Qian Jin

The writing is a bit white, but it's well written and very interesting.

Shock! ! ! ! Douluo fan writer switches to History Channel! Is it the loss of morality or the distortion of human nature? !

In the situation of the protagonist, the best he can do is to bring peace to the world, but it is impossible to rule the world. Moreover, there is a suspicion of cheating in order to bring peace to the world. Separating one party from another is the most likely scenario, but it will still depend on his son later.

Putting aside nonsense literature? The protagonist has no character development and the plot has no fluctuations. The reason why Deng Ai went from an oil depot clerk to a general was that he was directly promoted by Sima Yi when he was a lieutenant. The protagonist comes from a poor family and cannot take the conventional promotion channels. Even the famous families will look down on you. This mung bean soup will kill you in my junior high school writing!

There is a saying that when the protagonist surnamed Li establishes a dynasty, he doesn't want to have a country name other than "Tang".

? ? ? Those who write about Douluo come to write about history? ? Can you move your writing?

At that time, if you are cautious and wait for Sima Zhao's death, there should be no powerful people left, right? , After the chaos of the Eight Kingdoms, occupy one side first and develop slowly. When the chaos is almost over, you can clean up the mess. The Sima family is unpopular anyway.

Some people say that it is a running account, but I think it is good. Just write down the important events carefully. If you write down all the details carefully, maybe the plot will only reach the point where the protagonist is managing the place in Jingzhou, and it will be too watery.

It feels like the protagonist is a boar in heat, and everyone wants to have sex with her when she sees it.

Awesome, your writing style is as good as the compositions written by primary school students.

Drag the Sima family to Luoshui to exterminate the clan, and there will be reincarnation in the way of heaven.

Seeing Chapter 14, after nearly three years, not one of the ten women was pregnant, awesome The protagonist, a eunuch, still wants to rebel? This is ancient times. No one will follow the eunuchs when they rebel.

Without detailed details, it feels like a notepad, not like a novel

The protagonist is too old. The Eight Kings Rebellion should have lasted for decades. The protagonist is now in his 40s, and he will be in his 70s before the world is pacified.

Author, are you planning to finish writing the protagonist and then write about his son? The main character is so old now. Write more generations, write it as a family.

With your description, he is dead in the second picture, with ancient shoulders running through.

The good situation in the former Yan Dynasty was ruined. When foreigners took over the Central Plains, they fell too quickly. The same was true for the Northern Wei Dynasty and the Jin Dynasty later.

When the Eight Kings Rebellion happens, the protagonist directly threatens the emperor to control the princes. Just like the story of Sima Zhao, there is no need to worry about not being able to bring peace to the world.

The writing style is too plain. Historical novels cannot be written by ordinary novice writers.

If I remember correctly, after Deng Ai died unjustly, his subordinates did not receive any rewards. On the contrary, Zhong Hui, who really rebelled, only implicated his adopted son, and some of them were even pardoned later. As for Zhong Hui's subordinates, they also received rewards.

I think it's pretty good, keep writing.

Keep up the good work, you write well, I always support you.