of the target of the attack, one of the remaining people used a gun, a silver gun to focus on the lower three roads, one person used an ax, and the long-handled ax was opened and closed, and the last person kept wandering around, shooting out a few cold lights from time to time to hit the eyes. However, the tiger-headed man did not lose the slightest advantage in the face of the siege. His fists were fierce and powerful, and he could use his sword and ax hard. His muscles were all tangled, and he paid no attention to the spears and hidden weapons. The men in black on the outside are holding powerful crossbows and are ready to go. When the battle was in full swing, the four people suddenly jumped out of the circle. The man in silver, who was good at using hidden weapons, spun like a top. Thirty-two armor-piercing cones glowed with green light and shot at the key points around the tiger-headed man at high speed. At the same time, the powerful crossbows of the men in black outside were activated at the same time, shooting at the tiger-headed man! The tiger-headed man protected his head with both arms and allowed the hidden weapon crossbow arrows to hit his body. Seizing the gap, the man in brocade held the sword with both hands and exhaled, and a cyan sword energy that was as tall as a person was slashed out. The silver gun in the silver gunman's hand quickly rotated and shot out. The ax wielder jumped high and slashed down with the force of a mountain. I'm not saying this is better than what you wrote, I just think you can learn a little bit from it to make the fighting plot richer.