My Beautiful Girl Friend's Account

Chapter 12 has passed two small events, but each character's personality is a bit unclear. Ichinose's character development is okay, but for the harem story, I think the male protagonist should be established as quickly as possible. The character Kazama's intelligence is 8 points, but it is not reflected in these two chapters and is rather dull. The two chapters are very short, but the first impression is very important. Generally speaking, it is good. The author has a certain writing style. Once it is written, it may be another romance novel. Come on.

Well, if we want to talk about poisonous points, the character design will probably become a big problem. The characters of the eldest lady that appear now are very unpleasant. As the most difficult to grasp the rich and flirtatious S eldest lady, I am afraid that there are only a handful of people who write well, and once they cross the line, the possibility of becoming a poisonous point is quite high. Big, at least for dozens of chapters now, it seems that it is difficult to accept the character of this eldest lady. Especially when the protagonist accepts the bet for no apparent reason, she feels uncomfortable. Later, she is even more annoying when she is manipulated. As a super girl with rare attributes, Top-level eldest ladies - Suzuki Kanade, Tachibana Marihana, Nanjo Sky, Nogizaka, Sanzenin, Chitanda and other popular ones. In addition to fair skin, long legs, and delicate temperament, it is also important to grasp. For example, Suzuki Kanade's eldest lady attributes are very well grasped and outstanding. Focus on shaping the character without over-testing the bottom line; In fact, the heroine Ichinose also has the same problem. Although it feels like the shadow of Honami, the description is too thin and has no sense of existence. When all the female supporting characters are above 8 When it comes to charm, it is no different from the public face. It is recommended to add personal attributes. Although the milkshake eldest lady in the evil girl written under the sea is not too outstanding, she is still acceptable. The most outstanding Yuki Fukuzawa is also full of various attribute tags. When she is a heroine, there is no way to distinguish. Body shape, personality, and tags are the fastest way to build a character; It can't be done. After all, this book takes the male protagonist as the first point of view. If it is too useless, it will only greatly weaken the sense of substitution. Most of the realistic Japanese light novels are mostly humorous. Plots that are too literary and youthful will be too hypocritical, such as the part where the protagonist sheds tears. Although Although it feels very real, it feels really awkward to watch it now, maybe because I am no longer young. I always feel an inexplicable sense of shame when I see this kind of plot. I also suggest that the author not reveal in advance how many words the book will be finished, what if it becomes popular? Right, the above is just a rant, please don't blame me if there is any offense. .

If there is something toxic, I hope everyone can tell the author in the comment area, and the author will seriously accept everyone's reasonable suggestions. In addition, I want to collect it, recommend it, and read it again🥵🥵 I hope that friends who are reading this book can click to the last page every day🥵

I feel that the male protagonist is very dull, and I can't see the role of rebirth at all. Especially in the bet part, the protagonist seems to have lost his mind.

The setting is a bit like a Japanese comic I've read before, but I didn't expect there to be a novel with this theme. Come on xd😁😁😁

The role of the eldest lady is too difficult to create. The bet is a bit awkward. You can't get any actual benefits if you win. It's not satisfying enough. It feels like losing for the sake of losing.

This book is good, come on author

Who are the heroines? Also, are there any other female protagonists in this couple simulation experiment? See you soon.

The author's writing is okay, but it's not popular at all. Have you read the introduction for newcomers?

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