Rich Terminator

Many people have mentioned the shortcomings of this book. One is that it is verbose, and the other is that the plot design is unreasonable. Other than that, the plot and characters are pretty good, detailed enough, and realistic enough. And it's not like punching Messi or kicking Ronaldo at the beginning. It's step by step and you can see the character grow. On the other hand, it is indeed slow and verbose, and he has written more than 200,000 words and is still in the youth team... As for the key to allowing me to catch up, it is that the climax of the game is really well written, even for the few games in the dungeon. So, I suggest that if you read this book, you should read the last fifteen or sixteen chapters first, and then decide whether it is worth enduring ten chapters for the climax of those chapters. Oh, by the way, this author is also good at writing about food.

I always feel that the protagonist is too suppressed and lacks excitement. He should have a small climax once in a while.

I've finished the first volume, let me say a few words. This is a good book, this is a good book, this is a good book, important things should be said three times. Everyone on the list started with full level XX. It is rare to find a football article that is eloquent, step-by-step and also well-written. Lin Hai Tingtao's is good at it, but I can't stand it... The author has done this in this book. I have seen many people mentioning problems of this kind and that, it is a bit verbose, the pace is slow, the day-to-day ratio is too heavy, and there are bugs in the system settings... For me, these are not poisonous. In other words, if the author is an old author, these problems are really nothing. It's just that he naturally doesn't trust newcomers to write wonderful stories. If it comes around, it will become a poisonous point. If I really want to talk about the poisonous point, for me, it is just one point, the youth team. After reading the entire first volume, I would say that this is a very, very good story, real, sincere, and passionate. Especially in the last dozens of chapters, you can really see the different growth and changes of the protagonist and supporting characters. It's pretty good to be able to write like this when the youth team's sense of expectation is naturally weak. But if this first volume is translated to the first team, and if the final FA Youth Cup is translated to the European Champions Cup, it will be a volume of the level of a god. It's a pity that it doesn't. Therefore, the highest rating I can give it can only be a very, very good story, and it can't be higher. Okay, finished boasting, did the author understand? Update the first team soon! Faster and faster!

It's watchable, but it's too sensational and literary, and the focus is a bit weird. It's so weird in daily life that I won't mention it. The ratio is almost the same as football. And regarding Emma, ​​I really don't know why I wrote it. Is the author a fan of hers?

One hundred thousand words failed to be signed, and nearly one hundred and fifty thousand words came but the website was short-lived, which is considered tortuous enough. I hope you survive the catastrophe and have good fortune in the future.

It's interesting, but there are too few

The writing is very good, but has the author ever thought about why there are so many books in Qidian. Most of them are written around the protagonist and will not focus on the supporting characters unless the supporting characters occupy a lot of space later. I haven't read the back part, but judging from the previous description, it seems to be about the national football team. I have always been curious about one thing, and it is the same with other books. The protagonist has talent, works hard and adds cheats, and then there will be several national teammates who match the protagonist's level in other positions, and they are not weaker than the opponent's players. In comparison, don't you think the protagonist is mentally retarded? Has the protagonist really tried hard? Doesn't cheating reversely weaken the world except the national football team? In addition, the protagonist has been working for many years before time travel and has always liked football. Now that he has the opportunity and has plug-ins, he still wants to give up football and is confused. Is it like describing the growth of a 16-year-old aboriginal? You can write that the protagonist is not used to playing football on site, not used to professional rules, etc. These are things the protagonist has never been exposed to. The feeling is that the author thinks that the protagonist is 26 for a while, and then thinks that the protagonist is 16 as he writes, and his thinking is completely different from that of a working person. The protagonist has always expressed dissatisfaction with himself. The protagonist works very hard, but the feeling described is that the efforts are useless. It seemed very depressing, and the climax was well written, but the sports writing lost its positive feel under the depressive tone. I read a lot of comments and think the youth team is too long. I don't know how long it is, but the selling point of this book is the growth of the youth team and the regrets of those stars. If the author has doubts about what he wants to express, then why write this book? The purpose is to write about growth, and grow slowly as long as it is reasonable. Your target readers are not this group of people. Including the great masters, no book is without its shortcomings. I can accept all the above. What I cannot accept is the description of unnecessary supporting characters in large paragraphs. The supporting characters described in paragraphs are very full, but it separates the growth of the protagonist. When these are grafted on the main line, Just delete the story if it doesn't affect your reading. I don't mean daily life. As long as it's the protagonist's daily life, it's about shaping the character. I mean describing the detailed daily life of the supporting characters. Just write the protagonist well and make no mistakes. It's a good book. Don't make it more difficult for yourself. Some people may also think that this point is well written and the world background is better shaped. What is unacceptable are other places, and the book of the great god will make it acceptable to most people. Author, this book has a good idea, growth and the regrets of a superstar, Golden Finger is also very reasonable, and the writing is adequate. You can ask more about those who gave up (the target readers of this book), what points most people cannot accept, and if you change a little, you will get more readers. When most people can accept it, the results should be good. Come on, see you in the next book.

Although I personally feel that the rhythm of my book is very suitable for fattening and then killing, but if you really fatten it, you will die... Even if you really fatten it, I urge everyone to read the latest version just to read it. Thank you here! The description of the stolen pictures is as follows:

I read it in two days, and I really think it is well written. It is much better than those invincible ones at the beginning. I just like to watch the protagonist grow up step by step.

The author writes very well, has his own understanding, and is relatively logical. But the pace is too slow. Mainz's lineup can only enter the European theater at best. It will take too long to finish the remaining league championships, Champions League, intercontinental competitions and even the World Cup. Life in the youth team was indeed a highlight, but it was too slow.

The writing of this book is okay, but there are a few places worth complaining about. 1. There are too many flashbacks, which affects the reading of the book 2. There are too many "this incident or this person will have such an impact on what will happen in the future." This affects reading even more than flashbacks 3. Does the protagonist grow step by step? The problem is, but the chapter is too big to write about the youth team's game, and there are also some literary touches from time to time. After going to Mainz, you still spend so much ink on the youth team. If you are a great platinum author and write like this, many readers will buy it. The problem is that you are a new author, and the readers will run out. The update is only one chapter a day. Even if there are people who are following it, after a long time of reading, I found that the pig's feet are still in the youth team's ink, so I just put it on the bookshelf and started raising it. It's a good thing to have a specific outline, but you have to be flexible. If you need to speed up the pace, speed up. Other small problems won't affect reading very much.

Nowadays, it is popular to be casual and casual. It is difficult for a serious and hard-core person like you to take off 🤫 But it does have a bit of Chu Zhongtian's flavor.

I've just read the latest chapter again. Except for Su Ke's plot, which I personally think is a bit lengthy, the writing is getting better and better.

This book has accumulated experience and the author will definitely become popular in this book. I recommend the author to take a look at the most powerful blade in football, although it is a eunuch

The beginning is okay, good luck to the author.

Everything else is good, but the writing of "Bet with Lennon" is too stiff. I skipped these parts when I saw them, but the others are fine.

The author's setting is really ridiculous. It is said to be a parallel world. Then when the protagonist enters, all the movement trajectories in the parallel world should be changed. How can the goal route be exactly the same? If we are talking about a game, then isn't this a game in a parallel world that requires a long and lengthy article? This setting is simply stupid and ridiculous.

Grinding and chirping, like an old woman's footcloth. The author is always afraid that readers will not be able to understand his inner emotions, and his writing skills are a bit lacking.