Magic Peninsula

Author, write at your own pace, just don't do it Also, I see some people say she is not good-looking, please, Han Xiaozhou

It's a good subject matter, but it's hard to read it smoothly.

Oh Yeon Joo

The author's writing is very sincere, but the plot arrangement is a bit messy. There are too many useless plots in the escape process. One moment he comes up with a mysterious science guide, one moment he is in love with a girl, one moment he is arrogant, and another moment he is talking about another girl. The mood of the movie is not consistent. I feel like the author got high by writing it himself? There are still several wonderful scripts to be written in the follow-up, but after seeing the author's way of writing, my expectations were completely gone.

The author just needs to follow his own pace. After seeing some of the author's explanations, the author should still be very detailed. Don't disrupt the outline due to some one-sided external opinions. The three choices of heroines are really good, don't be tj

The first twenty pictures are quite nice, rigorous, logical and interesting, but the rest of it is really unbearable and too ink-filled. The readers who come to watch it are all those who have watched the show. I feel embarrassed when you analyze this and that here.

In the case of a large-scale death crisis, the author describes the protagonist talking crazy about various settings and chatting about gods and other messy things, or to improve the favorability of female characters. It's nothing if a god intervenes in the crisis the protagonist faces! The protagonist's golden finger can be exchanged for supplies at will, which originally made the plot less tense. Only the supporting character died without the protagonist's attention. The gods are so awesome that they appear to be promising in various ways, but they don't actually provide abilities or props, so they have to rely on themselves... And then she is still a superficial nanny. In fact, she just regards the people around her as the protagonist of various NPCs. It is not the same thing to say that she is a virgin, and she is said to have a good impression of various people, but it is just data. There are no details, just say that I like it and have a good impression The author made the protagonist's style too difficult to describe in one sentence

Madonna protagonist, Madonna system. You don't care whether the person holding the crotch lives or dies. According to me, if there's an argument, just chop him up. It's the crotch anyway, and it's none of your business.

I guess this book is useless, don't wait any longer

I feel the sincerity of the author, but it is indeed too niche and I am afraid of being cut off 🙂

Zhang Manyue

Unfinished building😰

I suggest the author not to add a lot of analysis and explanations in parentheses in the text. Can you find out more about the work?

Can you write island Korean dramas? The plot of this drama is terrible but the extraordinary setting is quite interesting.

Are you updating every two days now?

Before watching it, I wanted to ask if it was a eunuch.

There are too many integrated worlds, and they can be classified and separated. Just write down a few more worldviews: technology system, mythology system, and urban system.

What you wrote is very unfriendly to readers who have not watched the original drama, or else not many people will watch it! The protagonist is still a native, and there is no introduction to the plot at the beginning. It goes straight to the point where he becomes friends with the characters in the original plot. The characters don't even know who they are. Originally, the names of South Korean people are similar to theirs.