The Vigilant Candle of Teyvat

After reading the first and second chapters, I would like to ask, is this fanfic classified as a light novel or a game (limited by ability)? The difference is: I don't believe that with the Eye of God, you can only have combat skills and burst. I can only say that these two skills are limitations of the game, not reality. Without saying anything else, he just condensed the light and hit Basha, and the rock element was playing like gold.

Reference image of the drinks in the protagonist's store.

The strength is advancing too fast, so it is recommended to slightly weaken the golden finger rewards. The scene changes are too fast, and the plot is a bit rough and nonsensical. The exclusive holy relic was obtained too easily, and the power represented something deeper. It's too easy. I've read more than 20 chapters and there are three holy relics. You can divide the demon mission into several small side plots, and you can also arrange for the protagonist to be hit. This kind of plot has ups and downs. There are many eunuchs who did not sign a contract at the starting point. If the plot passes too fast, it will cause an embarrassing situation where there is no story to write. It is normal for the eunuch or the end to be unfinished. Of course, the plot cannot be too slow. If the plot is too slow, you will have read dozens of chapters without even a single climax. Of course, I still hope you can keep up the good work. I am just providing a suggestion. You need to consider it yourself whether to adopt it or not.

What you wrote is fan fiction, not a game. I will play the game myself without you having to reproduce it for me.

The writing feels good, but every time a character appears, nearly half a chapter is introduced, which is too much. Anyone who comes to read Genshin Impact fandom... Probably knows the character. The character introduction is recommended to be 2-3 paragraphs, too many

Go to a female channel, this romance is unbearable.

Looking at Yun Li Mist, a lot of things are mentioned in one stroke, the writing is not good, and the plot description is relatively stiff.

The strength is too fast. I watched the plot of Salt God, and you just walked through the game plot without digging into it deeply. Why don't you just keep the salt cup and directly make salt and sell it? With this thing, except Zhongli who can directly make money, who can compare with you in terms of wealth? It's a business without capital. Getting power is too simple, there is no plot such as cultivation, and there is no battle.

The pace is so fast, would you like to slow down a bit? You can dig deeper into the plot

I personally feel that the continent of Teyvat is like a cave world. In addition, Wings of Wind appear in the collectibles in Honkai Impact. I feel that the universe view of Honkai Impact can be all included. The Star Train has visited Teyvat before, or the Star God has visited Teyvat. At that time, Teyvat was still ruled by dragons, and these worlds or universes are actually in the Sea of ​​Imaginary Numbers or the Quantum Sea (I have not played Honkai Impact, but I have only read a little bit of the plot)

Good guy, you are just kidding, aren't you? You just caught fire when you say it? 😅

Sometimes the role of fan fiction is to make up for the frustrations of us fans of the original work.

This is the first time I have read an article about marriage in the mid-term. Most articles are about marriage in the finale.

The creativity is good, but the plot twists and the like are really blunt.

Very well written, keep up the good work! All the tickets are given to you

Will there be a female protagonist, one or more or none?

I haven't read it yet, but I hope the author can write about Teyvat in his own eyes

There are too many character background introductions, and they all copy the game background stories.

I don't know why the whole book has a Fengyue or Jiangnan flavor. And about the last company, are you sure you didn't collide with Qi Miao?

I want to know, will I get on the bus later? It's the Stardome Train

Let me mention a setting. Forbidden knowledge belongs to the abyssal force. The abyssal force is poison to the elemental force and will always be eroded (this is mentioned in many texts. For example, the Liyue weapon breakthrough material mentions that Morax's sky star will be contaminated)