There's a Big Problem with My Narration About Cultivating Immortals

It's a bit uncomfortable to watch, but I thought it was coming out. Some places forcefully push the plot, and it is obviously solved casually. I have to forget it, next time It's like the protagonist kills the enemy's whole family, and there is still a boy. When the protagonist sees it, he just says forget it, and kill him next time. Then the boy caused a lot of trouble to the protagonist, and the protagonist paid a lot of money to kill him This kind of writing is to forcefully push, and directly give the protagonist wisdom.

There is no difference between worshiping this master and not worshiping him. He just gave him a storage ring. There is nothing in other caves, and his identity is kept secret. 6

The writing is good, but the plot is very toxic, so I gave it up.

Dear readers, it is not that the introduction has not been written, but it has been blocked. It is estimated that it will take six days to be revised again. Please bear with me.

If the story of Wen Ruyi's father is not handled well, the book will be ruined. This is a major poisonous point.

The hook is too big, just become an immortal and that's enough, why write anything else!

Buy a push button and slightly change the front. It should attract some people. The main thing is to see how the plot goes.

The writing is very good, the plot and writing are both good, keep it up!

Are you a newbie practicing? I'm afraid I'll cut it off at some point.

Love it, love it, the writing is very good. Friends who are in a book shortage, I recommend you a fantasy novel about immortality, "Don't leave too much blank space"