You Are the Obsession in My Heart

I read the article again today and found that there are indeed some things that are not quite right. I will slowly correct it starting from the first chapter. (This may be a long cycle.) Thanks very much to Xiaotuo and Roubao for their detailed suggestions. I will think about it carefully and improve the text.

Conclusion: I dare not say 100%, but 89% of girls + 10% of boys like to write romance novels. Although the competition for campus romance novels is fierce, the demand is huge.

Come on together (ง •̀_•́)ง

Come on, keep updating every day.

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I came to take a look and support the author, come on!

There are too many friends waiting for reviews and I am short of time, so I can only read the first chapter intensively. Tell me some directions for improvement. (Also: If you are not pursuing a contract but just want to leave a work for yourself, you can ignore this large paragraph or delete this message, as long as you like it): 1. The writing is relatively bland and the details of the characters are few, especially the lack of appearance description of several key characters. Unless you are a reader who knows the prototype of the characters in the article, it will be difficult to have a particularly deep impression of any character. 2. The male and female protagonists have little interaction and no conflicts. In comparison, the lateness of the heroine's appearance was more impressive. I didn't think of the male protagonist's appearance. When I went back and looked at it, I realized that it was a gift of rubber. There is obviously a problem with event selection. Either the male protagonist saves the heroine from crisis when he first appears, or he creates a crisis for the heroine. Otherwise, there is an agreement or misunderstanding and conflict between the two people. You can choose which one you want, but eraser is not really a good choice. 3. The story lacks a hook. That is, there needs to be a strong ending at the end of a chapter to attract readers to the next chapter. A common approach is to pause at the moment when the protagonist encounters a crisis. It is common for romances to stop at the key interaction (statement) of the male and female protagonists, or the change in the relationship, and move on to the next chapter. You can also think about this. The rest is writing. In fact, the requirements for online writing are not particularly high. It doesn't matter if the story is interesting and the wording is not so precise. If you want to sign a contract, it is recommended to read the first few chapters of works of the same type that summarize the relationships and conflicts between the characters. Click here to revise your own novel. If you don't want to sign or it doesn't matter, then read it carefully and delete some explanatory descriptions of causes and consequences, leaving only descriptions of the characters' dialogue, actions, demeanor, appearance, surrounding environment, etc., And compress the plot so that each paragraph has something to say. I believe it will be much better. Come on. Help every friend who loves writing.

Initiation (goal, obstacle) Inheritance (action, result) Turn (unexpected, turning point) Union (ending: end foreshadowing, end content, start the next story) Desire-->Obstruction-->Action-->Result-->Unexpected-->Turning-->Ending Template (1) Goal:. Obstacle:(Kai) Action:. Result: (Accept) Unexpected:. Turning point:(Turn) Ending:. Foreshadowing: (合)

Accumulation over time has two sides. You can make big changes through accumulation. Good or bad.

Huh... (I really took a long breath) It seems that I saw me when I first started writing the book. I don't know how to comment. I feel that you are very similar to me when I first started writing. I love to write with details and plain stories. I like to hide my emotions between the lines for fear that others will see it. To put it more elegantly, I probably just want to write my own Garden of Eden. Because of this, judging you is a bit like me looking for my own shortcomings, which is difficult for me. Later, a senior told me (I will pass it on to you too) that if it is an online article, your book may only be read by people like you. It is easy to write it alone. This is a very lonely road. Only when you are so lonely that you have to be the best, others will want to resonate with you. I have half given up, but I feel unwilling to do so. So when I suddenly saw you like me, my heart was inexplicably touched. Come on! To you, to my former self.

You can continue, book friends are very enthusiastic