Douluo: Travel Through the Secret Room at the Beginning and Inherit Qian Xunji

Xiao Heizi, remember to bring eggs when you go to court😏

First of all, the name is a bad joke, and secondly, Tang San was not born at the time you traveled through Did he offend you? ? ? Tang Hao provokes you? ? ? ? Did Yu Xiaogang offend you? ? ? Write a profile of three people who have absolutely no conflict with you and understand them all.

If you think there is something wrong with the protagonist's name, please go to the relevant work, where there is a detailed explanation, thank you.

It's very important to follow up. If you don't follow up, there will be no recommendations. Without recommendations, there will be no traffic. Once it is on the shelves and no one will read it, you can only cut the books based on the situation. Although I may still work hard to finish the book, after all, it is a debut novel. (╥╥) Catch-up standards: Accounts with recharge records within three months catch up to the latest chapter, stay in the latest chapter for at least 30 seconds, and turn the last page, it is counted as catch-up. Thank you everyone! Bow!

I found a few maps of Douluo Continent from the Internet. I hope it will be helpful to everyone 🤓. If there is any infringement, it will be deleted immediately

Ju Douluo Yue Guan

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I've read Chapter 38. Let's talk about the shortcomings first. The corruption plot in Wuhun Temple is a bit boring, especially the plot where the protagonist angrily denounces the ministers. It's really a joke. Although the starting point is good, it should be to play the hegemony style. The idea is good, but there is no need to engage in a Qing Dynasty plot. Secondly, when the protagonist talks to the great elder, the tone should be more mature. The psychological description should be written so that the protagonist is not sure how to replace the guy's conversational tone. Maybe it would be good. Let's talk about the advantages next. The fan work is to make up for the difficulties in the original work, and to change the plot with his own foresight. This point can be said to be above the passing line, and there are many cool points, such as using techniques that are useless to him. The announcement of a continent (increasing the difficulty of Tang Dog), the artificial soul ring, the Kunpeng soul ring (unfortunately there are too few descriptions), the slap in the face of Yu Xiaogang, etc. I think it is very interesting. If the following plot can change the world, it will really make people want to stop. It would also be good if you could include some female supporting characters 😍. In addition, please write more plots about Wuhun. What attracts me in Douluo Dalu is always the plot about Wuhun upgrade setting. I have always felt that other plots are not good. If this is really the first time for the author to write a book, the level is really good and the future is promising. (The above are all my suggestions. If you think they are useful, adopt them. If they are not useful, just complain about me.)

The first four or five chapters are very good, but the later chapters are a bit unsatisfactory.

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Seeing that the current chapter is 185, which is nearly 500,000 words, it can be considered that I have followed it all the way, so I want to make a brief evaluation. Overall, this book has good and bad points, and it is a book that can be read. According to my feeling, the author has made obvious progress in this process. This book has many advantages. Personally, what stands out the most is the author's completion and expansion of Douluo's worldview, cultivation system, martial soul theory, the laws of the divine world, and the political policies of the two empires. Second, it is not because of Tang San that we completely deny the other characters related to him in the original work. It also allowed me to experience a little bit of the feeling of the protagonist coming, breaking the original destiny, and giving other characters in the original work a chance to come back. Third, when dealing with Tang San, Tang Hao, Yu Xiaogang and other villains, I had new ideas and played with some bugs that appeared in the original work. It was still very interesting, except that the plot in this aspect seemed quite enjoyable and the reading experience was good. This book also has many shortcomings. First of all, it is the first time for the author to write a book as a college student. With this level, it can be considered as average. However, there are obvious deficiencies in the writing style and plot tension. Secondly, the coherence in plot arrangement is still not enough and needs to be strengthened. Furthermore, there are the poisonous points at the beginning, the biggest of which is the protagonist's reform of Wuhun Palace, which is really a bit discouraging. I feel that newcomers can skip those chapters and it will not affect the subsequent reading experience. Finally, it's a matter of mentality. Both the Blue Silver Forest chapter and the Killing City chapter were obviously a little impatient, and I didn't finish what I wanted to write, which is a pity. Maybe it's because of the performance? In short, I hope the author can calm down and finish what he wants to write and make the whole book more complete. We also hope that we can continue to make progress and bring our readers a better reading experience. Be sure to finish the book, don't be a eunuch!

Ahem, okay, let me recommend some books for you!

The author, please work hard😁😁

The Silver Dragon King is awesome😍😍😍

Hello, I am an eighty-year-old grandma. I am bored at home. My child got me a tablet. I accidentally saw your novel. Why is it not finished? Can you update it quickly? I am old and can read a little bit. I will put my ass here. Remember to kick me if you update it.

From Baidu, Silver Dragon King photo, super beautiful 😍

Come on, author, I am very optimistic about this book. I must not be a eunuch! It would be better if the number of updates could be increased. 4000+ Per day is really too little. 🙂

Don't inherit the soul ring, reabsorb it yourself and start at least 50,000 years ago

Wishful thinking means that you don't have to hunt soul beasts to obtain soul rings and soul bones, so you can live in peace with soul beasts. This is a common problem among fellow Douluo people. Huo Yuhao in the original novel also thinks so. Look at the situation of soul beasts after the establishment of the Spirit Transferring Tower system. You will laugh to death because they are becoming extinct even faster. If you can store souls, you can hunt and preserve them on a large scale regardless of the wishes of the soul beasts. You can create artificial souls, but the soul beasts are really useless, and they only remain as enemies and high-threat creatures.

Regarding the corruption problem in Wuhun Palace, wouldn't it be possible to solve the problem by simply asking them to swear by Wuhun not to commit corruption, betrayal, or increase their salary when they join? This is not reality.

Very good, borrowed from Sunlight Douluo (no irony, Zhengchou didn't watch it)

I feel that the quality of the starting point is not very good, either it is a bad street, the protagonist forcibly subdues his intelligence, the harem is opened inexplicably, or it is too watery to kill Luo Liba.

There is a problem with the description of Bibi Dong's martial spirit. You wrote that the possessed martial spirit was like Luo Sanpao's disembodied martial spirit, but you forced him to write it as a summoner.

The timeline is so confusing. When Tang Hao hugged God King Tang San, Tang Yuehua was pregnant? And from Chapter 27 to Chapter 158, a total of 6 years have passed? Looking at it this way, Tang San, Tang Yin and Qian Renxue are all about the same age? (I jumped from Chapter 27 to Chapter 158) Can anyone explain it to me?