Elf: Start with Travel

Classic dark elf world, dark and incomplete, buying elves on the black market. It's actually a travel article! I'm so happy.

I've been short of books since reading the previous book, Bottom Trainer. I don't know what this one is like.

Dark wind elf fans are crazy about raising prices like they are sick. Why do elf novels engage in dark wind? How would Arceus, a single-universe-level great god, react when he saw this dark and windy world? Each region has a first-level god who can destroy the region. What is the reaction of the first-level god when he sees the dark wind?

Big Rock Snake

To be honest, the author, you have so many settings in your article that are superfluous. The Pokémon world you wrote is not your original beast-control novel. Why did you add so many settings yourself? There are also different shades of rainbow-colored qualifications. Also the junior, middle and senior king champion. There are also some funny ones where your biological parents gave you 700,000 yuan for travel and you still burst into tears. Energy cubes also have junior high, high and top levels, and each level adds 4 small levels. It's really unnecessary.

Why travel with an unknown person? This character is useless to the protagonist's current growth, unless it is set as a genius that can completely keep up with the protagonist's growth, but that would be even more disgusting. The protagonist himself is an excellent nurturer, why would he want to be with this passerby who is weaker than him?

Good news! The penguin stands up! ! !

I don't know how many people will escape from a level classification. You can simply rank 1-10 for novices, 11-20 for juniors, 21-30 for intermediates, 31-40 for seniors, 41-50 for elites, 51-60 for gyms, 61-70 for kings, 71-80 for champions, 81-90 for masters, and 91-100 for leaders. Isn't this okay? The same stage is roughly divided according to level. For example, level 59 is stronger than level 51. What are you divided into: junior king, intermediate king, and senior king? It's really advisable to quit.

After reading a few chapters, I saw the newborn tadpole... I don't know if it was because of Junshui's word count, or what, but I felt that his IQ was too high, and what he said was very unpleasant and stupid.

Author's progress post: Author, have you noticed that your detailed description of the elves themselves and the handling of the battle scenes are not full? I have read many elf fanfics and original works. When reading your elf articles, I always have a dry feeling, just like eating cookies without drinking water. I feel like eating hot tofu in a hurry for the plot direction. For example → When you describe Kodak Duck versus the flying mantis, a boy in black in Joban City, there is room for improvement in the description of the battle and the side command of the protagonist. Why do the trainers of both sides say "What!" Repeatedly when the other elf makes a move? When I think about it, it feels awkward. What is synchronizing with the other party? In fact, it is not necessary. Also, the close-up of the skill of the elf when it moves. The original words are: "The fire dinosaur directly aims at the duck and opens its mouth. The fire energy gathers into flames and rushes directly towards the duck." Your words are not rich and gorgeous enough, leaving the reader with a lack of pictures to supplement the scene of the battle. It can be changed to: "The fire dinosaur directly aims at the duck and opens its mouth." Ba, the air around me suddenly heated up, and bits of sparkling fire energy emerged in the void and quickly gathered in the depths of the open mouth. Boom! The violent red light was ignited in an instant and turned into a fluid beam that shot towards the duck. There was a faint sign of melting on the ground along the way! "You see, readers can have a picture in their minds immediately whether they look at it or listen to it! The same problem also applies when Koda Duck uses his mind to twist the flame rays. There is no strong sense of picture, and readers need to rack their brains to conceive the scene. This is where the charm of writing is reflected. If you write more gorgeously for convenience and do not want to, then readers will suffer. I hope the author can see my suggestion. 🙏

What should I say about this book? He is not a simple anime fan version, you can think of it as the path of a fantasy beast master with elf skin. The setting comes from anime, but elves eat elves, people eat elves, and elves eat people. The author himself also said it in his original text: Destroy childhood and destroy childhood. Therefore, most old fans who like elves themselves will not be able to accept this kind of book (such as me). Those who have seen a little bit, understood a little bit, and like the darker style may find it very interesting. I couldn't accept this setting, so I left and said goodbye 🙂

Isn't it a bit too much to explain? . . And don't you segment it? A long section

I've seen 40 photos of Tadpoles and they haven't evolved yet. It's neither warm nor dark, and it's hard to continue watching.

Level Settings

In fact, I don't have any objection to the dark points in my writing. After all, it's reality. But what's the point of having so many personal settings? Water storage properties allow mosquito-repellent tadpoles to swim freely and reach ducks? How many years have it been since the Shi Huan Gong was changed to the body-fixation method? Team Rainy Day or not Team Rainy Day... I'm speechless🙄

Can the author stop putting information about Pokémon's progress in the text in the future? It feels like it's just to make up for the word count. Just write about the special skills you learned. You can put the Pokémon information in a separate chapter for free, so that readers can know the situation of the protagonist Pokémon, and just keep the Pokémon information updated at all times!

You said that the highly qualified elves you worked so hard to find, even the quasi-gods, are only cyan. How come every opponent you encounter in the future is always a cyan elf?

So this has half a dime to do with comprehensive comics.