Han Wu's Border Army: the Wind Rises and Shuofang

To sum up in three words: too rushed. If there are other plots that require this, just ignore it. Personally, I like the author's sophisticated historical articles very much. I can learn a lot of historical knowledge every time. I hope there will always be good novels of this kind, so I'm giving my feedback here. I hope you don't mind. Author, you are in too much of a hurry. The plot of your ten chapters can be extended to chapter thirty or even further, and it can be used as a small climax! This climax can be regarded as a turning point for the protagonist, not only materially, but also a turning point in thinking in this world. The protagonist can be portrayed in the front. This is also the difference between my reading of this novel and the novels of powerful platinum writers. If I can make up for it and write it well, I personally feel that I am no different from the great master of history. You yourself are familiar with the plot and outline, but the readers do not. You even have zero knowledge of the various systems and weapons of the Han Dynasty and city defense. Your writing makes the readers feel as if they are just reading the outline, and they are confused or you are too eager to unfold the story. I really want the protagonist to improve. First of all, the character description is not very full. The Han soldiers were captured here when they left the fortress and the Xiongnu invaded the east. The description is not deep enough, or the characters are not full. For example, if the captured soldier wants to go home to look after his children, but is caught before he can see them, I can come up with some ideas: Here you can write more about how the soldier misses home. For example, you can write about what toys or toys he made for his children in his spare time, or that he usually does not dare to spend extravagantly or spend money, just to save money for his family. Then he couldn't go home because of patrol matters, so he asked the protagonist to visit his children when he was on the road. The children and his wife knew that he was reluctant to spend money, so his wife asked the protagonist to send some clothes to the soldier. Then the protagonist went back, and the soldier was caught while patrolling the border and died in the battle. The protagonist gave him the clothes and told him about the situation at home before he died, blah blah blah. Of course, the characters described in these dozens of chapters cannot only describe this person. I am just giving an example. The surrounding environment should also be written down. For example, is there any intersection with the nearby Fengsui? There was an intersection in Polu Sui, and then after it was breached, bang, the friendship and comrades-in-arms relationship were all destroyed by the Huns. It can definitely be written. While in the city, you can also write about local humanities or bury some of the small social conflicts of the Han Dynasty at that time, and the thoughts of the Han people to pave the way for future plots. As soon as I started reading it, I felt rushed. The captured soldier disappeared just after he appeared. Brother, I don't even remember his name! Why were you captured by the Huns? ! So why did the scene where he was arrested arouse readers' tears? Sorry, not familiar with it. If no one knows him, how can they feel? But I guess the author must have been somewhat moved when he wrote this, and imagined the emotions that readers can't see here. The small climax of guarding the fortress has also been reduced. Originally here to guard the Jilu Fortress, after the soldiers in front were gone, the readers would have finished shedding tears, followed closely by anger and revenge! If we didn't do it well in the front, it would just fall down here. It would be nice to just leave it like this. It can be seen that the author's historical skills are very good. It would be better if the description is full. The above is my feeling after reading ten chapters. The next step is to feel after reading Chapter 20. It's too late. I'll write if I have time today. Let's briefly talk about the ten chapters of catching smugglers. This was a major case that shocked the whole country and implicated nearly ten thousand people. I can think of some twists and turns of the story now, but it's still too late. Let's talk about it when we have time.

According to the Juyan Han bamboo slips, the military system of the Western Han Dynasty, the basic combat unit is the bureau. The bureau is commanded by the captain, and the qu is commanded by the military marquis. There are "two commanders" between the captain and the military lord. There are also 45 other Sima troops. Because there are too many troops stationed in various places and they are not satisfied with the number, some of them are directly stationed under Qu. The commander of "Tun" is called Dub. The team is composed of hundreds of generals, and the officer is the commander.

1. In the Han Dynasty, one stone weighed 120 kilograms, which was about 249 grams. One stone was less than 30 kilograms today. 2. The weapons and equipment during the Emperor Wu period were still in the transition stage from bronze weapons to iron weapons, and steel was very expensive. 3. In the early Han Dynasty, the land grant was 100 acres per ding (adult men), and half for women and children. However, due to the increase in population during Emperor Wu's period, it had been reduced to 40-80 acres per ding (differences among counties) 4. In ancient times, the minimum allocation of cavalry was one person and two horses, and the high allocation was three horses per person. 5. In the cold weapon era, an average of 2.6 Weapons were damaged in a battle, so the cavalry needed to carry at least 4 weapons and the infantry carried at least 3 weapons. 6. The casualty rate that elite troops in the cold weapon era can withstand is generally about 20%, and that of ordinary armies is generally about 10%. 7. One step in Han Dynasty was about 1.5 Meters.

It was established in the sixth year of Yuan Shuo (123 BC) and was divided into eleven levels. The first level was called Zaoshi, the second level was called Xianyuwei, the third level was called Liangshi, the fourth level was called Yuanrong Shi, the fifth level was called Official Head, the sixth level was called Bingduo, the seventh level was called Qianfu, the eighth level was called Yueqing, the ninth level was called Zhirong, the tenth level was called Zhengrong, and the eleventh level was called military guard.

After Wei Huo died, he could prepare to rebel. At that time, Han Wu basically lost more than he won externally, and the household registration in the world was reduced by half. People were starving everywhere, and it was time to change to a new dynasty.

Rename your lackey slave Ge Hong? ? Is the author serious? ? ? ? ? ?

This book is good, better than the previous one!

The ten-level military merit title system is divided into twenty levels, which are: first-level public servant, second-level official, third-level hairpin, fourth-level official, fifth-level official, sixth-level official, seventh-level official, eighth-level official, ninth-level official, and tenth-level concubine. Eleven are the concubine chief on the right, twelve are on the left, thirteen are on the middle, fourteen are on the right, fifteen are on the right, sixteen are on the top (made by Daliang), seventeen are the concubine on the chariot, eighteen are on the concubine, nineteen are the marquis of Guan Nei, and twenty are the marquis of Che.

There are a lot of year numbers😅

Not bad, good looking, love you author

After reading your old book, I found that the first few dozen chapters of yours were written by the same person, especially the dialogues are exactly the same, and I always feel weird looking at the protagonist of your book 🙂

The protagonist can build a country outside the Han Dynasty

I asked how I feel after reading it. It turns out that the previous plot is basically the same as the old book.

It's beautiful, but the number of words is too short. I'll add more soon!

Is this book published? Is it exactly the same as the one I read before?

The feeling in front feels so familiar! At first glance, it looks the same as the previous book

Basically, it cannot be solved. To solve the problem of the Xiongnu, we must occupy the territory of Mongolia. How can we occupy the prairie? In ancient times, there was basically no solution. We could only kill waves every few decades.

Won't he end up writing a book as a regent?

When will the new book be opened? There is no notice at the end of the old book.

Why are there fewer and fewer of these on the shelves?

Dear writer, your new book is very good. I have joined the new book investment group. Please update~

I would rather read about the rise of the Huns and their domination of the Central Plains. Do you have any recommendations for nomadic novels?

It feels a bit like Hanque 😏

Cut it. The subject matter is not good, but Xin Qiji is better. Why did you stop updating?