The All-Time Master Starts Over

The writing is quite good, not only describing the passion and youth of the game, but also realistically showing the commercial value of the game itself.

The front is okay, but the later it gets weirder... Is it really an e-sports article? I personally feel that this is no longer a fan article about full-time masters, nor is it an e-sports article. The emotional scenes are really baffling. This is already a cool article about the entertainment industry. I don't know. Ye Xiu in it is no longer my Ye Shen. These are just personal feelings. It's really hard to comment on the plot that follows. I'll emphasize my personal feelings again.

It's not enough. Please give the author a big boost and update it quickly.

Author: Does your book have a female protagonist?

The relationship between Tao and Su was really broken. No matter what, Tao's kindness to the Su brothers and sisters is not an exaggeration. Su and her sister came out of the orphanage and were taken in by Tao. Su and Ye wanted to play professionally and Tao sold half of the Internet cafe support. After breaking up with Ye, Su Mucheng went to help Ye every day and didn't say a word about her own guild Tao. No matter what, she couldn't be like the enemy you wrote.

After reading Chapter 2, I have some thoughts. The first chapter feels a bit inexplicable. I don't think I need to explain things that have nothing to do with the game. How should I put it? There are two ways to write fan fiction. Nowadays, the common writing method is to bring in the original characters and follow the plot of the original work; there is also a less popular writing method that is to completely abandon or have as little contact with the original characters as possible, only retaining the entire world view, and the plot and characters are completely original. When I started reading the first chapter, I thought it was the second way of writing, but when I read the second chapter, I realized that it was not. In my opinion, this is completely unnecessary to explain. Reborn into another body, I also think this setting is a bit unsatisfactory. It would be better not to be reborn, and just set Su Muqiu not to die, but to become a vegetative state, sleep for a few years, then wake up, resume training, get on track, and then get to the point, so as to avoid embarrassment. This kind of setting where people are fighting for their lives in this world, if it is not a fantasy and suspense work, the most taboo thing is to meet an old friend. It's hard for me to find a novel that I can read. That's not to say it's bad. The simplest logic can't be handled well. Personally, I really can't continue reading.

The protagonist you wrote has no trace of Su Muqiu at all.

I almost couldn't hold my breath in the first chapter. Please let the author know more about the army. Doctoral students, it is encouraged to want to go to the army, but you actually want to be a soldier? What kind of special forces are you talking about? Do you really think that special forces are so powerful? Even if you have been a soldier for fifteen years, you are still just a soldier. There is a huge difference in military and administrative status and treatment from an officer. Even if you see a young second lieutenant who has just graduated from the military academy, you must salute with a question mark first. If you have the qualifications for a doctorate, why don't you take a special recruitment? After the assessment, you will be an officer. If you really like the special forces, you can serve in the special forces after wearing four pockets.

I only learn to code when I get home from get off work every day. The code was 6,000 in one night. After posting at 12 o'clock, I went to bed. I'm in a hurry, and there are often typos and incoherence. Generally, it will be modified during the day. I would like to apologize to the readers who read this in the middle of the night or early in the morning.

Although I also hate Tao Xuan, I personally feel that as Su Muqiu, he would not be so specific. Just like Ye Xiu, he and Tao Xuan did not completely break up in the end even if they parted ways. Human feelings cannot be black and white. No matter how excessive Tao Xuan was to Ye Xiu, at least he was very kind to the Su family brothers and sisters, and he did not feel sorry for them.

Come on, as long as you keep writing, one day the clouds will clear away. My book has six to seven million words, and 20 of them have been ordered. Now it's almost a million words, and only over 100 have been ordered But just stick with it, don't give up on your fantasy.

I feel more comfortable with the current rhythm and daily life, so let's work hard together!

As a game gun master, if he goes to serve in the army after retiring, will it still affect the resentment of full-time fans? Let me ask in advance? Readers are welcome to speak enthusiastically.

I personally believe that being a soldier should be voluntary, not forced! The protagonist's father demands that he do what he cannot do, even in a coercive manner. The protagonist's predecessor was forced to jump off a building because of this. The protagonist's parents did not change much, and the protagonist was even arranged to serve as a soldier. This is really poisonous!

Is this a hysterectomy

There is actually no need to read this book. The first chapter persuaded me to quit. It actually asked the protagonist to become a soldier. This does not mean that being a soldier is not good. First of all, this is an online game, not a soldier, not a city, and not a daily life. Secondly, I hate the kind of people who force children, especially those who have already jumped off a building once and don't regret it.

Dad, why have you stopped updating recently?

One of the favorite novels of "The King of Avatar" fans

I have collected this book for a long time and now I can finally delete it.

The pace is too fast, it feels like you are writing it to make up for your own regrets.

Come back and update, how many days has it been?

Change the way of describing the dialogue, don't always Ye Xiu said: "..." Tang Yue said: "..." Ye Xiu said: "..." It will be a bit monotonous if it is too much, try adding the scene in your mind, for example Hearing Tang Yue's words, Ye Xiu calmly said: "..." After hearing what Tang Yue said, Tang Yue thought for a few seconds and answered Ye Xiu: "..." Ye Xiu nodded without expressing any objection. In this way, your word count will also increase, but the expressions and behaviors of both parties in the conversation will be much more vivid. Come on!

Damn it, it's been almost a year since the author was resurrected

After seeing 97 pictures, I couldn't stand it anymore, especially the satirical words about the female college student. He wrote about Su Muqiu's memory and character. After saying that sentence, I couldn't stand the book anymore. If it wasn't Su Muqiu's reincarnation at the beginning, the bad pig's feet would be acceptable, but if Brother Umbrella is written like this, forget it.

How can I say that it is well written? As an old bookworm, can I only say that this is AI ghostwriting? What else is there about logic? You can't bear it. I just came to see what kind of rubbish Brother Umbrella wrote.

The writing is really good. The first two chapters were a bit awkward to read. Later, the difficulty of Jiashi forcing Ye Shen to leave was all written out. I found it quite good.

This feels weird to me, but I can't tell why.

Brother, 20 days, a whole 20 days, let me give it a try, Do you know the concept of 20 days? Twenty days is 20 days and nights, that is, 20 times 24 hours equals 480 hours. There are 60 minutes in 1 hour and 60 seconds in one minute. The smallest unit on the table is 1 second. An hour is 3600 seconds. In twenty days, just multiply 3600 by 24 and then multiply by 20. What will be the result? Tell me how long you made me wait.

The thinking is clear, the plot has no ups and downs, money is needed, people are needed, and the championship is scheduled. In the end, only looking at the global national war, the plot is a bit single, not compact enough, has no branches, and no love.

I think the writing is quite good. It not only describes Ye Xiu's love for Excellent Era in a different way, but also explains why Ye Xiu was isolated in Butterfly's novel at that time. The subsequent plot is also great.