All Heavens: Seek the Way from the Lord of One Life

All booked, let me know your thoughts 1. The title is very attractive, and the beginning is also very special, but before this line was written in detail, the protagonist was sold (the edges are not erased, damn it) 2. The first reincarnation is relatively well written, the protagonist has experience, the heroine also advances, and Xiao Meng also appears. Generally speaking, it is very complete, with both pretense and upgrades taken into consideration. The second reincarnation is a personal line, which is different from the original work. It focuses on the relationship between the heroine and the main plot. It is quite satisfactory. Not much information is conveyed, and the atmosphere is not well rendered. The result is that not killing the imperial master is indeed the best solution, but the readers don't know. The author thinks that it is made clear, but in fact it is not. For example, regarding the problem of barbarian soldiers losing control, the reader only sees the sentence "Barbarian soldiers must not have emotions" in the article. The reader cannot deduce that the national master will lose control after his death, and there is no interlocking cause and effect relationship. It would be better to show that the barbarian soldiers were about to move, but were stopped by the national army. Later, when his teammates turned against each other, it was the same problem. The author could not pass on the information he knew to the readers. The reason given by the author was that the geographical location at that time was a occupied area, and the people below could not help themselves. However, readers would not look up the map. This information must be given by the author. The advancement and interaction of the relationship with the heroine throughout the reincarnation is very clear and not obtrusive. This is well written. The third reincarnation is very crotch-stretching! The information given was very little and very rushed. It can be seen that the author wants to write out who invests in the protagonist, and even says that the entire reincarnation is for this sentence. The plot is too short, which makes the foreshadowing and the portrayal of the plot characters seem redundant. The characters are not established at all. The plot characters do not need to be all fleshed out. He can just be an NPC that promotes the plot. For example, He Juan, in the end, she is just an NPC who gives the next stage of the task. I don't want to know who she has a crush on, and I don't need to know the cause and effect. It can even be said that the content that is implicated by the protagonist can be skipped. The role of this character is completed at the auction house. In the subsequent plot, it can be seen that the author is speeding up the progress due to the poor response. For example, "The Road to Shu is Difficult" has no effect on the protagonist. It is probably the end of good deeds. As a mission prop, it plays too many roles in the plot. I guess it is a clue, and its function is to connect the whole righteousness together, and finally meet "General Flower Blossom" through it. Especially the ending section, which is very mechanical and inexplicable, plays a role of force, and its function is only to prevent Yang Guang from being killed. The role of the protagonist in promoting the plot is not obvious. It was supposed to be a plot that revealed the answer to the mystery. Who were the anti-Sui forces that did not exist in history? Why did they rebel? Why was "Jun Wuyi" killed? All the confusions such as this were answered. But unfortunately, the author wanted to end it quickly, so the previous puzzle-solving and reasoning parts were not included, which resulted in the ending climax not appearing, no sudden realization, and only the feeling of watching a very fragmented CG cutscene. After contacting Yang Guang again, he suddenly reached the second stage. It was really like pressing skip after passing the plot in the game and directly entering the boss battle. 3. There are big problems with the real world content and rhythm. Normally speaking of Zhutianliu, or even speaking of the original text, the protagonist should rely on dungeon upgrades to counter-kill his opponents at a critical moment, or if he breaks through a major stage and does not have the corresponding resources, then he can enter the dungeon to have them. But this book is not, there is no kind of comparison before and after entering the copy. Especially in the part about An Guoxie, the protagonist has obviously been upgraded, but there is no real feeling, no feeling of the weak defeating the strong. Instead, it is like an invincible novel, "I fired up and shot in seconds. What is there to say?" It should be arranged for the normal protagonist to fight him once, chase after him, and be injured by the protagonist, and then take out his trump card, level up during the fight, and then kill him with one sword. Only then will it feel satisfying. 4. The protagonist gives me the feeling that he is being arranged all the time. Anyone can arrange him, God can arrange it, Gu Xiaosang can arrange it, and the little fox can also arrange it. Mi Ku digs a hole in the second meeting and then loses his vest. Even after entering the dungeon, arrangements are still being made. The auction can be turned into a scapegoat, and it can be just a matter of blocking the gun for Hua Kai's men. A wave of arrows has become a useless effort. It gave me the impression that I had relied on recklessness and had problems with my intelligence. Compared with the first reincarnation before, I had the impression that IQ is normal only when I know the plot. Either it's impossible to guess, or it's a layer cake. A battle of wits and courage can give you a sense of satisfaction in writing: first see through the opponent's plan, then suppress the desire to advance, because there is no way because of lack of strength, and then insert a copy to increase the strength and break the situation. 5. In terms of exchange, it is excellent. Especially the redemption after the first dungeon, it was just right, and the aura of "God's will is unpredictable" that makes me frightened when I think about it, is very good! The subsequent exchanges also have their own uses, so make the best use of them. 6. Again, the author knows a lot of information, but readers don't know things that they take for granted. There is an information gap between the two parties, which often leads to unclear explanations. You can explain more information, and don't be afraid of being criticized. If you explain too little, you will only feel like you have failed to outline the outline. There are too many explanations, and the readers will guess. As long as the guesses are not exactly the same, there will be no "Oh, it was spoiled and I don't want to read it." Instead, there will be a sense of "I guessed what the author wanted to write" in addition to the plot. 7. The author is very active and has been taking suggestions. This is why I wrote this book review. Everyone hopes that this book will get better and better. However, some things need to be persevered, some things need to be improved, sometimes they have to be kept secret, sometimes they can reveal some information first, and the author has to control this well. In general, drive high and go low, keep working hard. I will watch it for a while to see if there is any improvement.

Multiple heroines, Little Fox, Ruan Yushu, Jiang Zhiwei. Ethical investment, approved by the Demon Emperor (Demon Saint), and with the Human Emperor Sword, from the small world of fairy traces to the cave of all things, to the real world of the Northern Zhou Dynasty and the Southern Jin Dynasty, humanity reigns supreme!

Although I can understand what most readers think. But what I don't understand is, why are you so determined? "Beheading is not to cut off, not to abandon, but to explore their limitations, understand their illusions, and then see the true self." These are Zhiwei's original words. Taishang Wangqing is not truly heartless from beginning to end. Zhiwei's determination to pursue the truth and the sword does not mean that she has truly rejected all feelings. Family, love, and friendship are essentially the same. It is just that some people in modern society may value love too much and think these two words are sacred. It can be said that this is just a feeling. In principle, if Zhiwei's inner feelings are quantified, assuming that Zhiwei's desire for truth is 100, then the friendship with Xiao Meng and the others is at least 80. However, to be honest, Xiao Meng's feelings for Zhiwei are not much different from those of Qi Zhengyan, Zhang Yuanshan and others. There has been no qualitative breakthrough and no unforgettable feelings. ——Those reincarnation experiences of supporting each other and growing together are, in essence, just deepening the relationship, but it is only deepening. Take Meng Qi and Xiao Sang as an example. In the original work, Xiao Sang was willing to die under Meng Qi's knife. It was catalyzed by ten years of guilt and remorse. Ten years of seeing the ancient Buddha with green lanterns, and ten years of beating the wooden fish while facing the lotus day after day. Only then can a heart that is extremely painful be transformed into love. As Mr. Wang said, "I have been sitting in the ancient temple for ten years, hiding my guilt, depression, unwillingness, madness, despair, pain and deep-seated hatred in my heart. I have been sharpening the spiritual knife day and night, integrating all my spirit, spirit and intention into it." This is truly unforgettable. Although Xiao Sang chose Meng Qi, to be honest, until she was resurrected, I didn't think she really fell in love with Meng Qi. I can only say that I am touched. Emotion requires two people to go in both directions. The moment Xiao Sang's heart was shattered, it was the moment when Meng Qi reached the other side, and the Golden Emperor exposed all the details - To be honest, this may be the only moment when Xiao Sang will be captured. Her image may be profound, as if she cannot love someone, but the cuttlefish wrote the most likely moment, and Meng Qi also made that hearty slash. The light of the sword can not only open up the world, but also redeem Xiao Sang's heart. Since then, the two have really come together... But to be honest, Zhiwei and Xiao Meng really don't have a particularly special plot. Also because Zhiwei rejected Xiao Meng and because of the sentence "I only love the seven-foot sword in my life, I will kill you when I see that I am not myself", many people think that Zhiwei cannot have such feelings as love. But to be honest, love didn't appear, and it doesn't mean that it won't happen. Again, there was no chance for a real qualitative change in the relationship. In the original work, Zhan Wu saw that I am not myself, and mentioned it several times. I just can't understand why a lot of people think that Zhiwei can't fall in love with others. Strictly speaking, Xiao Sang is more difficult to conquer than Zhiwei. Well, love is not Only vigorous love, returning to one's original nature is also very loving, looking at each other without saying anything, but having a clear understanding of each other, which is more in line with Zhiwei's character - if she loves someone, it may be a love that truly fits the word "Taoist couple". With Zhiwei's character, one should not expect that "love" will truly be higher than "family affection" and "friendship". Although "love" is very special and most situations are unique, Zhiwei's "cut me and see me" is essentially breaking through these. It will not be easy to write these well. My writing skills may be weak, but I also hope that I can watch the characters I write slowly grow up and write new stories in a full and full way.

A group of people are discussing who the heroine is, but I don't understand. In terms of temperament, appearance, IQ, and strength, the best candidate for the heroine in this life is not the Golden Emperor? As long as he can achieve Daoguo, does the Golden Emperor mind who he becomes his wife? ! ! ! !

Speaking of Xiao Sang, I have to mention one thing. Xiao Sang and Zhi Wei are similar in a sense. Both of them are very determined. The difference is that while Zhi Wei seeks truth, Xiao Sang's starting point is the simplest, purest, and most distressing... ——Wanting to live. Yes, this is the original starting point for everything Gu Xiaosang does, including becoming stronger, practicing, and even getting together with Meng Qi. It's all about living. If Xiao Sang unlocked the heart at the moment when Meng Qi waved his sword on the other side, then all her uses, all her pride, and all her pretense before that were just for this. In order to live, Xiao Sang made a choice on the ninth level of heaven. Do you feel sympathy for Meng Qi? Maybe, the role of Xiao Sang is too difficult to figure out. Compared to Zhiwei, maybe she is the one who is not worthy of love - Xiao Sang's father died early, and she only had her mother Gu to accompany her when she was young. She did not want to inherit her father's "Yu" surname and chose to take her mother's surname of "Gu" and call herself "Xiao Sang" after her mother's nickname. As a child, Xiao Sang grew up in the shadow of the fear of being taken away by the Golden Emperor. She was afraid that her existence would eventually be lost, so she desperately wanted to grab more things to show her specialness. She made friends with maids, raised cats and fish, and smiled at all the brothers and sisters in each room of the Yu family. But as a result, as a distinguished Luo Jiao saint, this is not allowed. The maids and servants were killed, the cats and fish were thrown away, and relatives and friends were kept away. This completely transformed her, making it difficult to see clearly. ——Back to the beginning, I personally think that the character Xiao Sang has the simplest emotional line. Because everything is God's will, including coming together with Meng Qi. ——Because he played the roles of Yuanshi Tianzun and Lingbao Tianzun. The Golden Emperor became enlightened with the Wuji Seal, obtained the way of ending from Lingbao Tianzun, and became an ancient one. This is a great cause and effect. So, in a sense, He has always been protecting Meng Qi and is the great matchmaker between him and Xiao Sang. The simplest point is that it was the work of Yuanshi Tianzun played by Jin Huang that allowed the so-called Xiao Sang to gain independent consciousness. It was also the action of Yuanshi Tianzun played by Jin Huang that Yang Jian removed Meng Qi's earthly body. Everything is His arrangement. So scary. So, the reverse is actually very simple. As long as the underlying logic makes Jinhuang feel that the male protagonist is more suitable to be with Xiao Sang, which is more beneficial to him, all plot lines will fall into place. As for the key to the emotional line, you only need to wait, waiting for the moment when the Golden Emperor strips away Xiao Sang's lifelong pride. Perhaps this does not require a slash. Xiao Sang just needs someone to step forward. By then, everything created before will become sediment - this is where Xiao Sang and Zhi Wei are very similar. If they want to truly become heroines and truly "love" someone, they need a catalyst and a truly critical opportunity. ... As an aside, many people say that Xiao Sang and Xiao Meng are very good, and it would be better not to tear them down. Personally, I don't care. But... If you want to write the Lord of the World well, the so-called underlying logic, that is, the layout and design of the other side, must be given priority and handled well... As a result, the more I think about it, the more I feel that writing Xiao Sang as the heroine is not only good for my plot itself, but based on several key points, the Golden Emperor can bring Xiao Sang and the male protagonist together to form the most favorable situation. Then... Then, it became like this.

I know a lot of people criticize this. But now that I have decided, I have no intention of changing it. If you don't like it, you don't have to read it. The two books next door have single female protagonists and are snack food. ... The biggest controversy in "Two Heroines" is the conflict between "two women serving one husband", because both Zhiwei and Xiao Sang are proud. This is difficult to write about, and my personal writing style needs to be polished. In addition, in fact, at the beginning, Xiao Sang did not plan to be the heroine, but later when I wrote the outline, I found that there were many places where this girl could not be avoided, and there were too many interactions. If she was not the heroine, there would definitely be another group of people who would criticize her. In addition, in my underlying logic, when setting up the Golden Emperor part, I reviewed and sorted it out and found that "Xiao Sang as the heroine" was more in line with the Golden Emperor's interests. After repeated consideration, I finally added it. Because I am concerned about the personality issues of the two women, after thinking about it, I feel that it is not a big problem - because although Zhiwei and Xiaosang are the female protagonists, Zhiwei will be close to "the Taoist companion who has "communicated" with Gu Di". According to a reader, "The relationship between Zhiwei and the male protagonist will be one of loving him, understanding him, complementing each other, being free, respecting each other as guests, and not affecting each other's path." As for Xiao Sang, although she is the heroine, to be honest, the emotional line is too far back, and Gu Di himself will not take the initiative to provoke her. The two will have a relationship of exploitation and trading in the early stage. Overall, it will be close to the original work and maintain the feeling of being close and yet far away. If possible, I hope to write it to the end and everything will "fall into place". Finally, regarding the heroine issue, this will be my last post, and I will not reply later. If you don't want to read it, please don't talk, because it is meaningless.

Everyone who says they didn't cut it will cut it.

The protagonist's upgrade is too slow. There are so many opportunities and there are still no outdoor scenes. It feels like an ant participating in the game of Tianlong.

I don't understand why Xiao Gu is opposed to "The Dao Heart Demon Cultivation Technique". This is the supreme magic technique among the yellow martial arts, the strongest and most complete technique for transforming demons into Taoism. Compared with the provocative "Illustrated Book of the God of War" and "The Art of Immortality", the "Cihang Sword Code" that no one can practice, the "Ten Pillar Mahayana Kung Fu", "Huang Tian Dafa", "Xianmen Sword Art", "Eight Swords", "Heavenly Sword" and "Heavenly Sword" that no one can practice except the creators. Among other techniques such as "The Rain-covering Sword Technique", only the "Dao Xin Demon Planting Technique" has a clear success in practicing it. Moreover, it is not just one method. Even the magician Pang Ban can innovate and create a cuckold practice model, and finally succeeded. It can be seen how perfect this technique is, and the form of practice is also quite free. It can be said that in the world of yellow martial arts, apart from the "Illustrated Book of the God of War", which has the highest destiny, only "The Dao Heart Demon Seed Technique" has the highest success rate and the freest form of practice.

The other side exists in all timelines, and can be reversed. So when the protagonist is inserted into this world of the Supreme Being, Meng Qi and Xiao Sang are essentially the other side. However, the author also set the heroine to have Xiao Sang, so the protagonist does not travel through the Supreme Being of the Squid, but the life where the protagonist achieves the other side as written by the author. The Lord, this is the only way. Meng Qi and Xiao Sang have no emotional experience. Meng Qi from the other side doesn't care that Xiao Sang is the heroine of the protagonist, and the protagonist himself is his thigh, and there is also a parallel world of the Lord of the Squid. This is a different concept from the heavens of the Lord of the One Life. Well, Daoguo has 😎

Jiang Zhiwei and Gu Xiaosang both accepted it. In the original novel, Miss Jiang is a single person who seeks enlightenment and doesn't seem to care about emotions. I don't know why I always feel that Miss Jiang will eventually realize that she will use the sword to cut off love. Especially there is Gu Xiaosang. Gu Xiaosang's words and Meng Qi's words don't seem to be love. The emotional line in the original work is a bit confusing to be honest. The benefits of this person's words should be easy to accept, but I think it's not love, it's just Gu Xiaosang's desire to get rid of his dead mother I'm sorry for any offense.

Come to Shangxiang, but it's a pity that this book was written about the heroine Gu Xiaosang for the first time, and I was so disappointed.

I came across this book last night. Fortunately, the writing style is quite normal. Although the action scenes are poor, I can still watch them. I saw the third copy today, and your style of painting suddenly turned to romance. What the hell is this? My brother used to write romance, right? This is a fan of the Supreme Being, can you grasp the style of painting well? There are too many hidden threads in this book, and it's not easy to write when someone suddenly inserts them into it, so you have to change your writing style. I strongly recommend that you write more about intrigues and intrigues in the world of swordsmanship, flashes of swords, and less about aesthetics. The fight scenes should be tougher!

To be honest, I don't talk about the influence of the other side in the early stage. The impression of hiding this issue is very good, and the writing style is also good. When there are so few first-life fandoms, maybe it can become the first high-quality first-life fanfic.

Gu Xiaosang, whore from Squid

It was originally pretty good to watch, but suddenly there were so many original characters that it wasn't good to watch, especially the one about Mi Ku.

If you want to write a lifelong fan novel, it will really take a lot of brain cells. The logic of the ancient beings on the other side of the world is closed, and there is no possibility of changing it. The only place where you can enter the game is to use the setting of the current node. Otherwise, it would be impossible to write at all.

Female protagonist, is there Meng Qi 😏

It's rare to see a fan book written about a lifetime. I'll give you 2,000 points before reading it. I hope there won't be any more eunuchs.

It's hard for a fan of this generation not to support it. It's a pity that the heroine doesn't have a snack. Among the three snacks, the Chicken-killing Sword God and the Daluo Witch, I like the snack the best.

Hand-painted version

I finally signed the contract, let me reward you a little first, after all, the number of words is still too few

It's very interesting, please keep up the good work!

Not bad, let's go to Tieba to promote it.

Updated🙂

The first three chapters are well written, keep up the good work😊.

Have you been cut again? I quite like watching it.

When will the contract be signed? I couldn't give a reward just now. I could only vote for 5 recommendations.

Heaven is dead, Huang Tian shall stand! The bell of the Eastern Emperor rang, and Jiu Ge entered the world of the Supreme Being from the ancient well in front of the Sanqing Palace in the world of martial arts masters. He was dropped to the ground, opened the box, and pulled into the six reincarnation spaces to perform the reincarnation mission. Jiu Ge discovered the sacrificial purpose of the Donghuang Bell and was sent to the top of another Mount Tai. He witnessed the Nine Dragons pulling the coffin and went to Beidou to bury the Emperor Star. Zhetian: Sacrifice the bodhi seed to enlighten your divinity... Sacrifice the crocodile ancestor's divine fetus to obtain the secondary body method... Sacrifice the holy fruit to discover the secret seeds... Sacrifice the supreme residual consciousness to obtain the ancient emperor's secret method... Sacrifice the flower body of Hedao to merge with the mark of the heart of heaven... The Lord of the First Life: Sacrifice the Demon Lord's residual thoughts to obtain the Demon Lord's inheritance…Sacrifice the True Martial Evil Thoughts to obtain the Three Sky-cutting Swords…Sacrifice the Tathagata Divine Palm's true meaning to obtain the Absolute Saint Abandoned Wisdom…Sacrifice the Demonic Blood Peach to obtain the Jade Disc of Good Fortune… Which is stronger and weaker, the Dharma of the First Life and the path of cultivating one's body? The bright heroine Jiang Zhiwei, the cool and refined Ruan Yushu, the charming little fox born in Qingqiu, the fairy Weiwei, the flawless demon girl Yan Ruyu, the playful and cunning Ji Ziyue, the ethereal saint Zixia, The cold goddess Yi Qingwu, the noble ancient princess... Jiu Ge starts a journey to the heavens and worlds, and then establishes the Yellow Sky, sacrifices to the strange plateaus and monsters of the heaven, and proves the fruit of transcendence above the sacrifice path!