Douluo, My Yunzhongdie Is Invincible

What you wrote is really not good. If you write about a fan, just write a fan. What are you adding indiscriminately? Nowadays, it's all nondescript and just made up. What about Bai Jing? Is she so powerful? There is no original work. I don't mean that it must be written according to the original work, but the way you wrote it is too outrageous! Di Tian, ​​Bibi Dong, Qian Daoliu, plus so many titled Douluo, plus the Ice Emperor, even the Snow Emperor can't defeat him. He is so powerful as an ice god. Why do you, the Rakshasa God, make gods eat? The original theme is also good, Yunzhongdie, but what the hell are you writing? You at least have some connection with the original. Your evil soul master ran out so early? Is the Ice God that strong? If you don't know how to write, don't write randomly. I don't mean to say that your work is not good, but at least don't write it in a nondescript way. There are so many original characters, such as Tianyue, Bai Jing, and the ancestors, which feel too dramatic. I don't want you to just write the original work, but at least you have some connections. You see, how many people have read this book and how many people like it. So be it.

After reading a few chapters, I actually feel that the protagonist's soul skills don't need to be the same as Haiyue's. After all, he is not Haiyue. Why not focus on the illusion of flying butterflies in the clouds, and directly use magical powers such as mirror flowers, water, and moon?

What should I say? If you haven't read the original book, you can read it. If you have read the original work, you will see that it has little to do with the original work. In addition to the character names, the author also added some strange things. Something's wrong

The writing is so colloquial that I can't tell who is speaking.

The ability set by the author is essentially an extremely underworld thing, but. . It seems that the author does not intend to write to the underworld This ability can be used in a place like Douluo where people do not refine their hearts. They can claim to be the Great Demon Lord If you can see through the other person's heart, you must be able to see what the other person cares about most. Once the illusion is opened and the person is pulled, he directly imitates the other person. Imagine yourself with seven expressions of joy, anger, sorrow, joy, fear, and using all kinds of heart-wrenching words to keep beeping about your obsessions, what kind of underworld feeling, is your thinking chaotic? In the early stage, the opponent's thinking was confused, and he directly transformed himself and stabbed him to death! Declare him dead! In the mid-term, take yourself as the essence, downplay and gradually let others forget about yourself in daily life, normalize it to mislead the surrounding environment, introduce hints, thinking stamps, personality implants, and break the other party's state of mind as the priority, no matter how to make the other party Go to hell, I still have a crush on you, don't think about recognizing your master, the battle is just a matter of a moment In the later stage, it will go directly to the underworld. You can completely pull the people in Gou Dao, and Amon's settings, such as public, forgetfulness, curse, and destiny seizing! It just so happens that the law becomes a god

It's weird, I feel like I've seen something, but I feel like I haven't seen anything at all.

Do you really write like a primary school student? ? ?

Why does it look so painful?

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I looked at ten of them, but I still didn't understand them. Looking confused. My reading ability needs to be improved

How should I put it? It's interesting, but it's confusing and a bit incomprehensible. There are many inexplicable places. If the protagonist has traveled a long time and done something that should trigger the butterfly effect, the characters in the book are strange but have nothing to say. The key protagonist has just awakened the martial arts and the settings behind it are in great conflict with the usual ones, which is a bit confusing.

Hey, it's uncomfortable to watch😖 It's a mess

After reading Chapter 13, I can't understand what he is writing.

I am super, Farmer

Brother, how are the results now?

Have you seen the mess yourself?

I thought it belonged to Zhuang Zhou, give up

It's quite e-like. I write fan fiction, but I don't have the ability to write original writing, and I suppress other people's creations.

It always feels like the angel and knight seeing the moon in the sky. . .

When you look at a fan, why do you make so many changes and you can't keep up with the rhythm?

Can a martial spirit appear without possessing a body?