Konoha: the Mysterious Scorpion

I've read Chapter 10. The protagonist is still Xie Mao, who has nothing to do with Xie. He's still studying fortune-telling, so it's different if you change him? Why do you have to use Xie's identity?

Why does the name contain "Konoha"? If I start with Konoha, can I use Hokage or Sand Ninja for others? The introduction is also written by Luo Liba. This is probably your first time writing a novel, a fantasy one. You don't care about the setting.

Tell the truth generally. The main character is so ordinary, I feel like he is just a passerby. Especially in the first three chapters, I didn't see any characteristics of the protagonist. Same setting, same beginning. Same character. Like boiled water

To be honest, it is really boring and not exciting at all. Goldfinger is too boastful and slow to grow. Scorpion has not inherited any of his talents and abilities. Goldfinger is weak and weak. He is a useless protagonist. I will buy the next book.

There is no poisonous point in more than forty chapters, but there is no fun point either. The puppet genius Scorpion disappeared, and the secret master Scorpion did not step up, so there is only a half-hearted Xie Mao left. There should be a fun point with the mysterious ability as the core in at most thirty chapters. In addition, it is best to find a chance to change it to Scorpion. After all, it is a story about the ninja world.

Thanks to Mao Xie Mao, the overall writing style is okay, and the results are definitely good after writing, but Xie Mao looks very uncomfortable. Is the author trying to show off how good he is in naming? I am almost overwhelmed by my name. Is there anyone like me?

After reading ten chapters, if I write about Scorpion, the selling point is the puppet. Then you are the system again. What about fools, soothsayers, and puppets again? And it also requires acting to digest it. Why is Scorpion not written on the puppet? It would be better to just give him a passerby status and let him travel to various countries to play digestion than to stay in the Ninja Village. After all, in the Ninja Village, ninjas are the main thing. You might as well just give him the ability of the Secret Puppet Master Sequence, use this as a starting point, and slowly develop it. If you tell me that there will be a later one, but the problem is that you can't retain customers in the early stage, how can there be a later one?

It can't be said that there is no relationship between the puppet master and the fortune teller. It can only be said that there is no bonus at all. Even if you think of a new sequence, mechanics are simple. Or Sand Ninja, can you help your Ninja Village become stronger? At the beginning, you also weakened a wave of original puppet talents. How don't you like to see the puppet master? . . . . It's like equipping a mage with a giant sword. There is no bonus and may even weaken him.

I wrote about Konoha and Scorpion, but the protagonist is a passerby? ? Being deceived and seeking to be beaten

Listen to my brother's advice. Mystery is too high-end for you. If you don't have that ability, wouldn't you just write a ninja fanfic honestly? ?

Demining After writing about 60 chapters, the main character is still named Xie, but in the end he uses the identity of Xie. It feels like it looks too fragmented

To be honest, just change the main character's name to Scorpion. Keeping the main character's original name will make people look awkward. Wouldn't it be better to just use Scorpion's name? 😃 It also allows the protagonist to truly immerse himself in the world of Naruto. Really, the current name is too dramatic.

You are just a scorpion egg follicle, scorpion eggs all day long

When I wrote Scorpion, I changed my name and kept thanking someone, which was too inconvenient.

It is recommended to change the gray mist pulling people in the new chapter, it is a bit poisonous, because the mysterious state cannot be reproduced in Naruto. Hokage doesn't believe in gods, so there's no point in pretending to be a god. You can reach this kind of chat group through illusions (theoretically it can be done), and you can even use necromancy and reverse necromancy for mailing business. The protagonist has no way to pretend to be powerful. You have attracted so many people this time, just to let all the ninja villages know that there is someone who can super-select Cheng Huanju. The reasonable uses I can think of are: 1. Report it to the Sand Ninja Village as a secret technique or a blood stain boundary, and use it within the Sand Ninja Village (Extraordinary characteristics can be inherited, so it is reasonable to disguise it as a blood stain boundary). Disadvantages: The source cannot be explained, increasing its own risk. 2. Disguising yourself as a psychic beast and immortal is very reasonable. And basically you will not be reported by ninjas. It doesn't matter if you are reported. The ninja village will not regard you as an enemy, and the risk is very low. Disadvantages: It is best to only recruit one person to become a contemporary contractor, and you are very restricted by this person.

Big disappointment starting from Chapter 3

The main character has no distinctive character, and then he chases one thing after another, trying to level up. After reading more than 40 chapters, I really can't hold on anymore, so I'll just keep it up and watch the follow-up!

A eunuch? You have to say something!

Sure enough, it's not without reason that you rush to the street. Do you really think that Zhou Mingrui is the name of Zhou Mingrui and you also use the Chinese name...

It's the first time I've seen a scorpion fan, please support me.