Beast Control: Start with Simplified Skills

You can choose some pets with minimum qualifications that are pleasing to your eyes or agree with your heart (with suitable personality) to contract. After all, pets with high qualifications are either monopolized, have high requirements for things they need, or are expensive to improve their strength. In the current family environment of the protagonist, it seems that it is not as good as contracting pets with low qualifications. After all, the improvement of skills can drive the upgrade and evolution of pets.

Now that I have read Chapter 2, let me share my thoughts. First, some details were not done well. For example, the protagonist frowned and then found out how many days were left before the high school entrance examination and the quality of his grades. It is not written here how the protagonist knew. (Personally, I feel it is better to add some memories that have been inherited or integrated with the original owner) The second is the golden finger. The simplification was suddenly used. There is no prompt as to how it came about, and there is no writing on the panel. The third is that the author always writes the protagonist's name as Bai Qi It can also be seen that the author's writing style is relatively immature and he can practice more. After writing, the author can check for himself whether there are any irregularities or typos or sentence errors Finally, I wish the author better and better writing😁

Recently, I also want to write a book on beast control. Let me study it with a big teacher first.

What have you written in the last few chapters? It's just a running account.

When the time comes, put the title of your work here and be happy.

Thoughts after viewing. I hope the author can be more careful about the things in the story that can be improved. 1. There are many inexplicable dialogues in the book, which are very dramatic. The dialogues of other characters in the book should be centered around pig's feet, and the worldview can be profiled through other people's words. For example, can the conversations between passers-by A, B, C and D be more normal, without the emojis of asking and answering questions, it would be too embarrassing. 2. For descriptions of pet animals, it is recommended to read animal encyclopedia or cat and dog videos. If you want to write vivid descriptions, it is recommended to check more information. The description is not accurate, and it is difficult to describe in words. 3. Plug-in description, simplification requires several steps and is clear. Your potion can be simplified into fried shredded pork 🙂, which is a bit illogical. Of course, it is my problem to explain logic to you when you write a novel. Finally, stop writing those emotional dramas from rebirth novels that you copied from nowhere. You can write about controlling beasts, and why do you have a brother to counterattack?

A beauty

Um, please, if you are writing about beast control, it is generally best to add the protagonist's enhancement, otherwise this kind of training system will be a novice. There is also a problem with the model you use to learn a skill. Direct synthesis, you might as well say that training it is better than appearing directly. The skill learning system is also messy.

The origin, background, function, conditions, and limitations of Goldfinger are not mentioned, which is very abrupt. Moreover, the protagonist feels a bit like a robot and has no characteristics of his own. If you want to write a good book, the character and world view are extremely important. The first few chapters should be overhauled (personal opinion)

Why is my focus different? I think the author's writing about tigers is too harsh. I suggest writing about cute pets.

Woohoo, something is wrong. The collection is decreasing.

The pet names in it feel like the pet names in Rock Kingdom

Isn't your pet from Rock Kingdom?

The author describes the protagonist's smile too frequently and greasyly, causing strong discomfort.

After reading five chapters, some of the plots are inexplicable. The golden finger suddenly appeared and was used. The conditions and restrictions required for simplification were not explained. The introduction of the mother was too blunt, and the pet's evolution process did not suddenly change its name. That's all. I suggest the author to read it twice after finishing it or read it twice every other day.

There is no description of this world view, just see the chapter where the protagonist competes with others

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After reading more than 20 chapters, the author did not establish the protagonist well. The portrait of the protagonist is too weak.

Skill proficiency improves too quickly, it breaks down easily, and it doesn't feel like you're practicing hard.

I've already given recommendation tickets and monthly passes, but why haven't I updated yet?