Pixel Maniac in the Comic World

After reading dozens of chapters, the idea is quite good, and the setting of dual personalities in two worlds is quite outstanding. The writing style is also considered to be higher than Xiaobai's level. However, there are also shortcomings. The first and most obvious one is the character interaction. Many character interactions are very unrealistic, mainly around the protagonist Bai. The second is one of the main settings of the opposing personalities of good and evil. In fact, I don't see the opposition at all. The black personality is like a pure and innocent protagonist's white personality pendant like an aggrieved daughter-in-law. The so-called evil only has certain (not much) negative emotions. The so-called struggle drama in the early stage is There are not many negative emotions that affect the white personality, and the "struggle" created by the author is just emotional and intellectual (actually no different from the white novel here, but some readers are not willing to listen), and the "antagonism" is like a couple who have lost their temper and have been in a cold war for a while (I don't know if there will be a day). Then he used a ridiculous reason like a deus ex machina to get back together quickly, and the white character immediately went to the DC world and started fighting with the black character. The author's creation of these two personalities is really far from what is described in the introduction. Again, I have never played the game Terraria, so I cannot comment on its characteristics, but his sense of presence is really low. It does not mean that he has few roles, but that he does not show his uniqueness. In the book, it feels that it is not much different from an ordinary starting point system flow, and it is not impressive.

After finishing the story, let me share my thoughts. The plot as a whole is basically fine, but the conflict between black and white mentioned in the comment section was indeed a bit poorly handled. This is mainly reflected in the fact that the conflict between black and white and the transition between contradictions are too deliberate, and the time of each link is also very short. For me, it's like taking a sip of wine from a glass. As soon as I lift it up, I smell the taste, and when I put it in my mouth, it turns into plain water. My personal opinion is that this drama of the conflict between the two protagonists does not need to be unfolded now. The current connection and emotion between the two protagonists is completely lacking in depth. The conflict that unfolds under this premise, no matter how you write it, it is difficult to write the feeling of opposition between the two sides, and there is too little foreshadowing before showing the third party, and it is almost impossible to feel it. It would be much better if after the first or second formal meeting between the two parties, some sideways descriptions of the spiritual space would be given, even if it were to depict the black thorns alone or some other abstract things. Then in the next few encounters between the two protagonists, this symbol is slowly strengthened, but after it is strengthened to a certain extent, it is then deliberately downplayed by Xia Ran to bury the foreshadowing. Then some daily plots will be used to foreshadow it, and finally there will be conflict, and then the foreshadowing will be triggered. The same goes for the witch rescue scene. It has a feeling of deus ex machina. You can also use this method. If the two hidden lines can be handled well and go hand in hand, it will be perfect. In the final analysis, it is because the author's current foreshadowing or writing skills are not enough to write that kind of sudden dramatic conflict. The suggestion is to use your strengths and avoid your weaknesses. The role needs to be shaped. As the old saying goes, if you want to write about the month, you can't just write about the month. It is necessary to write about the brightness and destruction, the perfection and the deficiency, and the vicissitudes and strangeness that the poet cannot see. Enrich your characters with small details. It's okay to use characters to promote the plot, and to use the plot to show the characters, but no matter what the writing method is, the creation and foreshadowing of the characters is the top priority. The above opinions are for reference only

The poison hit me in Chapter 40, and there was still room for redemption. Chapter 40 was about the author's protagonist design, and I realized that there was really no way around it. Clone flow, the recent development is towards the road of "I am all me", that is, all "I" are "I", and at the same time, it allows readers to satisfy the psychological needs of "trust" and "be trusted". It is a superb character design idea. The author's protagonist design emphasizes the fragmentation of the protagonist's "oneness" in the early stage and emphasizes the final "reunification" of the protagonist. This is undoubtedly influenced by the current mainstream "clone flow" design ideas. However, in the first few chapters of Chapter 40, they began to emphasize the "memory" of each clone. There was a tendency to regard "memory" as the overall subject, and the contradictions and calculations of each "memory subject" were arranged in the plot. This is undoubtedly contrary to the design idea at the beginning. At the same time, this arrangement of various "memory subjects" will cause readers to have the dual anxiety of "not being trusted" and "untrustworthy" at the same time. It is foreseeable that the struggle between the "memory subjects" will become the driving force of the plot. It will not satisfy the readers' psychological demands but create continuous anxiety, and it can only end sadly. (The villain starts out brightly, and then suddenly starts to clear his name. I can only say that this kind of novel that deceives people into killing them deserves to be at the bottom)

I don't know why the white protagonist is described so poorly. I can understand that the author may want to write about the growth of the white protagonist, but after the comparison, it is really uncomfortable for the white protagonist, and there is no sense of expectation for the white protagonist. The black protagonist's tragic past, complicated relationship with Batman, smart brain, and strong spirit; the care of the white protagonist Uncle Martin, a rich second generation, someone gives guidance and persuasion but does not give people a sense of growth, just like the flowers in the greenhouse he said. The last few pictures gave people a moody and irrational feeling. I knew he was influenced, but his personality was not clear, so it didn't give me the contrast of being influenced. Instead, after learning that he was influenced, I felt a gap between black and white, especially in the latest chapter. It turned out to be the third one to influence him. He was really a soft persimmon, and he was picked on every time he came. After the latest chapter came out, it turned out to be affected by the appearance of the third person. The breakup of the white protagonist really turned into a clown, and was completely manipulated. On the contrary, I am very much looking forward to the escape, revenge, and duel with Batman by the dark protagonist. I might as well make the white protagonist a tool for the dark protagonist to send cheats.

Why do everyone like disasters so much? It feels very unfriendly to those who have only played the original version. Originally, there were very few people writing about Terraria, but the results were basically disasters. 😡😭 It feels like I particularly like a certain dish, but it is always difficult to find it. I finally found a few stores selling this dish and found that they are all modified dishes. The most painful thing is that everyone says this improved dish is good. 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭 😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭😭

The names of the male protagonists always remind me of Terry the platypus. In fact, for better distinction, one can be named Terra and the other Rhea, or Terry and Raya.

The writing is very good. It's just a bit tiring to watch, and it feels like a bit of a bloody plot. I personally feel that the setting of the two souls of the protagonist is too heavy. Nowadays, when reading Marvel DC novels, I hope that the logic of the novel is normal, the plot is different, and then it is enjoyable, and it is still exciting. I only see that the logic in your story is normal, but the plot is different. I don't feel happy at all.

I came to see Terraria's brilliance in American comics, not to see you use your unprofessional psychological knowledge and writing skills to describe how a person cuts into three parts and chats with himself endlessly.

The protagonist being mentally controlled is a big red flag right now. Even if you want to draw out the main personality, you don't have to write it like this. Especially when the character Zi Ren is not very popular, you strengthen him. It's as ridiculous as Zhang San running out of the corner and suddenly killing the Outer God Hunter protagonist. What the hell are you going to write about the dialogue between Jessica and the protagonist later? Did Jessica become favorably favored by Zi Ren? There is no need to expand it like this.

Why is it that the main perspective is always on Bai's body? It's obvious that Black's perspective is more interesting. And the comment section is trying its best to control the comments. Last time I posted a post with suggestions, but now I've looked at it and it's gone. I'm speechless.

Let me talk about some of the not-so-good feelings I have seen so far: First of all, I don't know who the heroine will be, but the woman the author wrote is very strange. Maybe the author feels that the character of Mayfair is very astringent? But the reader's perception is that she is really like a crazy woman... She is charming, cold, shy, and arrogant at one time, and she also arranges a foreshadowing plot for a future meeting and spanking... I feel that the protagonist's mental state and her mental state are worrying, as if someone who has never been in love is adding all the entries of his favorite two-dimensional women to create a stitch monster... Then the plot is too compact, and a lot of things can happen when the protagonist goes out for a walk. Then let's talk about what feels good: First of all, Terraria is not a lot of Goldfinger novels, and this book is at least fluent in writing. Secondly, the tit-for-tat confrontation between good and evil personalities is a rather special starting point for the main line. So far, the writing is pretty good.

It would be better to separate these two perspectives into two separate books than to put them together.

Generally speaking, I would like to talk about my personal opinion. Another Shennong said that the black skeleton that appears to be the main body around chapter 40 is a poisonous spot. I think the treatment there is okay. The poisonous point in my opinion is the treatment of the Purple Man in 169 photos, a small poisonous point. Then it leads to the fact that Bai actually also hides a body similar to the black skull deep in his heart? ! ! At the same time, Negative Elf, what kind of super power strengthening organization, how many shares did the time-traveler get? With so many divisions in consciousness and soul, he can still cause trouble everywhere, and the plug-in is still on Bai's body. This is a time traveler, this is a fucking extraterrestrial demon, at least the almighty universe level. In general, a standard literary young author. He has a lot of spiritual energy and good writing skills, but he suffers from literary youth. There are very few pleasant moments, and absolutely disgusting ones are indispensable. See if you can accept it

I'm afraid this means that subscriptions will drop a lot. Nowadays, online articles don't write like this anymore. After all, it's a trap that everyone has stepped on before.

I was afraid of the heroine, so I only read the heroine part.

It's a pity that the previous Inspiration Players gave up like this. I still liked that book, but I personally don't like the split-personality protagonist in this book. One is good and the other is bad. So who will have the upper hand in the end? At present, the bad suppresses the good in all aspects, but the bad and unconditionally tolerates the good, and the good can only be helpless and furious. You said that the good in the future is helping the good in the present. To me, this is more like your approach of deus ex machina after the plot is out of control, rather than a reasonable explanation, because if you can fill all the loopholes with future Terry, then what is the meaning of the book? For the sake of the last book, I give you two votes. I hope you can write this book well.

I don't know if you've talked to your editor or other authors, but no normal person would let this kind of plot be released.

Pretentiousness runs through the plot, and literary youth is a disease.

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Shangxiang, are there any new books?

This book is actually quite well written.