Perfect World: the Beginning of Immortality

Once the introduction is written, it's like it's not written 😒

After reading a few of them, I just can't stand it. The layout of the first paragraph is uncomfortable. The second is that it's too romantic. Your writing style is suitable for writing hazy articles. The third is that during the secret trial, it's all bloody! Shouldn't we learn more treasure skills to move the blood? You have been enlightening here, it is either a sword or a sword. Brother, this does not match perfection? What is the use of removing blood? Just learn any magic and you'll die

Come on, author, a few suggestions, the protagonist can follow his own path and find a strong mentor to serve as a guide. After all, in a perfect world, if there is no one to support him, he will be easily targeted and killed. After all, he has a brother who is a troublemaker The protagonist currently does not show any special physique. It is too difficult to explore alone in this world. With a teacher, you can improve your physique, compete for opportunities, and treasure skills will become easier To practice treasure skills, the protagonist can currently learn three major sword techniques with a sword, and integrate the only treasure technique to create his own

Some write about the Corpse Immortal Emperor, some write about the Footprint Emperor, and finally there is one about the third generation owner of the bronze coffin?

A good and perfect fanfic does not deliberately suppress the original work, nor does it lick the protagonist to follow the plot. Instead, it goes its own way and intersects with the main plot, intertwining new stories to make up for the regrets in the original work. The strong writing force deepens the reader's sense of involvement.

I just want to ask two questions: Should we inherit the legacy of Cao Wei? Do you like ripe peaches? 😏

I just started reading it, and I always felt that the transition scenes in the text were extremely unnatural, and there was a lack of entry points. The sudden appearance of the characters was too abrupt, and there was a lack of foreshadowing.

Did Shen Nong test poison? ? ?

To be honest, the writing is very messy and the author is not good at writing.

It feels like they are all piled up with gorgeous sentences. There are a lot of them, but there is little content.

Well written, keep up the good work and update it

The paragraphs are broken down a little more carefully. After reading more than 40 chapters, I feel like I can't see any information at all.

After finishing the clan comparison, it's time to start writing the main text. This book will connect the plot of the original work, and at the same time, it will focus on describing the protagonist himself, with his own plot and story. There are many secondary settings, so please share it with the original author.

This introduction also made me think that it was written either by footprints or by Brother Bone. When I went in, I found out that it was a stone tribe. Are you embarrassed to use this introduction?