The Biting Kale Master of Hogwarts

As bland as water and a bit boring and watery

Voldemort: "I have killed hundreds of people! Why don't you surrender to me!" Protagonist: "Oh, that's good (applause)... What about yesterday." Voldemort: "Sir, just call me Little Tom. Come on, please take a seat. (Shivering)" Nothing else, I just suddenly thought of this joke

The author writes well, but the narrative is too bland and there is no head-on conflict between the game and real-life magic. Moreover, the protagonist has been hiding his talent, resulting in no ups and downs in more than 20 chapters. I hope to show his talent more, or create a villain like Poacher (I don't believe this thing will disappear). There is no conflict and there is really no feeling.

Come on, come on, some of the skills in the game are powerful in reality, but they are a bit dull after all. It would be even better if they could be combined with some spells.

It feels too bland. Such a big hook doesn't show at all And I actually went to the Badger Yard.

When I read Chapter 6, I don't know if the author is good or not, but the author must not be good enough. As readers, we know that the protagonist will definitely go to Hogwarts. The Legacy of Hogwarts at the beginning gave the protagonist the strength not to go, and then the author wrote that the protagonist did not want to go. This plot is very appetizing, and then the author poured me a bowl of boiled water.

I was given such a big hangup at the beginning, and I don't know how to write it later. Either the power will collapse, or the protagonist will be overwhelmed.

The writing style does not feel like online writing, it feels like publishing a physical book, and it has a somewhat literary youth feel. In addition, the protagonist's personality is a bit awkward

How should I put it, I have read the book and it doesn't feel like it was written by a newcomer. The writing is also relatively reasonable. But why can't I watch it?

It's outrageous. Why do modern time travelers like to fly on flying animals? It's no different from flying on a broomstick, right? Isn't it great to ride on a flying carpet?

I feel that the deformation formulas in the room of requests and responses in the game, including those equipped with the characteristics of the loom, are very maneuverable. The Botanist III and the Fang III are just perfect for the title of the book. There are also magical animals to breed, multiply and rise to the stars.

It has been written down as a running account before it is put on the shelves...

Hogwarts Talent Map

So far, I feel that the writing is quite good, although it is still relatively dull. I hope the author can keep writing. The ancient magic should not only bring the protagonist upgrades to various magics, but may also eliminate the restrictions on the use of magic, such as the negative emotions required by the three unforgivable curses. In the game, the protagonist and Asan Guardian Sen Bakar did not show any emotions when using the life-killing curse, but Lu Kerwood and several other notorious enemies can clearly hear their emotions when they use the Death Curse, and in the secret room on the map, Professor Rackham said that ancient magical talents allow them to cast spells more easily, so I think that many magic restrictions are actually ineffective for the protagonist (personal opinion)

How should I put it? It feels like the protagonist is the controller from God's perspective.

When I saw the first time I rode a broomstick, I felt that the character of the main character was a bit pretentious and a bit limiting to readers.

I wrote about a lot of skills and cheats in the game and introduced them all. But to be honest, for me, who has never played it, I am still confused. For example: When I saw Catching Fantastic Beasts, I didn't know whether the protagonist's talents brought over from the game were finished. Also, I feel that the protagonist is half-hearted. One moment he wants to practice spells, another moment he wants to fly, and now a space pops up to repair and catch magical animals. I want to do everything, but I accomplish nothing

There is a problem. There are timelines. The story is told in two timelines only in chapter 40. I doubt it will be finished later. The daily feeling of being alone in the Badger Yard is quite well written. For any novel with two timelines so early, I have an impression of Eunuch.

This is your skill. Is this called talent?

I hope the protagonist and Cedric can make things right.