Reincarnation Teleportation Array, Don't Want to Become a Valkyrie

The world view is relatively large, so far it's okay. I personally suggest adding a prologue at the beginning to talk about the setting, otherwise it will be easier to persuade me to give up. I only got a rough idea after reading half of the game. I suggest you talk about the combat power again, so as not to collapse. I also hope that the author will not run away or become a pigeon.

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Joy, complex ingredients, slightly higher concentration Happiness is watching...

Sweet, write more about daily life, children will love to read it ps. Is the witch in the first chapter is Irena?

The writing is good and delicate, and the writing is smooth. The setting and characterization of the characters are pretty good, and I quite like watching the interactions between the characters. However, the shortcomings are also obvious. The early story can't find the main line. It can be seen that it is intended to be a foreshadowing, but the overall structure is a bit confusing at the beginning. Fortunately, the subsequent plot is much smoother and the descriptions are much more concise, which is an improvement. However, the progress of the plot is still a bit slow, I hope I can grasp the rhythm well. After all, the support comes from Tieba. I hope the author will continue to write hard.

I was a little confused when I read the first chapter. Is there an introduction chapter, but it was blocked?

I'll give it a try too. No reply means I've been poisoned.

Not tight, complex ingredients, supportive

The writing seems straight-forward at first glance, but it's also crazy about jokes, which is really funny. This kind of eloquent writing style is okay if you occasionally make jokes, but it becomes completely different if you make jokes all the time. The novel is filled with a lot of physical description, psychological description, and environmental description. This is not writing prose, so there is no need for so many details, we readers can figure it out by ourselves. But the most important story line and plot development are conveyed in just a few words. In other words, too watery. From the time when the protagonist wakes up to the time when the protagonist summons and concludes a contract for the first time, I have written more than ten chapters with this content, and I have almost finished the first copy of any other novel. .

The procrastination of writing is the main reason for the poor performance of this book. Everywhere in the article, most of the unimportant places are filled with a lot of description, which may be the reason for the slow pace.

To be honest, the beginning makes me confused and I can't understand it.

I'm a little confused, the pace could be sped up a bit