Global Games: Fantasy Advent

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Rating: It's good. It's a fairy grass, not poisonous. Although it doesn't have the ability to become a god, it's really worth watching. It feels like playing a survival sandbox game. It's usually quiet and soft, but the blood is flowing freely.

Author. Do you know the reason for poor grades? I quit the first chapter. What exactly did you write? If it doesn't work, change it. What would you write if you don't polish the three golden chapters?

I don't like reading books about Notre Dame

Modern weapons VS golden elixir strong men, this is another scene I have dreamed of I want blood to flow like a river! Hey!

The author's writing is pretty good, and the setting is pretty good. The woman in the front part is well described, but there are a few problems: the words "what" are used in the modern background, it feels like reading a historical novel. Then the wolf boss suggested adding some psychological description and background. To be honest, I was not impressed at all. Just a personal opinion, not necessarily correct

This is too messy. . . The second male lead's acting and abilities really steal the spotlight from the male lead. . . . Who is the protagonist?

Okay, but it looks a bit messy

The sentences don't make sense and there are too many typos! After writing it, it's better to go through it yourself.

It looks confusing and uncomfortable

The writing is too messy and complicated, and the basic world view of the three golden chapters is not explained clearly. The friendship between the protagonists is inexplicable, which should be the most taboo in group portraits. In addition, these people are too facial makeup 😅. The creation of these characters is too templated. It may have been novel ten years ago, but now readers will just think it is too fake.

What does the protagonist rely on to develop? By hard work.

Dual protagonists? There are too many supporting roles, and I suddenly couldn't figure out who the protagonist is after watching it~ Some of the plot arrangements are a bit messy

Who is the protagonist? ?

I couldn't understand what I was writing. It felt like I was skipping chapters. I was slapped in the head. My CPU burned out after only two chapters. Although the reader gave me permission to read the text, it was too short and I couldn't keep up. Often the plot rushed out before I finished writing the first part. It only took two chapters and four thousand words, and the scene changed five times.

The novel is very strange Some key settings are not explained clearly, There is no obvious protagonist, and the sense of substitution is not strong The development of the story is taken for granted, giving people a very false feeling Sometimes I even cannot understand the meaning of the design level (the above is just a personal opinion for reference only)

Author, don't listen to what those trolls say, just write according to your ideas, stick to it and sooner or later one day you will become a master platinum gold medal

I hope the author will consider a book club. Maybe book friends can pool their ideas to make the work better.

The future is promising The quality is considered to be above average for novices Advantages: Novices are very malleable, and the author has strong subjective initiative The character dialogue is smooth, and the text is also good Improvements: The game classification focuses on numerical values, and the author has many numerical values or before-and-after comparisons of strength levels, etc. Which are not very good. If you want to write a long story, I suggest you make further plans In addition, the author has gone too far in the narration and promotion of the worldview. To be more specific, readers are not interested in the specific reasons for this phenomenon, but in the world you write. My suggestion is to learn from some old Western fantasy methods to pave the way for the worldview Finally, I suggest you build a readership. It is good to absorb more opinions from others when you are highly subjective

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