A Perfect Life Starts with Listening to Advice

No wonder it feels a little wrong when I read it. It turns out that the author wrote about female videos before, so I'll give you some superficial suggestions. First of all, 1. The subject matter is of high quality. This kind of systematic subject matter has an audience of some readers, so if you choose this kind of self-discipline/listening to advice system and write well, there will be no shortage of readers, so there is no problem in choosing the path. 2. The heroine and twins are described with flesh and blood. In other words, he deserves to be the author of a female channel. The dialogue and communication in the emotional scenes in the article are not too toxic, and the reading is very smooth. This has surpassed many authors. 3. Your expansion of the outline is too simple, and the growth process of the special part is too simple. Although you have tried your best to avoid the most important things and write more emotional dramas that are your strengths. But the reader's reading experience is not good, and it feels a bit disjointed and unreal. 4. You need to grasp the psychology of male video readers, especially Qidian users who have seen too many scenes of pretentiousness and slaps in the face. The threshold of spiritual pleasure exceeds that of studio texts and AI works on many platforms. Readers prefer success achieved through their own efforts. We are especially comfortable with class transitions achieved through high emotional intelligence or personal breakthroughs. Because the readers of male videos basically have social experience and understand the basic rules of survival in society. Most people never believe in pie in the sky. I feel that only what I can get through hard work is my own. Everything about the protagonist comes too easily. ① Losing weight is very simple, even though you have been reminded many times to eat healthily. ②Love is very simple, although you have hinted many times that this is the filter of youth. ③The business is very simple, although you have already arranged twins and loyal old employees (and there are 5 million goods included) ④The plot advancement of 1 female twin and 2 female twins is too simple, although you have already said that it is through sparring, mountain climbing, toughening up the agent and saving the twin family. But the male protagonist seems to be lying still, and these female protagonists will pounce on the male protagonist in various ways. ⑤The important supporting characters are too simply portrayed. In the whole book, when I saw you posting a brief review, only the second female agent was a bad person (even the economic company seemed normal to me, as capital is originally about pursuing profits), and it was written on his face. To reiterate the main idea, although the system is a cheat, the success achieved by the protagonist through his own efforts is more impressive. At the end, it is customary to encourage the author. A smooth writing style or a writing style that allows people to read smoothly is more than 50% of the authors. The remaining 50% depends on a complete outline and outstanding characterization. You have surpassed most authors. As long as you work hard, you will be successful sooner or later. I am still very optimistic about you and hope to continue to work hard

This plot is completely the obscenity of diaosi, right? The author completely let himself go without considering the rationality of the plot? Too poisonous!

Nowadays, people like to read the title. The second one basically blocks the way for 99% of people to read it. I'm convinced.

The plot is too flat. Who will pay attention to it until it becomes better? At the very least, you have to lose weight before starting the plot. And with the system, you can meet women directly and not be disgusted with fat people. This is not how fantasy is written, right?

I can't stand it anymore. In this impetuous society, there are white, rich and beautiful virgins waiting for pig's feet, and the female star is an obviously redundant role. The twin anchors can only let readers YY, and the system rewards people for listening to advice. The author did not build a mathematical model properly, and rewarded 5 million real estate + 5 million cash. After all, it is such a reward, but it is still hard to fight hard, just lie down and listen to the advice and get the reward. Isn't it nice?

I'm really speechless. You wrote your perfect ex-girlfriend to death, and you tortured the readers, right? You are awesome!

It feels like a fantasy before death, the heroine enters the role too quickly, and everything goes so smoothly, full of YY

The writing is okay, relatively warm, not so much green tea bitch, not so many poisonous points, just a piece of food, feel free to eat it!

Is a life without growing old with your parents considered perfect?

Get some black technology to resurrect your ex-girlfriend

Don't take the title and introduction seriously. Many book friends only read the title and introduction, and the content is different. I suggest you click in and have a look. It's not easy to find a good book. I sincerely recommend it!

The writing is not very good. When you see this kind of subject and you write it, you change the name. The content is old-fashioned, and the second one is about women.

Then stop writing, eunuch! So embarrassing

A science fiction novel, even more sci-fi than "The End" 😂 A classmate would actually do well to write a business novel with a female protagonist, but I guess I can't change it now I don't know if I can handle multiple female protagonists...

I'm a new author, it's too white and too empty

It's too ridiculous, the pace is too big, I can't stand it

What you write is urban writing, not some outrageous science fiction writing. The two are not the same concept, okay?

Looking at the introduction, the rewards fluctuate irregularly and greatly, which is not possible.

Why hasn't it been put on the shelves yet?

Where can I watch dancing😃

The one you wrote recently about Xin is too vicious. This is a male channel. When you write a male channel, you must be docile and not as abusive as a female channel. This habit needs to be changed.