Emperor Zhaolie of Jihan

It's enough for you to copy the poem once. You can't write it endlessly. Just write it as you write, but can you skip it? Don't you feel embarrassed when you write it by yourself?

I can only say that the Ling Emperor was born only after Liu Hongga was born, rather than being called the Ling Emperor when he was alive.

Zhao is a beautiful posthumous title, which is an affirmation of Liu Bei. As for Lie, Liu Bei did not unify the Han Dynasty, so it is Lie. If Liu Bei unified the Han Dynasty, he should be Emperor Zhaowu of Han Dynasty.

Zhang Fei is two meters tall? I really don't know what you're writing about, and it's military training for college students. Do you want to hold a grievance meeting later, a large group?

I just read the beginning and there are two common sense mistakes. The first is that the group training made the author admit that he wrote it on purpose. I won't go into it. The second is that the Qin, Han and Jin Dynasties are close to each other and they have to call each other by their cousins. Which family calls Zhang Fei Fei? This will happen unless you are self-effacing. Others will either call you by your full name or call you by your cousin. I haven't read at least the Romance of the Three Kingdoms well, let alone the Romance of the Three Kingdoms.

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What the hell is a steam engine? Don't you know it destroys the sense of immersion? I deleted it directly because of your steam engine.

What are you writing about? 😰

I have read quite a few novels about the hegemony route. Some of them, like the protagonist, wanted to hide in the world and live in peace and stability. In the end, they took the main line of fighting for hegemony. However, they reluctantly embarked on the road to hegemony for various lame reasons. Some authors are still reluctant even in the middle and late stages of the struggle for hegemony. It is okay to write about changes in mentality, but some authors just don't feel comfortable writing about it, and it is easy to write about the establishment of a memorial arch.

You have money problems. You can buy a weapon for 10,000 gold. The First Lord passed on to Su Zhang and two merchants. Selling Male's family property only has 1,000 gold. In Chapter 23, the tax revenue of a county with a population of 200,000 is 500,000 gold a year? Are you sure the unit is not money? In the Han Dynasty, 1 gold (1 jin of yellow gold) = 10,000 qian. In normal years in the Han Dynasty, one stone of rice only cost 20 to 70 qian. Cao Song bought the Taiwei with 10,000 gold.

The writing is pretty good, and the protagonist has grown! But please try to explain it clearly in some places. For example, in the official position, the envoys are too dramatic, so you can either use ancient official positions, or say that the official positions are adapted from the protagonist.

A dejected protagonist, a protagonist who just wants to escape from the world, is really hard to relate to. No matter how you write it, it is both realistic and realistic.

Why don't you try the route of "Xuande" and see if you can write something new?

At present, this is a shadow of many books. The writing is still rough, but the idea is good, but the steam engine is too big, and it is not as good as stirrups, iron smelting, salt making, and Jenny spinning looms. However, I really believe that Liu Hong was assassinated by the Yuan family, but I don't think it is so explicit. In fact, as long as he gives a woman, Liu Hong's character of not having time to spare, early death is inevitable, the poison is still crude, especially this kind of poison, it is still easy to detect. I hope to write as well as possible in the future. With strong strength, annexing Jizhou, Qingyou and Jixu, unifying the north is not a dream, and fighting against the aristocratic families will never end, especially the Yuan family. The Yuan family will definitely be destroyed. In the future, they will definitely have to confront the Yuan family, but don't fight all the aristocratic families. The only way is to fight against each other, such as the Xun family. For example, the Yang family, of course, if they beat the Yuan family and the Yang family is still there, there is inevitably the possibility of driving the tiger away and devouring the wolf and being injured by the tiger. After all, the Yang family is also the third generation. Let's see how the author lays it out