Pokemon: Starting with the Black Dragon Zekrom

I couldn't stand it before I finished reading Chapter 1 The first point is that the random use of skills caused chaos among the town elves, and also scared the people in the town, and the whole town was in chaos The second point is to directly attack the protagonist with moves, and I'm really not afraid of cutting him in half. What's even more outrageous is that the protagonist can actually follow the moves of a level 80 elf. When I saw this, I didn't know what to say. It's neither traditional nor realistic, and I can't think of any adjectives after thinking about it.

The reading experience of the first five chapters is not very good, especially the beginning of going on a boat. I understand that the author wants to create a mysterious and powerful image of the protagonist, but the plot development is unclear I don't know if the protagonist has Pokémon and how precious it is, but he was bitten by a large number of Team Rockets, and then there were inexplicable tests on the ship A bit too much force

The writing is good. However, instead of following the perspective of the pig's feet, write a chapter or two and then switch to the perspective of the supporting character. . . This, it hurts a bit

After reading Chapter 20, the scenes cut back and forth, the subject kept changing, and there were many characters written, but I felt like I had a big problem with reading. Writing animation is not like writing novels

I'm quite speechless. There are no paid chapters for me to subscribe to. I only need rewards for posting posts and asking for fan points. . . There are too many supporting characters and it's too confusing. It seems like everyone has been shaped and yet not shaped. I can't remember it well. The perspective often drifts back and forth in chapters and the timeline jumps. There is really no need to write a separate review of the perspective of the supporting characters. I have written a lot of supporting characters and named them all, but I also like to use weird pronouns when writing about their perspectives, or the subject will not appear at all. So what is the use of naming them as a co-author? Often a person would appear out of nowhere to speak. Sometimes I would see his name appearing in what another person said to him, and then I would realize it was this person. After looking at the book friend circle, it seems that some book friends have reported this problem before. As for the protagonist getting the Dragon Stone and being recognized by Zekrom, this boy, that boy, this uncle, that uncle, this hair color and that hair color, several ellipses split the perspective and floated to another person, it really feels like my mind is confused. Then I wrote several chapters and the supporting characters spent a lot of effort to exaggerate the atmosphere of the big crisis in Qibao City for a long time. They exaggerated some kind of hero recognition ceremony for a long time. The protagonist just mentioned it. The protagonist Bird and the mythical beast telepathically communicated for a while, and then the two almost looked at each other, smiled and chatted for a few words, and then it was over? Why don't you describe it in detail? The co-author really just moved the introduction of the novel. You tried so hard to describe the supporting characters, but what about the protagonist? How can you only write about the supporting characters so that they are jaw-dropping and sweaty, while the protagonist part is so sloppy? . When I'm pretending, I can't stand it at all. I don't have a sense of involvement. There is also the problem of description of combat power. It's not that the battle scenes are not well written. The author's battle descriptions are very standard and orthodox fan writing. I believe he has read a lot of Pokémon fan fiction. The gap between the description of combat power before and after is too big. How did you describe Zekrom before? . As soon as he appears, he releases the power of thunder and lightning to attract all the surrounding magnet monsters to attract energy. Swish, swish, and evolve into a self-destructing magnet monster. The aura of the mythical beast dominates the entire city. The scene is called a sky-blocking sun. Sister Aloe and a king-level trainer are all ready to commit their lives here. I'm ready, and then I look at it later The Peak of the King·Zekrom I believe that other champions don't have the same expressiveness as you (yes, Zekrom in the anime Super Wish has almost this expressive power, but his performance is completely unified) Super God, give me a peak of the Heavenly King. .) Compared with the performance of the protagonist on the previous ship when he took the other's Heavenly King in 3V3, the protagonist's command of the Quasi-King's class seemed to be better. Just dodge a few skills, strengthen them two or three times, and then hit a few skills to win. It's as crispy as in the game. I think the king is so lazy. Even if the pig's foot command level is high and the power of the waveguide is bugged, it won't give the king level to the quasi-king. . Then because of this, I paid attention to the author's classification of combat power. I have always seen that there are almost two types of classification of combat power among PM fans. One is the realm classification type of elite/hall master/king level/champion that is popular in the PM fan circle, and then there may be some realm titles such as quasi-king or even quasi-champion inserted in the middle. It is probably influenced by the division of realms in fantasy online literature, such as the fake half-step of the nine-star tenth level peak quasi-dzogchen (who brought the horse up). One is to follow the level classification of the Pokémon game, from level 1 to level 100. And because of the particularity of Pokémon's worldview, these two divisions of combat power are integrated with each other, and they will bring each other forward. Fans who are in the main realm will make the gap between realms more obvious, and then create a barrier between levels. For example, levels 59 to 60 are the threshold for quasi-kings and heavenly kings to break through the realm. As for the main level, it will be more vague and refers to the realm of the King of Champions. This level-based division of combat power closely follows the game data. With various bonuses, level 50 can reach level 70 in seconds. Your book feels a bit strange to me. The quasi-king class can defeat the king-class with a few mediocre bonuses and a few skills in tactics, but the opponent is a king (in the future) but his command level seems to be ruined by the protagonist. It seems that the combat power performance is divided according to the game level, and it can be skipped at will. After about forty chapters, a bunch of kings and champions were fighting each other, and I felt that the combat power was a bit broken. Without looking closely, it seemed that the combat power could be exceeded casually. But it also has to break through the realm, referring to the injured Zekrom returning to the championship from the King of Heaven. What makes me very excited is the thing used to break through, a relatively high-quality thunder stone randomly picked out from the hands of a very lucky and named sidekick. . . Ah? I wonder if the stones used by elves in their 20s and 30s to evolve are not so high-level. Even if it is a special world view, eating one can break through the championship? Even if it is true that your setting is like this, please describe this stone more. . It would be a bit hasty to just break through casually. Of course, the author's writing style is the most flawless. Some of the descriptions of the environment and ecology are also very interesting, but I feel that there are too many places and too much force, and there are not enough considerations in some places. I don't know what will happen later because when I saw Chapter 48, I couldn't stand it and ran away first. Maybe I can read it when the author's next book doesn't have such obvious problems. I'm looking forward to a masterpiece. In recent years, fewer and fewer PM fans have been able to read it. .

The story is interesting, the character of the protagonist is well-rounded, there are no problems with word choice, and the logic is clear. However, the description of character scenes is very confusing, and sometimes it is even difficult to understand, especially the multi-person scenes. In some places, I want to create a sense of mystery, but creating a sense of mystery is not just writing in the clouds. What is mysterious is the characters, not blurring the action and dialogue. And there is a sense of up and down in the advancement of the plot. It is advancing too fast. An excellent plot climax should be progressive.

It's so messy, the camera angle keeps turning around

Don't be a heroine. Really, the harem of Pokémon is Pokémon, and most heroines are disgusting.

After reading a few chapters, I still feel confused...

@reader I specially rewarded you for replying. All your sentences involving dialogue are a mess. The subject changes here and there, and you don't tell who the speaker is. You insist on splitting the same paragraph into multiple paragraphs, which creates a lot of reading difficulties for readers. Didn't you point out the b number? I'm really sick of it. Come on, let's give a few examples: 1. Chapter 27 "This is Aindok, Zekrom, do you still have any impression? I remember the king of the people of the earth." Zekrom answered in a deep voice. Lang Yashun asked: "What kind of king? What kind of king? A fat old man with a big white beard. "Humph! " Zekrom couldn't help but smile and turned into a groan, spitting out white mist from his mouth "What kind of king appeared for the second time without quotation marks? "Why did you split it into three lines? I thought it was the fat old man talking. You should express it like this: What kind of king? A fat old man with a big white beard. "Hmph! "Zekrom couldn't help but smile and turned into a groan, spitting out white mist from his mouth 2. You can still understand the above after reading it a few times. Here is an advanced one. The beginning of Chapter 28 Ain Duo Oak. A hotel belt built of dark brown ancient wood There is a faint aroma, accompanied by long melody of traditional music and dark yellow lights. In the front lobby, a black-haired young man stands in front of the only remote communication device in the corner. The connection is successful, and the dark screen lights up. "Damu... Um... Where is Dr. Damu now?" "Ah! Hello, hello! Do you have any questions? If it is a gym battle, the Pokémon Center can help register. She finished speaking quickly, and quickly realized that something was wrong, and explained: After reading the above paragraph, I still I don't know who is calling. Is it the protagonist? Do you think your description of the environment is very good? And this conversation is so confusing. You should introduce yourself when you call someone. Did you ask Dr. Ohki for something, but he didn't say anything? 3 Similar questions were asked at least three times in each chapter, and the scenes involving multiple people made me laugh inexplicably. What's more, the identities and reasons for their appearance are not introduced. The behavior of the passerby characters is even more strange. The two random examples above are relatively understandable. There are many things that I can't understand. Can the author practice his writing?