Elf: I Have a Portable Island

If the author wants to make money from the novel, he should do it as soon as possible. The whole novel is like a running account. Why do you need qualifications when your qualifications can be enhanced? Even if you write about breaking the talent limit, it is better than improving your qualifications. There are too many levels, and the king level will directly become a clown, and there are smaller levels in the middle. It is better to use the game level to display it directly. At the beginning of the chapter, I went on a trip and did nothing and then returned home. Then why did I travel? Is it a waste of money? Pokémon are so anthropomorphic that they all can communicate

This introduction is just like a primary school student writing an essay. Where did I go today, what did I do, who did I meet, and finally, in conclusion, I had a great time today.

The overall writing is very smooth. I suggest that you add more details, such as personal life or daily life. If you want to follow the animated version of the plot, you can also add your own things. Don't basically follow the protagonist. That would really be uninteresting. There are also some common complaints that can be added less in some places. If the author's approval concentration is high, some Pokémon jokes and complaints can be added. Generally speaking, the writing is very immature. It is estimated that it may be a test of the water or a new one. It can be seen that a lot of this book focuses on daily life rather than combat, but the daily writing is too fluid. Generally, there is no key description when it needs to be interesting, and it is just a quick glance. It is actually okay at the beginning, but the more you read later, it becomes more and more boring. This is the main problem. For the rest, just stick to the fields you are good at. If you feel that you are not confident in the emotional genre, then don't write. You can focus on the exploration genre or the behind-the-scenes construction genre (third-party force) But it is much better than the urban shell-breaking dream written by some studios, at least it is not too poisonous As for the writing style after reading the flow, if the writing style starts to become more delicate, that's fine. As long as the previous shortcomings are corrected, it will not leave a stereotype for newcomers.

The anime version has a flashing Metagross

After reading some comments from readers, they said the weight was a bit light. I initially added them according to the proportions in the illustrations, and they were a bit too big. It's not that I haven't thought about calculating it like a cube. Let's take Tyrannosaurus as an example. Normally 1.5M 102kg According to my 3m volume formula, the weight is 816kg. It has to fly. I feel a little tired when flying at this weight, so I don't dare to write. But most people feel it is too light. So I changed it and added it directly according to the volume formula.

The front is a bit of a running story, but the two chapters on food are pretty good.

The writing is very good, all the Pokémon articles are already top-notch. The description is not laggy, the writing is smooth, there is no unnecessary unnecessary explanation, and there is no personal information. It perfectly combines daily life with the Pokémon plot, and the relaxed daily life is very creative, and the emotional atmosphere of the article is very comfortable! Especially the setting of this system is also the finishing touch. When I first read it, it felt like a poisonous point. In fact, it is the same system as the book "The system gives me immortality, and I will be invincible while I am alive". The finishing touch. The character description is very unique, and it is the simplest way to describe and vividly portray the characters, especially without the kind of self-righteous understanding of the characters (private goods). Good! Very good! Very good! There are no cookie-cutter pet-catching and upgrading novels, no nursery system novels, and slap-in-the-face classic novels! There are no step-by-step descriptions of farm novels, and of course there are no IQ-crushing, upgrading novels in dark novels (in fact, few of those dark novels are really dark). With Teacher Lu, with Fan Xing, with the Paupers (early stage), and the one about Dark Crow, etc., There are several other books written by different authors, and they are all books with souls. It's not like those who learn routines, make bad money, play bad jokes, add newbie buffs, deal with it every day, and then have another eunuch... . Perhaps some newcomers are still immersed in the pleasure of reading those classic plots when they just read Pokémon. If they read more, they will find that this is a good book. But there is no denying the value of those articles, just like the real good people in academia and the fake ones. Same. Has a Soul - A very unique book

Move all types of Pokémon into the small world and become Arceus Jr.

It's so boring, the whole thing is running around, I can't keep my spirits up

Several champion elves appear at their peak upon appearance

Isn't it possible that farming doesn't have a heroine? I think it looks good at first, but then it becomes boring. I want to have a baby as soon as possible and compete in competitions.