Full Professional Animal Master

There is too much foreshadowing in the early stage. The protagonist has not yet awakened in Chapter 20. It is too long-winded. The setting should be laid out later. When I read it, it became simpler and simpler. The setting is stacked together and it is annoying. Speed ​​up the awakening of the ability!

I like milk beans and flowers.

Come on, the dialogue in the first few chapters seems to be very delicate, and the emotional expression is not abrupt. I hope it can end from the beginning. PS: The current masterpieces of pet beasts are mainly focused on two points, setting and emotional lines. This means that if there is no excellent setting to pave the way for the reasons for the battle and the battle scenes, you must pay attention to the description of the group portraits (action director: Chong Mei), and only focus on the protagonist ( The protagonist's disaster-stricken physique and aura) readers jump to read in the middle and later stages. Therefore, the protagonist cannot always take the initiative, and can also passively affect the fish pond. The danger can be to underestimate the opponent, or to overestimate the teammates. The same principle is shared, that is, the normal reader's perspective must follow the protagonist's gaze. You cannot make the reader feel that he is good at laning, but that he is good at saving the field.

Beans.

Little fox? . ?

I still hope that the first contracted milk bean will be better

The writing is great, I hope to write more, come on

Doesn't anyone feel that the water is out of the sky? From Chapter 1 to Chapter 20, I have always been in the water, water setting, water background, water family background, and the summary of the plot is that in school, for the first time, you have a thousand-year-old second child who has awakened, and someone who doesn't know if it is a female supporting character mentioned it. Three awakening opportunities in three years. This second time, you picked up a mistake on the way home but didn't pick it up, and then started to water family members. Take a closer look at how many plots you have in the first twenty chapters? Is it necessary to write something so detailed at the beginning? Oh, there is also a foreshadowing, that is, the missing ones, but these can be revealed bit by bit along with the plot, including the foreshadowing, and then awakening in chapter 25. There is no need to write some general settings, and there is no need to write long and lengthy paragraphs about your own settings. Wouldn't it be more concise? The last few pets that have been brought home can also be said to be family members. I don't say whether they will have a contract, but will they stay with them until the end? If you don't know how, don't spend so much time introducing and writing about psychology and daily life one by one. If you can, it's even more unnecessary. Write about daily training, daily companionship, and daily battles. After writing this book, people will remember them vividly and with their own characteristics.

I don't know why Golden Chapter 3 uses a lot of space to write about smoking. High school students, what concept is the author conveying? Can't socialize without smoking?

I hope I'll wake up in the next chapter, it's been a bit long.

I can only say that it is watery... I always say that I can skip a bunch of chapters, and then skip a few times, and it's gone... It feels very boring if I haven't seen anything. It feels like it is better to scatter it into the normal chapters and occasionally talk about it. There are so many chapters that people don't like it... Although I can skip it, there are not many chapters that I can read if I skip it... Unless I keep it for a while.