Under One Person: Young Man, Do You Want Light and Shadow Armor?

The author is here to make money. After three chapters, he only has the progress of one chapter by others. When I am blowing the light and shadow armor, I don't think it is like blowing the light and shadow armor again. It is more like saying that I am here to make money. What can you do to me? I am so cool and what can you do to me? If you want to comment and scold me, you have to pay 30 starting points first. Author, you are so stupid, how come you have the nerve to charge a starting price of 30?

What are you writing? Didn't you go to school? The sentences are repeated and the language is procrastinating. Can't you see the problem yourself?

I can't figure out why there's so much nonsense. It's so fucking annoying.

Combining armor + layout + modern background Chinese comics, I think I can write a lot, why is it so good? After the release of the chapters of more than 20,000 words, 80% are copying the plot + a little change, 15% are nonsense, 5% are to promote the plot. The chapter name really represents the entire plot. It is really difficult to subscribe to this quality, I can only say wait and see 😅😅

The first three chapters are either nonsense or a lot of settings. They basically have this sentence structure. It feels like a primary school student writing a composition by forcing the number of words as shown below There is no foreshadowing afterwards. Chen Duo becomes an employee of the protagonist, and there is also a long inner monologue. You can read it for yourselves, I can't stand it

Water, too watery, Water God Gonggong The author also found it uncomfortable to read the paragraphs. Basically, it is a large paragraph of text with small paragraphs in the middle, such as: Also. That's it. As a matter of fact. The author still has some mistakes in this segmentation. Zhang Huaiyi's surname is Zhang, and his surname was not Zhang before.

There's too much nonsense, Che Lulu talks back and forth 💩

My understanding is that fan fiction is based on the premise of the original work, and writes different stories because of the protagonist. In other words, you write your own story within the framework of the original work. A novel that combines two works is relatively easier to write. The most taboo thing about fan fiction is that it is either a large original work or a large number of secondary settings. A good fan fiction is based on the main framework of the original work, because the addition of the protagonist changes it, so there are different stories, and the content of the original work is completely You can use one or two paragraphs to replace it, mainly because the protagonist brings different plots. For example, the short plot of Zhang Chulan and Zhang Lingyu's meeting is similar to the original work. Just use one or two paragraphs to describe it, just go through it in one stroke, and then continue The rewrite is different. In addition to Shui's original work, what I want to complain about the most is why the protagonist has to summon the Flame Dragon Armor, and on the premise of having the Summoned Emperor Armor, he is particularly rare for other people's Five Elements Armor. Can't he directly summon the Emperor Armor? What I hate the most is hiding it, and saying that using the Emperor to kill monsters will reduce the price. This reason is too far-fetched. According to your thinking, the Old Heavenly Master cannot take action against Quan Xing. After all, there are only one or two heroes who can compete with the Old Heavenly Master, and the price will be reduced when attacking others. What I think The method is that the protagonist only summons the Emperor's Armor. First, it can free up the position of the Flame Dragon Man and allow the Five Elements Armor to be complete. The protagonist's Emperor's Armor directly jumps out of the Five Elements. Second, the protagonist can become familiar with the Emperor's Armor and develop the ultimate Emperor form from the junior Emperor as soon as possible. Alas, I won't say it anymore, this book is not my cup of tea, and I wish you good luck with your book.

The shortcomings of the book written by Bao Xinren are too obvious, there are too many redundant things, the text is so long that I can't stand it, and the logic in it is also very rounded, which makes it very strange to read. Uncle, I felt extremely uncomfortable reading it. If it weren't for the fact that I really liked the subject matter, I wouldn't have been able to read a single chapter.

It's so cool. What I originally wanted to say in one sentence was three to four hundred words long, and I didn't say it once, but repeated 100 words three times. It turned out to be 300 words. I had a good idea, but I wasted it.

I finished reading it in one go. I can read it. The writing is trivial, but there is a lot of nonsense, and the same sentence is often repeated back and forth. If you follow up one or two chapters, it will be as if you have not read it.

The idea is great, but the plot and writing are flawless. It feels very draggy.

I've been working here for 3 or 4 days, but you haven't made any progress at all. You're really good.

I feel that there is no need to make a false history. There are too many loopholes. It is obviously the first time in the film world.

The author of this surname is a middle school boy

There are too many meaningless repetitions of words. I write it twice in one sentence. I'm really speechless.

Author, please don't repeat some unnecessary words, they look uncomfortable.

Although many people have said it, I have to say it again. After reading more than a dozen chapters, it's too watery. I keep saying Che Lulu's words.

With this level of garbage, there are still hundreds of subscriptionsread

Welcome all readers to provide valuable suggestions.

This novel keeps repeating explanations, asking questions, repeating it several times, and the word "water" is used all the time.

Understand?

Do you understand?

Signed, begging to read the data every day, 4000~5000 words will be updated steadily every day before it is put on the shelves

What can be explained clearly in a thousand words, you failed in five chapters

Finally back! ! ! 😭😭😭

The sea, why are you so watery?

Why are there two of them?

There is a lot of nonsense, and the author keeps saying he wants to change it, but the result is still the same.

Come on, author👏After all, there are very few armor articles at the starting point. I hope it can be improved.