Beast Control Starts from Stone

Dear, your efforts defeat 80% of the people in the country! So awesome! As an old bookworm, I dare to give you some suggestions. First of all, I feel that several elements of the novel - characters, plot, theme, and background are not well grasped. In fact, most novel authors cannot excel in everything, but popular works will always have their own outstanding parts in several elements, so as to firmly play with the poor readers in the midst of applause＼(`Δ')/I'm talking about you! "Pokemon Garden Tree", "Pet Charm", "Unscientific Beast Control", "Lord of Mysteries", "I Am Not an Immortal"... So, baby, you don't have a good buying point. Your heroine's personality is too flat and gray. She has no charm, no vividness, and no one knows what her inner motivation is, or what is worthy of liking or projecting affection on her. Most readers who want to relax will not want to see a heroine like this. For example, I changed it like this. Although the heroine has very poor talent, her family background is also not good. But she yearns for the world of the beast master, she longs for fantasy and power! For this reason, she often pursues knowledge day and night. Once, she went on an adventure with a few ordinary people... And from then on, she began her career as a beast master who occasionally dropped bird shit from the sky. Is it attractive? Secondly, look at the product names of popular works, which are themselves a kind of signboard. They all express their themes very clearly and clearly, and are generally very memorable. Some of them will also bring attractive buying points, such as "Unorthodox Beast Controlling", "My Beast Controlling Isn't Really an Evil God". I will make up a few more "My Roommate Has Bird Feathers", "Women Dress Up as Men and Dress Up as Women", "Beast Controlling Makes Me Become a Big-headed Boy". Finally, writing is also very important!

There is a fatal bug in system literature: What is the ultimate goal of the system maker? Is it possible that the system was created just to make it easier to cut the parasitized leeks? The moment the parasitized person matures, will he be eaten as a tonic by the system creator? Isn't the goal of cultivating immortality to transcend the constraints of life and strength? When you are parasitized by the system, don't you become a pig in captivity?

The author may want to be different from others, so he has a bit of a hellish start, poor + poor talent. No matter how difficult the start of the general novel is, at least there is a cheat or direct cheating. The author may have a bad talent to be different from others, and comforts him by saying that there is no difference no matter how talented he is. The question is, is it necessary to have a talent? And there is really no difference, so why would a highly gifted school give bonuses? So there must be a difference, so why did you say this in the first place? Is it to comfort the protagonist or the reader? Then, because talent naturally has its own reasons, but in order to be fresh and refined from the beginning, the author has already set the talent to be poor, so the daughter must be upgraded, so she created a plot that is a bit depressing. Since the head teacher has said that the heroine may be targeted by an evil organization, isn't it better to stay in a school where at least the principal has the ability to teleport, rather than a home where the parents are not beast control masters and therefore do not have a pet beast? No, she was sent home, and then a 250-year-old high-level evil beast master came and gave her a gold finger. He summoned a legendary pet beast that could improve his talent, and also briefly improved the heroine's luck. Just because he was kicked by a newcomer like the heroine, he also liked to give her a pair of silver bracelets. This is a living Lei Feng. He not only helps others, but also takes the initiative to serve as a paving stone. To sum up, my feeling is that the author wanted to be different, but in the end he applied it mechanically, which made the logic illogical and incomprehensible.

The sense of fragmentation is a bit serious. Obviously the heroine has done nothing. First, she has no powerful plug-ins, second, she has no money, and third, she has no idea whether her luck is good or bad. However, the heroine inexplicably keeps winning and leveling up, and is even better than other excellent or wealthy people. I can't figure out how the heroine became stronger. In terms of beast control, I didn't see how the heroine was nurtured or how to train her skills. She suddenly became very strong (meaning she basically never lost in the early stage). This sense of fragmentation is too serious.

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Before reading v, can anyone tell me whether the author has made any progress in the future... To sum up a few problems I have seen now: 1. I am too tired to read it. I also mentioned the specific manifestations. It should be a problem that has not been arranged in detail. I hate other beast-controlling articles, but I can still see the key information I want to read at a glance. This article felt like the entire content changed after scrolling through the page. I turned back and read it sentence by sentence, only to find that there were one or two sentences of information. The ones that left a deep impression on me, such as the scene where Luo Yi's father's dragon parachuted into the school, almost closed the story... There are also some settings that I had to go back and read to find out that Cao had actually written this part... It's amazing, it was the first time I read a story that I could miss so much information. To this day, I don't know which paragraph I missed, so I still don't understand why the heroine can have two pet beasts and why others can't. They are obviously richer than the heroine. Where does the heroine's talent lie? Why haven't I studied it? I remember that the heroine didn't use cheats in this article. What on earth does she use to compete with others... Many small problems are stacked together 2. There is not much interaction with the beasts. It's okay in the early stage. After all, I think it's normal for a stone to have little interaction at the beginning? My preference in reading beast-controlling articles is to look at the emotional interaction between people and beast-controlling. After all, most of them are derived from Pokémon. Who doesn't want a little animal that only sees you and protects you... But I couldn't find a few paragraphs at the end. Even a stone can stick to you when you are sad, and rush into your arms when you are victorious... Some of the details of the interaction are not at all, maybe in the author's mind (sad) 3. After shopping around and seeing many comments, I really feel that it is right. It feels like the heroine has suddenly been said to be very powerful without doing anything... There is no description of how she usually trains or develops skills. She is said to be resourceful and resourceful, and the role of ranking the team as the highlight is given to Luoyi... Speaking of Luoyi, this friend is better off. The heroine does not help when she encounters difficulties, and there is no description at all. She is said to be a good friend. She looks like a eldest lady and chooses a commoner with no bad intentions to have sex casually. Her father's attitude towards the heroine is really disgusting. The shaping of the supporting characters is really not good, and it is not even just a matter of labeling... 4. There are quite a few beast-controlling texts, and Xiao Shitou's opening is quite innovative. I hope the author can write better and better in the future... There are two things I like most about the beast-controlling novels. One is the sense of accomplishment of being rewarded with your companions after hard work, and the other is that there is a group of beings with a common goal who can help you to have complete trust. In one aspect, the whole book will be very interesting.

It's such a dry plot. I don't know if it's a problem with the way it's described. I feel like the dialogue between the characters is like two wooden people reading lines without emotion 😰

Can any kind-hearted person tell me if it starts from 199? Is it all script killing plot? And it's not over yet, it feels like there are more adventure chapters than the protagonist has along the way.

What's going on with your comment section? . I want to refer to it but I didn't see a post

How long has that script been a waste of time? It's really a waste of money to read that script. I want to see the adventures of Xu Qingge and her pet, not to watch the script.

The beginning was confusing, including why my best friend didn't test her talent, the heroine said it wasn't a high-level talent, she thought it was because of a patriarchal family, but it turned out it wasn't, and some inexplicable descriptions. In short, the plot was very confusing.