Dragon Clan: Under One Person, Lu Tianshi

The plot is confusing. The protagonist has ascended and returned to the dragon world, but he is still a puppet. So what is the point of writing this ascension? If any supporting character can crush the protagonist, does that mean Odin can also be killed by the supporting character? Disgusting to watch

The writing is so good, so good. I tossed and turned in the middle of the night, unable to sleep, and twisted into a maggot-like crazy squirm Unlike most other Lu Mingfei series from the Dragon Clan, most of the other Lu Mingfei fandoms that have a bad look are just story points. The book is very good, but the author's writing style cannot support the story frame. This is the opposite. I feel that even the story frame limits the author's writing style Especially the description of a middle-schooler, young scholar, and a bit mean-spirited, which is very similar to the original work. Although the story is a bit clichéd and deliberate in the portrayal of the minor characters, the flaws are not concealed, and the author's delicate writing style makes it seem very fitting As for the description of the emotional drama, the relationship between Hui Liyi and Lu Mingfei is designed. I used a method that I think is the most appropriate for my feelings. The last time I saw this kind of design where the pear clothes can gain the memory of the original work was in "Dragon Tribe Restarts Life". That book is also one of the Lu Mingfei fanfics that I think is very well written, and the two authors The writing style and the design of the emotional scenes are quite good among the novels I have read Because the biggest problem that many fans have when writing the emotional scenes of the road painting couple is how to design it so that the two people can meet and like each other in a reasonable way. This design directly allows Eri to gain the memory of the original world line. This design can be said to be one of the best ways to prevent the characters from being occ. Although it is a bit tricky, it is indeed much better than the forced copying of many road paintings And the author's description of emotional drama is at the forefront of similar fanfics. This is very rare, because compared to other Lu Mingfei fans, some authors cannot control the amount of sugar, and most of them are pure industrial saccharin. , And even some occ sugar scum that just changed the names of the people without any violation In short, I hope the author can work hard and write well. After all, there are many works that have good starts these days, but few can reach the completion in a down-to-earth manner.

The author is very thoughtful, and it can be seen that a lot of thought has been put into designing the characters, plot, and perfecting the world view. However, the rhythm of the first major plot is too poor, the shots are too messy, and the actual reading experience is very bad. Spoiler Alert . . . . . The plot of original novels should be developed step by step, and fan novels cannot unfold too much content at once just because the original plot and settings are in front of them, especially if they have a large number of original plots of their own. Let's talk about the first big plot. The author has inserted so many forces in one go, including the Korean branch, the Korean "underground" organization, the Chinese branch, the Kassel headquarters, the eight Sheqi families, the fierce ghosts, the nanny group, and the protagonist group. Not to mention whether he can clearly explain the ins and outs and purposes of each force. It is not easy for readers to understand it from the text. Second, the time is too short, there are too many characters, and the author tries to create a certain depth of image for most of the characters. The author's emphasis on character image is an advantage, but too many characters are crammed into the scene in a short period of time. Not only is your own design tiring, it is also a hindrance to readers' understanding of the characters, empathy with the characters, and substitution of characters. Sometimes it is this character, sometimes it is that character. Too frequent camera switching will also make your plot fragmented in the actual reading experience. Third, the priorities are not clear enough. In my personal opinion, before I formally come into contact with Kassel and the mixed-race society, the whole story can be said to have never really started. I still don't know how Lu Tianshi decided to treat the mixed-race society and how to deal with the real theme center-the dragon family. However, the author spent a lot of energy and pen and ink at the node where the story has not really begun and the world has not yet fully unfolded to make an event that could have been less bloated too big and too heavy. And in terms of participating forces, the top leaders of the Sheqi Eight Family and the Menggui Clan came in person, and the top and second leaders of the Korean branch also came. The development speed is too fast. Does the author have the confidence to smash all the plot lines of the original work to build a self-consistent world view that even the original work failed to build?

Ascended Master, the downgrade in strength is too serious , Ascension Immortal Body, now that you have brought it all back, I feel it is a bit too weak. What the Taoist Celestial Master wrote for you is gone at all. Qi Ti Yuanliu has run out of mana after using the Heavenly Record a few times. The Celestial Master's Du feels useless and there is no difference. I feel that you want to write that the Celestial Master's Degree differentiates into eight Qiqi, you also wrote that the Eight Magic Skills have sequelae, so since Tianshidu is the source of the Eight Magic Skills, why can't it be written in a more realistic way, and the protagonist has become an immortal body, and there are sequelae after using the Eight Magic Skills. Is it reasonable? The ascension to immortality is not very realistic at all, but the combat power is improved💩. Moreover, Cassell's writing is also quite weak. The key is that when Chu Zihang and his father met Odin, not so many people discovered it. Those in Japan didn't know the existence of Odin. You just changed it casually and brought Wang Ji to China. You wrote about aristocratic families before, and suddenly they turned into foreign hybrids who came into the country to cause trouble. What is the meaning of an aristocratic family? There is no information at all, and the family's quality is also very low. Norma's global network surveillance gives you a very low quality, and the writing feels very messy. I feel that the author's idea is very good, Tianshi Lu Mingfei, not a setback, has returned with strength. Hui Liyi is reborn, and I want to have a perfect ending, but I feel that the author's vision may not be good enough to write about the dragon clan. Although Jiang Nan is an old dog, his dragon clan is really elegant, and many details are well drawn. The author felt that it was a bit of a running story in the early stage, and going to Chu Tianjiao's basement later felt like copying and pasting. I hope the author will get better and better as he writes more, and I also hope the author will visit Dragon Clan more often.

The writing style is the best among a large number of Lu Mingfei. First, there are too many supporting characters, which affects the perception. After all, they are a fan. Second, there are too few daily routines. I can't hit the CP.

Is this written about the Dragon Clan? Why do you see a question mark on my face?

What touched me the most was the line between Minamoto no Tachibana and Tachibana Masamune. Is this Kagemusha a second set? I stopped watching it after Dragon 3. When I watched Dragon 3, I felt that the scene where Tachibana Masamune was revealed as Herzog was too abrupt. So much of the father-son relationship between Minamoto Tachibana and Tachibana Masamune was foreshadowed, which made me feel that the tears I shed were a joke, and there was a feeling of being deceived. This is the first time I have seen this treatment, and I don't know if other fans have done it this way. This kind of father-son relationship really touched me, and I even think it was handled much better than the original work.

The advantages of this book are: 1. There is no Madonna competing for the Leshan Giant Buddha's position; 2. There is no plot like an old woman's feet wrapped in cloth; 3. There are no supporting characters who are all mentally ill. In addition, even if there is a slight OOC feeling in some places, it is not unbearable. The most important thing is that Lu Mingfei can make a decision before everything happens and before he regrets it. So I very much hope not to enter the palace. PS: Update, the back is not as good looking as the front 😭 It is a backstab.

Lord Shennong! Where is Lord Shennong?

How should I put it? There has always been a class among fans, that is, the original characters are greater than the original plot, the original protagonist is greater than the original plot. In other words, what a group of readers want to see when reading fan fiction is how the original protagonist changes the story, or how the original protagonist has magical brain circuits and divine development in the original plot. But this book gave me the feeling that it relied on some original small characters and original plots to sustain itself, and the story was very exciting. The original story of Dragon Clan actually doesn't have much to tell, and Jiang Nan is not a good storyteller, otherwise there wouldn't be so many bad endings and bad settings. So the fanfic I have always wanted to read is to expand on the settings left behind by Jiangnan, such as what Chinese hybrids look like, what happened in Hamburg Port, and what Feng Long went through in China before he betrayed the Lionheart Society. The Eri in this last book made me see a "living" Eri. Thanks!

Because I haven't finished reading it, I won't comment too much, just a little bit. The great Celestial Master has spent his whole life cultivating his life on dogs. Too stupid, and you can't see any of the style and style of an accomplished person at all.

Why is Tianshi Lu Mingfei so lazy? Anyone can come and beat him up 😅

Don't stay in a harem. Dragons are not suitable for harems. Every girl should have a partner who is devoted to her, instead of having several girls divide one person's feelings. This is unfair to everyone. If you have a harem, you will cancel your subscription.

I've read Chapter 30. Does the author know what he's writing? It's a mess.

I think it would be better to cut off the relationship with my uncle and my sister-in-law's family as soon as possible. This family is disgusting.

There is no distinction between priorities, no understanding of what is being said, and the combat power is ruined.

After reading the comments on Jiajing, I thought I had found a good book, but after I clicked on it, I found that it was the one I couldn't stand after reading 15 chapters.

Yes, yes.. O I want to read a novel! I really want to! Please give me your manuscript... I really want it... I want new chapters... Oh, no, I have become a fool who can't live without seeing the novel... Ahhh, I really like the long new chapters... Yes, I also want to read the author's updates during the day. I want to read them at any time, and I can't think of anything but reading the novel... What I like the most is... The updates. I can't read them for several hours. I can't be satisfied at all... I want to read them for more than ten hours. Please, satisfy me... Please

Okay, I kind of know why it looks messy, bad, and annoying. When the author wrote this novel, he did not write each paragraph from the same perspective. He was always switching the subject of the character. The first sentence in a paragraph was still from the perspective of the protagonist, the next sentence became the perspective of the supporting character, and the next sentence became another perspective. This is a change in the perspective of the character. But I don't know how to change it specifically, because I don't write novels either. The author should pay attention to it. This seems really annoying and very confusing.

The first volume was so confusing to me. If I didn't look carefully, I couldn't count how many forces appeared, let alone the characters. Perhaps in the author's mind, the grand scene in the first volume brought out the intensity of the meeting between the male and female protagonists. But the first volume gave me the feeling that everyone with names in the book came out to show their faces, and the big guys gathered here just to show their faces. There are a large number of original characters and original plots in it. Of course, this is not a bad thing. It also shows that it is a good thing that the author has a complete and detailed outline. However, there is no priority in characterization, and the plot has no rhythm. The entire volume one gave me the feeling that a group of big guys came to travel to this city, and then Fighting, every little character has to run through the revolving lantern before dying. The boss at the end of the level where Lu Hui reunites is a fierce ghost leader who is said to be too big or too small (the big one is sent to do the work of such a dead man, and the small one knows everything about the White King's plan of the general that even the Dragon King doesn't know about), and he hasn't been killed yet. It always feels like an anticlimax. In short, I am still very interested in the fusion setting of one person and dragons. It is even more relaxing to know that the author has a complete outline. Unfortunately, I feel that the author does not have much experience in writing online articles and may not be able to perfectly depict the dragon world in the author's mind. I hope the author can continue to work hard!

I watched the whole episode from the departure from the Nibelungs to the meeting between Lu Mingfei and Eri Yi. It's one thing to have too many new characters, and it doesn't matter if you handle them well. The problem is that the camera is not fixed. The narrative of this plot seems to have no context. The camera cuts back and forth, which is a bit messy. The more important thing in this plot that readers want to see is the road painting meeting. The author's patience in telling this story is below the average level. As a result, one person has to introduce the cover of his household registration book. The author really wanted to introduce so many forces, why didn't he write it when he was in Nibelungen? There, Chu Zihang could ask Ye Sheng in the name of "understanding the mixed-race world" and let Ye Sheng be the commentator.

It's a mess of writing, the first one or two chapters are okay, but is it just shit in the rest of it? 🙄

Let's talk about the advantages. The writing style is delicate. It has a Jiangnan flavor. Many minor supporting characters are written very tastefully. It does not follow the original plot and is quite innovative. Let's talk about the disadvantages: too many characters appear. The story line is too complicated. Li Yi, Wang Jiangyuan Girl, China Executive Department, and unknown hidden forces appear There are too many. I don't understand what story you want to say. The original story is messy and unfocused. I don't understand why you have to bring so many people together at the same time. And the protagonist fights Odin's elemental turbulence. You are Japanese and Korean. Why do people dare to jump to China? And General Wang can casually arrange a group of dead soldiers in China's territory. The Zhulong team of the China Executive Department you wrote is so awesome and so awesome. Directors from other countries come to your China to cause trouble, but none of them. I'm sorry, I got a little excited when I said it, because the writing is really good, and it looks and feels very good. It's a pity that it's more My head hurts from looking at it more and more, and Mingfei is so good at the show, and then anyone can dance in front of him, and then he goes out to practice for decades, and his state of mind has not changed at all. It sounds outrageous. I will complain. If you are willing to change the author, of course it would be best. I really can't read a book that just disappears. If you don't change, you don't think you have seen this. I can read it with gritted teeth.

Save Liu: This has nothing to do with the original work

Thank you readers for your support. Lu Mingfei in the book Jiujiu is constantly upgrading, so he is not the traditional invincible at the beginning, but will become stronger and more exciting later on. Then Jiujiu shamelessly begged all the readers to read it 😭 Readers who support books can help me stop reading the latest chapter for three minutes, and the end page will appear. Jiujiu has always wanted to be on the list and get recommendations, so he is working hard to save manuscripts, and plans to update them every day after it is released. Your support for reading is the motivation for me to update. Jiujiu is here to thank you again... At the same time, Jiujiu will fill in the pitfalls of the original Dragon Clan one by one. In order to do this, it is difficult not to develop its own world plot, because Jiangnan often gives too little information, and there is no way. If you readers have any suggestions or ideas for future plot development, you can also send them in the book review area, and Jiujiu will consider adding them one by one later. Finally, I would like to thank all readers again for your support, thank you!

I have read so many books about Ming Fei Universe, and I feel that this one is the most natural one with Chu Zihang. Most of the others looked awkward or stiff.

To be honest, I can't stand it. The main reason is that I haven't clarified the setting of one person clearly, and why is Lu Mingfei's character still such a bad guy? If his sexual skills are not up to par, he should go back and rebuild his mind.

Run, stop reading. I got a headache after reading Chapter 40. It's so confusing.

The idea is great but the writing is too messy

I listened to more than 100 books, and the more I listened, the more boring I became. There are two stories about people with the surname Feng Mo, and even Jiangnan doesn't have such cool people...