Entertainment: Stepmother's Daughter Is Actually a Future Queen

This complaint was written before the author overhauled it, so please read the details before talking about it. In addition, the author said that most of the poisonous points have been revised. The content of this article contains spoilers for all readers' complaints. Be careful: The biggest problem with this book is Su Qingtong. At first, I guess the author wanted to follow the example of "The Stepmother's Troublemaker Is My Ex-Girlfriend" to write two protagonists, but it turned out to be too difficult (later) It can be seen from the above that Su basically has no sense of existence. It is obvious that the author also discovered the problem and gave up the writing method of the two protagonists). At the same time, Su's setting is simply full of poisonous points. He should not have set up soul penetration from the beginning, and then broke up when the male protagonist did not make any mistakes (this is simply unacceptable in a male channel. The pure love God of War will let the author know a hundred ways of death for a minotaur). Let's talk about other characters. There is nothing wrong with borrowing real characters. After all, the author can simply apply the settings directly. First of all, Father Lin's operation back then was too cowardly. How could a woman's cheating and giving her a little money turn her into a man who committed domestic violence? ? ? Even if it is to create confrontation and conflict, there can be other ways. In the end, both parties can choose to divorce peacefully because of money, but there is no need to create confrontation in this way. There are also some other sentence problems. You can read the book reviews and many book friends have pointed them out. It has some of the most unacceptable mistakes in male videos. I hope that there will be no more pornographic stories later, such as Su filming kissing scenes with other men.

I finished following the latest chapter today. To be honest, I feel much better than before, but there are still things worth complaining about. First, I hope the author can reduce the specific content of the movie to be made. After all, everyone has seen these relatively popular movies and everyone knows the specific content. This is also one of the main reasons for being trolled. Second, there is something wrong with some of the previous chapter titles. That is, the title of this chapter has nothing to do with the content of this chapter or it only has a little relationship at the end, but this title is closely related to the next chapter. It may also be that the author has broken it out of context. Third, IMHO, the name of the book doesn't seem to match the specific content of the book (in fact, I wanted to complain about this before, but this problem is not the biggest problem, so I didn't complain), and it seems that there are not many male videos that can continue to read after seeing this name. ps: Don't let Su or Huang film kissing scenes with others or be suspected of being raped (even if the hero arrives in time), otherwise no one will be able to save this book.

A brief introduction: The male protagonist and the female protagonist were a couple who were in first love, but the female protagonist was taken away from her and awakened the system, and then dumped the male protagonist. Now the author wants the two to fall in love. Let's not talk about the issue of whether to dump them or not. Your girlfriend was taken away from her. Why the hell is this not revenge for killing his wife?

The male protagonist's mother abandoned her family when she was 3 years old for 20 years, and they were still in high school.

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I have always been frustrated. When I read Chapters 6 and 7, I felt that there were too many contradictions. It started with the ex-girlfriend looking down on the male protagonist before entering the house, and then beheading the male protagonist when she came ashore. Then there is the arrogance of the leading online novel platform that makes the protagonist work for nothing. If the protagonist doesn't do it, it will destroy the protagonist. Then the protagonist's mother betrayed and cheated on him, causing his father to bear the infamy and falsely accused him. He had seen the protagonist for more than ten years, and he had lived in the days of being a master, and now he has come back and used the same trick to frame him, eating steamed buns with human blood, and so on. So many frustrations and contradictions are revealed in less than 10 chapters.

To avoid lightning, the girlfriend is taken away from her at the beginning. The person who takes the body first kills the lover and breaks up with the male protagonist directly. I guess the author may be a woman so she substituted the heroine, but in this male-driven novel, it is extremely toxic.

To summarize: the author fits my stereotype of rappers very well

Let me tell you my personal opinion. The first part was good, but the later parts got worse. The character of the heroine is very dislikeable. She has awakened a system and treats herself as a character. She is complacent with a small achievement. Although the book does not say it clearly, you can still feel her disdain for the male protagonist through the screen. She feels that the male protagonist is no longer worthy of herself as the sweet girl of heaven. She even let the agent speak rudely to him... What kind of virtue? ! It is recommended that the author make changes🙂🙂

Leave a post, as long as the author's outline is not too big, this book will definitely be popular, the cadence is so well arranged, please update it ❤️

Rely on the defense, if you don't know how to write a male video, don't write it

It's so poisonous, imagine your girlfriend being taken away from you, dumping you, and seeing you again after a few years to fall in love with you. . . What ntr. . .

I was dizzy. I didn't know what the protagonist was going to do. One moment he was passing the drama test, and the other moment he was not taking the test. Others were there. The protagonist went to set up a street stall to find an actor. After the actor auditioned, he was struggling. The actor was poached and he snatched it at a high price but could not get it back. Then the plot suddenly disappeared. The protagonist went to audition again, passed the exam and then said he would not go to school. In the next chapter, he suddenly went to school again. I really don't know what the protagonist is doing.

I only read that one if it said it would be popular if it was written. What the hell is this? His eyes are cold at all times, and the villain has no brains. It's not even sure whether this novel would have been popular ten years ago. It was just brainless, and it didn't even add to the fun.

This protagonist is also enough. It is inexplicable that he has any hatred and deep suffering. Isn't it just a premature love breakup? They act like sworn enemies. His eyes glowed coldly at every turn. When we fell in love in junior high school, we were not allowed to break up.

Brothers, run away, this book is rubbish

Please leave some words before deleting the book ———————————————————— First of all, I personally have been supporting it from before it was put on the shelves to now. I also like this kind of author who is willing to modify the previous plot after pointing out the shortcomings. But can the author consider your own book before making changes? The plot of your book is not a unit drama (unit drama novels are infinitely terrifying, welcome back to the game world, etc. The plot is strung together by small dungeons, so modifying the content of one dungeon will not have much impact on the subsequent text). What you have changed is the basic setting, which will cause your current outline to be different from the original one. Different (if any), plus you are not easy to create a positive heroine, which leads to problems ———————————————————— First of all is the issue about the creation of your heroine Mu Rufeng (both the title and introduction of the book suggest that the heroine Mu Rufeng was at the beginning). The initial setting was time travel, but later it was changed to soul-changing. Because your initial time travel caused controversy, you changed it to soul-changing, but you didn't consider that your soul-changing would be even more controversial! The initial image of Mu You was created as a cold, ruthless woman. When Mu's original appearance appeared, it gave people a selfish feeling. Even if it was later mentioned that if this incident had not happened, it would be useless for Su to have died long ago, because to the readers The first image is already here, not to mention that Mu's character has barely changed in your plot Then there is the emotional line. Before Su came out, I could say that I was not in a hurry about Mu's emotional line, but when Mu explained it to Lin, I knew it was no longer possible. Didn't the author feel that regardless of whether she is a senior, Gao Zhi is better than Mu Pei as the heroine? ? ? Don't you feel that Mu's emotional scenes are much less than that of Senior Sister and Gao Zhi? ? ? Originally, I could understand that the main plot would be related to Mu, so I wasn't in a hurry, but now? Why should Mu be the heroine now? Is she "Su Qingtong"? Finally is the plot. Here is an analysis of a small branch and a big plot. The big plot is the period from Mu confessing to Lin to Lin picking up Su. If your character creation and plot are good, this paragraph should be an emotional explosion for the readers. This plot involves Mu's exit and Su's entry. This paragraph should make readers feel "Knife" due to Mu's exit, and "Sugar" moved by Su's entrance, but what about it? Only the latter (for me). Why, because nothing about your portrayal of Mu is in line with my point of view, anything. The small branch line is Mu Bei Refrigerated. The original text system mentioned that Mu should wait for a while. According to the principle of Chekhov's Gun, your subsequent plot should be about Mu waiting for an opportunity and then taking advantage of this opportunity. But what about the facts? The fact is that Mu finally relied on the system to solve the problem. So what's the point of you mentioning this? Is it to make Mu wait for a while and then spend some points to let Mr. Points take care of him? Or is it because your royalties are so short?

A bunch of bloody plots, it's hard to wrap up

The author is totally messing around, disgusting bunch. I won't talk about the protagonist, but at least it's somewhat reasonable. (The two heroines exchange souls) The heroine is a visitor from another world➕an indigenous paralyzed little singer➕system, and then she is a pure waste, owing 200 million in liquidated damages in 2 years. Then find a showdown with the male protagonist. The male protagonist went to find the real Su Qingtong again. Damn it, I really can't understand it. A word of advice to everyone: Don't watch it, it's disgusting!

Good book, quite innovative, excellent plot, smooth plot, no obvious poisonous points

It's over. I was so disgusted by it. I was so angry when I saw the conflict in the art exam. I was so angry that I wanted to kill someone. Damn it, I really don't want to give up the book without cursing. Really, this is the first book.

The heroine of the co-author was taken away from her and separated from her.

It's hard to do. The more I read, the more distressed I feel. I feel like this is a fun story. The plot is not exciting at all. I feel like the author wants to make a plot, but the plot can't be pushed forward. I keep talking about it and explain it. So I went to Infernal Affairs and directly talked about two pieces. In the previous chapters, almost every There are too many *explanatory texts* in Zhangdu, and there is actually very little real plot development. It feels like something that can be completed in a few pictures has to be solved Dude, did you just swipe down and skip a few pictures, and the plot can still be seamlessly connected, or even make no progress at all? It's very rewarding Anyway, it's the author, come on, I can't stand it anymore, it's smooth.

I didn't finish the first chapter. It was acceptable for the stepmother to take care of her daughter, but then the ex-girlfriend? How old are you? Your ex-girlfriend three years ago in your senior year of high school? How horny are you? Is the heroine still an actress, or someone with no background, the most beautiful woman in the world? This kind of person has never been hidden? Have you ever had any close contact while filming? Who would believe you when you say she is innocent? It's so cruel, you actually like broken shoes?

I haven't written a review for many years. I really can't stand this book. It's extremely toxic. I really shouldn't read it...

I keep turning the pages and can't read it. It feels so rubbish.

I'm going to wash my eyes. What the hell is this? It's so messy.

The author has to fight a clever and disgusting person? Do you have to give it a couple setting? You are really disgusting!

I don't understand at all what setting the author has set for the protagonist, it's so confusing.

I haven't read the book, but I have collected it because the author's attitude is very good. I hope your next book will be better. If the author plans to write his next book on Qidian Men's Channel, you can take a look at my suggestions. 1. Market research. The author obviously has not read many books about male videos and understands the poisonous points of male videos. If the author can accept it, you can go to Qidian. Com and watch it for a while to get a general understanding. 2. From the perspective of writing style, the author's style of female porn is quite strong. If possible, it is recommended to read books by male porn authors. I really can't accept it, so I think I should at least read a few books written by female authors that became popular on male channels, such as Golden Jasmine and Kissing Pigs Around the Corner. I quite like the books written by these two female authors. 3. Communicate. When writing a book, you should talk to some experienced male video authors and ask them if there will be any problems with your writing. This can avoid mistakes to a certain extent.