Jiangye: I Am the Immortal of This World

I tried too hard to write what I wanted to write, but when I wrote it it seemed nondescript.

After reading the first twenty chapters, I feel that it is either good or bad for the time being. . So keep it. . . Let's wait and see when it reaches 100. I should be able to taste it by then, okay?

The protagonist has not yet become an immortal, but he is already using immortality to decorate himself. I feel that what I wrote above already has a sense of overlooking all living beings and being ruthless, but the realm of the protagonist is still so low.

The more I write about it, the worse it gets. The protagonist's position is that there is no such thing as Taipingdao, which does not save people or spread the word. Then he says that the people in Tiankeng, Foshan are unconscious, and finally helps Buddha. As for the position, I really regretted chasing it after I accepted it. The more I wrote, the worse it got. I had long known that Sangsang was Haotian, and here I was killing the daughter of the underworld with others. Didn't I use myself to push the numbers? Taipingdao, now the whole world is punishing the Tang Dynasty, your Huangtian should be established, should you wait until everyone is dead before you establish it, and you should be established again, Taipingdao is either you tie a yellow belt yourself or Taipingdao. If you want to save people, develop, and have food to eat, do you think those in the Yellow Turbans only followed Zhang Jue because he was a good man? They only followed Zhang Jue because he had food to eat. Stop writing, delete the book

Too literary and young, the protagonist's setting cannot support this pretentious writing style

The protagonist's life experience is not enough to achieve the depth that the author wants to describe, which will make a lot of pages seem like idle moaning and lack of connotation.

I hope the author won't write so many personal things. People who agree may like it, but people who don't agree will find it very annoying.

Tmd, it makes me sick to see the protagonist being superior, just like giving alms, how could the author write it?

I'm really numb. I regret not reading the comments. I don't know what you are pretending to be. You are talking about Taipingdao. You should accept your subordinates and organize them. Just pretend to be awkward. You are a group of awkward people 🥵

When I came out, Zhuangzi's sword skills and three feet of sword energy chopped off a person's head and left him speechless. After finishing the work, I lowered myself to go to the academy to participate in the second floor. I understand that you want to participate in the plot, but don't be embarrassed.

I don't have enough skill to write deeply. . . Obviously there is a good example of Lu Ke Qi Yuan that can be used as a reference to create a "real fairy" feeling, but it is a bit different.

Your status is too high and your behavior does not match. As a disciple of the Supreme Master, why should you go to the academy? Why bother with the plot? That's someone else's chessboard, can it be compared with Taishang's? Haotian? Master? Academy? You are nothing in front of the Supreme Being. You may not be qualified to be a chess piece of the Supreme Being. You want to save the world and destroy the heaven. Not only do you not take any action, but you also go to participate in the original plot and let others take advantage of you? Do you have any awareness of being a disciple of the Supreme Being? If you can't jump out of the plot, let alone transcendence later, what kind of person is not strong enough to jump out, Haotian dares to take over Taishang Karma?

Just pretend, you can't pretend to be in that state😰

Brothers, invest with confidence and there will never be any updates. If you can get high-quality products in the future, you can climb Mount Taishan at night! Let the sticker serve as proof!

Can you write well? Look at your broken sentences. You, the author, look at my broken sentences. How about it? Does it look like yours?

When I read Chapters 38 and 39, I was thinking that the rule in other academies is that a big fist is a sign of etiquette, and the same rules apply in Jiang Ye's world. It's not always the case that you are so noble and will run to say something. I feel like the protagonist is mentally ill.

What is Goba written here? In the fantasy world, we always talk about fairness and injustice. If you don't practice well, then you will be invincible in the world and suppress all dissatisfaction. This is what a practitioner should do.

It is said that he is a true cultivator of Taoism. Where is he really? Where is the repair? I read more than ten chapters and it poisoned me to death.

I can't stand it. The words spoken by a time traveler are tactless and do not conform to the way of speaking in the original work.

If you want a woolen girl and don't drive, you are simply a eunuch cultivating immortality.

This author is both ignorant and arrogant. It doesn't matter if his words don't convey what he means. The problem is that he dares to explain some existing rankings himself. I also have some knowledge, saying that the Chang'an city wall can accommodate four horses galloping, hahaha, is it so thin that it is a capital city wall?

This book is almost exactly the same as Journey to the Heavens Starting from Jiang Ye. I don't know if it is the same author or who copied whom. Looking at the catalog, they all read Jiang Ye ~ In the Snow ~ Journey to the West, and the teacher is still the Old Master of the Wilderness.

Poisonous