Traveling to Daliang Kingdom Starts from Falling into the Water

I won't comment on the plot, but the sentences really don't make sense. I'm so tired from reading it, and sometimes I can't connect to the next sentence. Why don't you, the author, read it yourself after you finish writing?

This sentence doesn't make sense, it seems baffling

What I wrote above is okay, but I was a bit dizzy when I read it, and I couldn't read it without swallowing it 😰

The sentences are not smooth... I feel a little tired from reading

The plot is okay, but the writing is really not smooth, and it's hard to watch.

I came in because of the subject matter, thinking it would be an escape story, but it turned out to be about farming and fighting in a house, so that's okay. Goldfinger is a big villa. Then open and read. Then... The heroine is really disgusting! ! The character design of a modern heroine, in both thinking and life, has a strong smell of dregs. It does not require you to kill decisively. It is not that there is no etiquette in the apocalyptic and chaotic world, and I don't think there is anything wrong with being sensible and cautious. She is just too pretentious and pretends not to understand. If it weren't for the author's halo of the heroine to desensitize the villain and make people close to her insane, she would have been hated to death eight hundred years ago! Not by the villain, they are extremely happy, but by someone close to you. You are bullied to death one by one and you still want to fulfill your good reputation. You use your own trivial things to exchange for their trust, and then give everyone's kindness to the villain to step on and play with! Disgusting and frustrating. I thought it was pretty good at first, but then I couldn't help but skip and watch it. At the end, I thought I could finally take off, but then... I regretted it! Why should I take the trouble to order everything later!

The writing is really good, both in terms of conception and logic! However, it may have been voice input, and I didn't go back to check it carefully. There are many inconsistencies in the words and sentences! It's a pity that this is such a good article, otherwise there would have been at least twice as many people clamoring for subscriptions!

The article is very detailed, but also very procrastinating. You have to read it with your brain. Those parents who are too arrogant at the end must read it carefully, otherwise they will not know what they are writing. This article drags on and on and on, which means it is very long-winded.

A capable person works for a naughty person. He is invincible if he has no ability. I also have to say that I have read three novels by the author Jun. The author is really talented. He creates difficulties for himself. The difficult protagonist is always upset. He divides people into several parts and talks about the same thing from midnight to night. He can talk about a few chapters. It is really awesome.

Long-winded, frustrated, and self-righteous. There's no plot.

Confusion, procrastination, verbosity, triviality, too much to describe in one word. The characters and events are not explained clearly. Fill in the gaps while writing, and make patches at the same time. Is this Chinese taught by an art teacher? Or abstraction? Based on a full score of 100, this book can be awarded 40 points.

Rereading it again, until chapter 50 it's all in the parents' house.