Douluo Simulation: Get a Semi-Artifact at the Beginning

Since we need a contracted soul beast, why don't we travel all over the world and have to follow the original line? Or maybe you don't understand the unique geographical location? You give me the impression that you don't have an outline to write whatever comes to mind.

The pace is too slow, and I have been writing daily prose about emotional drama. At the beginning, some semi-artifacts only live by occasionally checking the system space. The plot is also bland and boring, and it is a pity to discard it if it is useless.

Your simulation is too boring, it's been a waste of time for several chapters.

I wrote a second fanfic about a bunch of light stuff and private stuff. It overwhelms the guest and takes the spotlight. I can't be very imaginative. I also like to stick to the plot. My evaluation is: Self-pleasure.

The plot is bland and uneventful. There are no passionate fights and no one showing off the saints. There is nothing exciting about it. I don't know the protagonist's strength, there is no level-up battle, there is no treasure to enhance the protagonist's strength, and there is no cool point about getting the trump card (I didn't get the soul-eating carving knife of the living gold). The most important thing is that the protagonist has no goal at all. And the plot relies entirely on boring dialogue that has no nutritional value. 🥱

Shen Nong's sharp comment, don't spray without washing This martial spirit is quite strange. If I were to write it, it would be a waste of money. From Brother Tianmeng to Ditian, if you don't look for so many soul beasts that are about to be robbed, you will just remember the two cats given by your family and write about powerful soul beasts. To make fun of daily life, wouldn't it be nice to write about it as Douluo Pokémon Master? Wanting everything will only kill you (the dog head) for a thousand years. Not to mention the outrageousness, the author still chose a useless name. How did you come up with the name Mao Nai Mao Ling? Have you watched Nai Ling's live broadcast too much? That semi-artifact is not necessarily used before. It is just a background board. The character of the protagonist, a transvestite, is not suitable for the starting point. The fourth-year Beibei and Tang Ya have been engaged for a long time. How can they fall in love with the second-year protagonist? The fiancées and sisters are clearly a poisonous point. The author does not have the writing power of a harem, and the protagonist has a deep family background, but the protagonist has many and inexplicable problems. The system, family, martial arts, talents, so many interesting points are mixed together, which is a bit messy. Of course, the shortcomings are also advantages. If you like the invincible harem and the protagonist, you can watch it. I haven't watched the paid part. If you have money, you can experience it.

Although the Hong part is inexplicable, I can barely accept it. It is used as a foreshadowing and gives the protagonist a background so that the protagonist does not have to worry too much about Tang San. After all, Tang San pays too much attention to Douluo in the background of Dou Er. The most important thing is that the plot of going to Tiandou to save Tang Ya later is really inexplicable. It is clearly stated that the relationship between Beibei and Tang Ya is normal. Since he went to notify Beibei specifically, it is understandable to ask for a favor, but he still has to go to Tiandou to save Tang Ya. Why? It feels like someone else is writing it. It is completely incoherent and does not feel that it has any effect. If you show more of a good relationship between the protagonist and Tang Yabei, I can understand and accept it. It's simply a big poison. Or maybe the author didn't have to write it anymore, so he forced himself to write the paragraph about saving Tang Yana.

The five soul beasts contracted are all female. What is the probability? Huo Guai is not like you.

Does the author have any plans for the development of the protagonist's soul ring? Is he specializing in ice attributes? Or develop multiple attributes? Or are attributes and physical bodies fellow cultivators?

It's good to have a female protagonist, but the emotional scenes are so weird and awkward that you might as well not write them.

What do you think is the difference between the author and the water god

The part about Hong was baffling. . What a show

It feels okay! Collect it first

Is the simulated world the same world as itself? Or a parallel world?

It's rare to see Douluo novels that focus on emotional development Come on, author Two cats, one three-no and one tsundere It feels like a dry throat and a fight against seven (probably that's how powerful it is)

Slow pacing is not a problem, the problem is that if you want to slow down the pacing, but there is too little, it feels like there is no development. After reading two chapters, it seems that I haven't read anything.

It's so bland, the plot has no ups and downs, and people have no sense of expectation.

This novel is like the ocean mixed with water! At a glance, there is nothing but water!

The main character's martial spirit can be awakened a second time using the huge vitality of the living gold, and it can be refined directly. Electrolux wants to find a host for his spiritual consciousness. The protagonist does not need a carving knife or an old man, so he can just refine it directly.

Wasn't the soul master system created by the gods after the death of the Dragon God to restrain the soul beasts? How come it existed hundreds of thousands of years ago?

Too watery, too virginal

It's been more than half a year since the author, right? You haven't updated 😭😭😭

Author, I don't know if I can see it. I hope you can continue to update or something else. I read this book in one go a few days ago, and the cat spirit in it touched me the most. How I wish this story could end... It has been nearly a year since your last update. I hope you continue to update, I... Want to know more about Ling, the kitten.

Come visit me with your work "The Witcher Begins in America" ​​and thank you! Added to favorites, great imagination, and the author's writing style is very good.

Find a class, why are you writing? Just to disgust people