The Rise of the Star-Swallowing God of War

Hunyuan Yin-Yang Beast? ! ! Hunyuan, isn't this funny? No matter what level you are, you are worthy of being called this. The King of World Beasts is not even worthy of carrying your shoes.

What you use is a halberd and you use a gun. You can arrange both without matching them. The gun and the halberd are as incompatible as using a knife to perform swordsmanship.

In the first two chapters, you have a school, a heroine, a big eater setting, a boxing test, and your family members also show up... Don't you think the stage is dense?

No matter what happens, I have to talk about the original protagonist Luo Feng. He is very different. Moreover, the original Luo Feng's A6 type knife only cost 20 million. Your A6 type broken halberd sells for 540 million? Why? No matter how heavy your halberd is, it's still a broken A6 type. How dare you set such an outrageous price? One moment, the price is normal to the original price, and the next moment it is completely different. It can only be said that the financial system settings have been blown to pieces. The opening scene is all about the big-eating king setting. If nothing else, how do you write about the ordinary person Qingmei whom your baby kisses? The tail is too big to fall off! Either the trick will give you the opportunity to drive stronger than the original Luo Feng to follow the lead, or you can just write it to death, otherwise it will be a complete failure.

I really don't understand why someone who writes about Devouring needs to write about Earth. The only chance is the golden-horned giant beast. Free content just for numbers? Why are you doing it when no one is looking at you?

Price is a flaw. A 6-series weapon costs more than 500 million. Based on nearly 10 times the price of each series in the original work, a 9-series weapon costs more than 500 billion. Is it more expensive than a king-level fighter? Not to mention combat uniforms that are dozens of times more expensive than weapons. So the average warrior only has two million starting capital, right? Xiang Tian just buys a 2-series dagger and uses it up, right? So it's a miracle that there are more than a thousand warriors in the world, right? After all, at this price, even Luo Feng's 20 million start-up capital might not be able to afford a 2-series combat uniform!

Can the author make changes? Since Jin Qi is the remnant soul of the Golden Sky Beast God, shouldn't his restored combat power be the Lord of the Universe? After all, the eight beast gods are all the masters of the universe who merge the laws 🙏

Fuck, how do you get the inheritance and fast forward to the first place in the genius battle?

The writing is much better than others

The fanfic theme is good. But don't be too similar to the Devour plot. Later, I went to practice with the team, and the spiritual masters and chasers came out. You said the plots are almost the same, why not watch Devour?

If you don't know how to write, just go ahead and drive screws. The more you read, the more disgusting you'll get. Still fucking writing fan fiction. It's better not to write about colleagues, but to randomly change the original owner's settings. Really annoying

Comments on new books are actually locked... I don't quite understand you. For the sake of being devoured, I voted to speak I knew it was a newcomer even before I finished reading the first chapter. It was too obvious. A typical characteristic of newcomers is their writing style. The content you wrote is indeed innovative and there are no typos, but it is a bit awkward and a bit unsmooth to read. For example, the content of the first chapter can actually be lengthened a little and spread into two chapters or even more. The amount of information you have crammed in is too large, and the readers will be very tired when they read it. You will not be able to feel it when you read it yourself.

The author writes very well! Welcome everyone to click on the homepage to view my work ~ Rebirth as a Wolf, the Alien Beast genre, supplementing the world view of the Devouring Starry Sky.

I can't stand it anymore after reading ten chapters. I only have one suggestion: make the paragraphs shorter. Paragraphs that are too long are too strenuous.

This is another one that exposes the spiritual master. I won't read it. There is no harm in it, I just don't like it. Come on, more and more people will watch it

I recommend a new book, "Swallowing the Starry Sky: The Beginning of the Giant of Light". The Great Nirvana begins, don't grab Luo Feng's opportunity. After reading too many fan works, I felt itchy, so I decided to write one myself.

In fact, the writing is okay. When I read other fan stories, I was thinking why I couldn't just find a way to join Gan Wu, so that I could get better training and grow faster. . .

The dialogue narration in this plot is embarrassing and childish! If there is a problem, the author knows it and does not change it. Just read these comments.

The eunuch party in the online literary world. All the protagonists in his novels are eunuchs. Practice and become stronger 24 hours a day. The only advantage of writing a book this way is that it passes review. The biggest disadvantage is that it is extremely ugly. An article without an emotional line is just a piece of cake. What's the point of wandering around and wandering all your life, no matter how strong you are? A person without a home is not even a human being. To be a successful author. There must be an emotional line in the article. Otherwise, serve the country and the people. Dedicate your life, live.

The writing is too rough. Take the first chapter as an example. The character's shock reaction should have a process, not one step. The author's writing is like a slap, shock, and then it's gone. It's sad to see

Recommended "Heavens: Proving the Heavenly Emperor from the Desolate Era", I will write the Devouring Chapter soon... I, Ying Hao, come to the Era of the Desolate World with the Gate of All Realms, travel through the heavens, gather endless luck, open the first destiny dynasty in the ages, use the way of the ultimate emperor to make all the ways surrender, and become the eternal Supreme Emperor of Heaven. PS: I am currently writing about The Wilderness, and I may write about Swallowing Starry Sky, Perfect World, Under One Person, Douluo Dalu, Covering the Sky, Wu Dong Qian Kun, Snow Eagle Lord, Feijian Wenwen, Cangyuan Tu, Eternal Life, Yuan Tianzun, Beyond Time...

Damn it, it's another opportunity, the golden-horned giant beast: "I'll die if I deserve it,,,, a bunch of hot chicks"

Recommend a fan novel "The Eternal God Brain of the Swallowing Star Sky" [Single heroine·Ai Chen] The protagonist travels through the Swallowing Star Sky and obtains the Eternal God Brain. The Eternal God Brain can integrate all things and turn into its own clone. It has its own innate abilities and can evolve infinitely! Integrate with computers, gain computing talent, and evolve into the most powerful brain in the universe, capable of performing calculations tens of trillions of times in an instant. Integrate the immortal-class spacecraft of the mechanical race, obtain the talent of mechanical creation, follow the path of mechanical style, and create mechanical treasures that are better than those of mountain riders. Integrate with the Zerg Mother Queen, gain the talent of genetic analysis, and integrate various powerful bloodline genes in the universe to create a perfect divine body. ...................... Zerg: Damn it, how did this human Li Xin create warriors that were so much stronger than my Zerg? Mechanical Tribe: We are the worst off. Originally, we had the most advanced technology in the universe, but now human technology is even stronger than our Mechanical Tribe! Yaozu: Let's not talk about other things first. Why is the gene multiplier of human beings now higher than that of our royal family? Human: We don't know these questions of yours, you can ask him yourself. Each alien tribe: We sent people to ask, but every tribe member who went to ask died and could not even be resurrected! Li Xin: Why didn't I find anyone asking me?

Isn't it enough if I'm not a spiritual master? Any technique will change when it reaches Devouring Starry Sky. Isn't cultivation all about cultivating the spirit, energy, and spirit?

I recommend a book called "Swallowing the Starry Sky: My Comprehension Has No Limits", it's really good~

I would like to recommend my own book, "Swallowing the Starry Sky, Starting with the Weakest Special Life", the beginning of the Prison Clan