Qin Dynasty: Sword Asks the Bright Moon

I can't watch…Farewell! I have practiced Paiyun Palm, but I don't use it, I just play... I have learned the martial arts from the family by doing the White Tiger Seven Kills style, and I fight a few soldiers back and forth, escaping in embarrassment... I have obviously practiced Fengshen Kick, and I have to wear heavy armor to suppress the bandits... I can't run! We entered the bandit chapter around chapter 15, and the ink is still being written on chapter 40... Anyway, this White Tiger Seven Killing Style is just superfluous, a big failure... Just to gain the identity of that white tiger style? ! The plot originally seemed okay, but it just showed all kinds of forced awkwardness!

I can't stand it when I see Zhao Ji

It's best if Zhao Ji is the female supporting character, not the heroine. Historically, Zhao Ji was very possessive, and at most she was the one who led the way to fame with pig's feet. It's better to go to the battlefield.

It was good in the early stage, but it was close to Wei Guo. I look forward to the follow-up. The scale of the writing in the last few pictures 😂😂😂, it's hard to not go up or down. This kind of writing reminds me of the works of a writer named Zhile I have read before.

At this time, Yuanhong has not been born yet. Only Canhong will be recast into Yuanhong after Jing Ke assassinates Qin. Please change it and write a book with more details.

To be honest, I couldn't stand it anymore after the protagonist got involved with Zhao Ji. It's a very simple thing. You're having sex with the mother of the First Emperor, and you're also dreaming about becoming a successful person under the First Emperor's command...

How many people still remember that Qin Shi Mingyue is a story started by a sword? Rather than a catwalk show started by a beauty. We only remember those beauties, but have we ever remembered the bloody rivers and lakes? Are the world beautiful because of beauties, or are beauties beautiful because of the world? The princes, generals, ministers, husbands, and soldiers are all in the rivers and lakes. How can we forget them and see the beauty alone?

The good guy saw that the reason why Zi Nu opened Zi Lan Xuan was too ridiculous. In order to save the sisters who had become playthings, he opened a brothel. Is this saving people or disgusting them?

Going to Sanjiang, as the saying goes, the beauties on the river can be grasped with both hands. The Qin Dynasty colleagues cannot have less harems, and the career cannot be given up. I hope the author can take advantage of it.

There are too many books with female protagonists, no matter how well written they are, I find them boring! It's like I can't write without being a stud...

There are so many heroines that I might as well write two books. There are 30 people in the world of Guangqin and Mingyue. If it were written as an infinite stream, there would be dozens of heroines in each world, more than ten every day, and no holidays? Normal people are scared every day.

Author, do you know what a gangster is? If you don't know how to use the words, don't use them. It's quite funny.

Purple Girl

The writing of the Empire is very poor, not good at all, but the author made Ying Zheng look like a pig on the wind, and did not see any great talent or strategy, and 80% of them died as the second generation. It would be fine without Chaofan. There are extraordinary powers and awesome coaxing Baijia, but it is really meaningless to write Ying Zheng like this. If Ying Zhengguo is superior, how can the protagonist be the same? Have you ever thought about giving your wife and children a stable environment? If the world becomes chaotic again in a few decades, what will your wife and children do? Should you take them with you or leave them alone? It is true that historical figures are greatly limited by the times, but isn't writing about fandom just to see differences and turn things around, or to see historical figures break through the shackles? What is written later is no different from the book Seven Swords

Is it not ideal at all to write about a time traveler? Not to mention unifying the world, he must be a bit domineering. Are you so afraid of King Qin? If someone tells him to go to war, he will go to war, and he will act like a coward no matter what he is told.

Why do I feel that the written force value is a bit low? If the comic version of Feng Yun hadn't been poisoned by Emperor Shitian, how could the combination of Feng Yun and Xiong Ba be killed? Xiongba learned from the old man Sanjue——>Smile three smiles. It is a world of high martial arts, and Qin Shi can be considered a world of high martial arts. The chapters I am writing now clearly feel like a world with low martial arts value. The strength of the pig horns written in the article is comparable to that of Wei Zhuang. If it were Wei Zhuang's force value in the novel, then it would be considered normal in the article. But the novel is not finished yet, and all the rest is adapted from the anime. Then benchmark the force value in anime. It obviously lowered the entire level.

The male protagonist is getting more and more pretentious and I can't stand it anymore

Check out the combat power. The master of Bu Jingyun Tianxia Hall performs 11 moves, and the protagonist Li Mu serves as a soldier under 10 moves. When Bu Jingyun was the leader of the hall, Xiong Ba didn't even learn the three-point divine finger, but he already shocked the world. Are you writing about Jin Yong's martial arts?

I regretted booking the whole deal. When I saw Zhao Ji, I didn't want to read any further.

Don't write about Dou Po, just finish it. The title of the book is Qin Shi. There is no such thing as the world. Writing about Dou Po is a bit of a continuation. If you like Dou Po, you can write a new book.

Why has Mao Zhao Ji become the heroine... Nu Nao Nao Nao,

Snow Girl

Is the 6th style of Cloud Pailing Palm so fvv? Shouldn't the Cloud Expelling Palm crush Qin Shi's worldview? Why was it written so weakly by the author? The cloud-repelling palms in the TV series are much stronger than this.

There is too much nonsense. No one will feel anything except being annoyed. It is just annoying.

I am not happy that I have entered the palace for the second time. When reading a fanfic, I just want to see how the protagonist cleans up the bad guys, saves the regrets, and shows off at the same time. Most of the results are "as high as 85 and as low as 5, all the women here are mine", and the disgusting one is "as long as I don't take the initiative, I am single-minded."

Putting the cart before the horse, the first 100 or so chapters don't match the original work at all, and they lose the essence of fan fiction.

There are too many women. If you remove two-thirds of them, you can still watch it. Everyone needs to have a name and just accept it. If they can't express their own characteristics, it will only be toxic rather than enjoyable.

The best Qin Shi fan I have ever seen, please come on, author

You may say that this author's writing style is not good, but he describes each sentence in detail. You said that the author's writing style is good, and the short sentences are okay, but every long sentence is uncomfortable to read. Why? Because every sentence is scattered, there are too many things to express, and there is no focus at all, so the expression seems very incomprehensible.

It has to be brought to an end. I hope to deal with the things Qin Shi left behind and then have a good ending. This book is still okay. The author is suitable for writing fan fiction. I don't recommend suddenly going all original.