Coiling Dragon and Long Snake Life

When the protagonist was just a snake, he spent so much energy to go out and enjoy women. It seems that this is another stallion harem fanfic with no fixed female lead.

The protagonist himself is also a World of Warcraft, and it seems that the character wants to get back to the sanctuary as soon as possible? Even if you don't refine the holy magic core, you should have a mental activity to give a reason. Some extras don't need to be named, but they can't be said to be passers-by directly. It will affect reading. If you really can't think of a name, it will be much better to use a middle-aged man in black or a man with a mask instead.

I won't say that the people who came here for the first time were all subordinates of the God of Light, because they were too far away. The second time was when Beirut used the main godhead to attract him. Among them, only O'Brien picked up a lower godhead. This means that many of the gods who came came with their ordinary men. There were also conflicts. The battle was a group of gods fighting on the god plane. There must be some godhead that was left behind. However, except for O'Brien's godhead, there was not a single godhead in the entire plane. Let alone the holy realm, I don't believe it. Where did the godhead go?

One page to persuade me to quit, I won't say it even if I don't understand the punctuation marks, there are a lot of bad sentences, and the word processing is messy, it's better not to write at all.

There are so many stories of the protagonist becoming a god, but he is still struggling with a low-level god like the God of War. Why bother? That low-level god of death can't even defeat the refining godhead. Is it so rare that he can even tie with the high priest of the rules of life? Quickly become a god through the earth system, and then write about the earth system.

The beginning is well written In the middle stage, it is a bit unreadable for adults In the later stage, you are purely a thug of the Holy See. You want to take the opportunity to lay eggs and make people believe in you. It feels like nonsense. The Holy See can last for five thousand years. There are only dozens of saints at the beginning. Where do you think the last person is? Isn't it because the two forces like to occupy territory that Beirut drove them out? No need to think about it? It's okay to become a human being and join a force? Isn't the original purpose of seeking information? Becoming a snake allows you to practice hard. When you become a human, you don't see the practice, but you see that you become a thug. You go to do tasks and get slapped in the face! Your Warcraft has become a holy level! You're amazing. There's a one-third chance. Can't others choose a handsome and capable ninth level to train and become a saint? (The protagonist becomes a monster instead of a tiger and says he has average blood. He's facing a bunch of eight or nine level dragons. It's awesome.) How many people have died for human sanctification? Others have no doubts? He is a necromancer. Can't kill the undead? In the world of the undead, the eight or nine levels in the highest places are real ants, right? At present, the protagonist can enter and leave the standard lair. It doesn't matter how many you kill. If you are possessed and dead, you can come back. Why kill people in real life? In the end, the main body snake ate the holy body magic core. It is not enough to kill the dragon? He left and said that Lin Lei will come in five thousand years. The question is that you kill the dragon. Is it possible that this holy dragon is the ancestor of the dragon in the original story? How much karma is involved if you kill the holy dragon? It is not said that the holy dragon will live for five thousand years. It will eat a level nine monster every ten years for two thousand years. It is level 29. How many monsters can you eat at level 9? This is all messed up, okay? There is also a space ring, which is just a bit poisonous (the snake body can take out things in the world of the dead, kill the dragon and put it in, and the human body can also be summoned. Isn't it just a house that used to be one door? Now there are two doors? Do you need space rhythm? In addition, are space rings so rare? The godhood is gone. Doesn't this force the protagonist to enter the cemetery of the gods? Force the plot) Don't join the forces and go to remote areas to become a city lord. The king of the principality is not good? The human body is at the ninth level. If you don't participate in the light and darkness, there won't be so much trouble! The protagonist goes out to waste his life, signs up with a level 9 monster, goes to remote areas to build his power, does whatever he wants, and becomes a country with a large population. The national power is awesome? With such power and money, can't you travel around the mainland if you have nothing to do? Five thousand years, even if you don't do anything, it will take four to five thousand years. There will always be monsters that become holy, right? The body of a snake must not have nine heads, all of which are at the peak of the Holy level? How can this be done by dozens or hundreds, plus more and less strategy to fight thousands of Holy level monsters, right? Can we make friends with the other four divine beast families? Is it interesting that there will only be a few people after five thousand years? The snake body gives the holy-level monster the godhead. After adding the power of life, you can completely surround yourself with a group of forces to believe in you! Experience what it feels like to be believed in!

It can be seen that the author wanted to write about the protagonist's experience in the world of mortals. The idea is good, but unfortunately the story structure is completely wrong. It cannot be as touching as the original work. It is a bit like a tiger but not a dog.

There are too many typos and the sentences are not fluent. I probably didn't even read it when I wrote it down

In fact, if the protagonist is Hydra, it is completely possible to sneak into the Dark Forest. The original work clearly states that there is a Hydra Emperor around the Dark Forest. If you want to enter, it is just a matter of fighting in the sanctuary and winning. Depending on the talent of the protagonist, you can catch up with the three Harvey brothers and introduce the rules of each system. It should not be a big problem. If you can't beat it, fight slowly. Like Olivia in the arctic ice field, other systems can be released first. Focus on the earth system, water system and wind system. These three original works The description is the most descriptive. Not to mention anything else, as long as you can defeat those sacred monsters, you can practice other ones after getting the introduction of the laws of other systems. Start integrating the laws from the sacred realm, completely integrate the two laws to become a mid-level god, and then go to the highest plane. This method is much better than worrying about the little training experience in the human world. At least it can be regarded as embracing Beirut in the early stage. If Beirut takes a fancy to the protagonist's talent and gives you a main godhead, it will be perfect.

I got 380 coins after you signed the contract. It's so cool.

The protagonist is very kind. The necromancer joins the Holy See of Light and suddenly shows kindness. What a great novel! The writing is pretty good

The typos are really serious and the reading experience is terrible.

The plot is not distinctive enough, it is too runny

This female character is good and that female character is also good. It's hard to tell who is better. It's hard to beg the author to write a big letter. The female characters live a happy life with the male protagonist. Book friends who have the same hobbies as me like me and those who don't have the same hobbies as me just pretend they didn't see it. Don't curse. Last time someone scolded me and I was banned for a year.

Everyone can see that you are writing foreshadowing, and I also support writing more before you become a god, but this kind of plot is considered poisonous no matter how you look at it. First, the space ring is not placed, and then it is taken away. It is really discouraging to quit. Originally, Panlong fandom is a niche, so I am afraid that you will not be able to continue writing by screening readers like this. After all, single-player is not that fun.

I just want to know if this book will be a eunuch. After all, 9 out of 10 books written by Panlong fans will be eunuchs, and one book will be unfinished if it is not a eunuch.

Chapter 1: Why do I see so many "of"s as ""s"? It's so messy.