Entertainment, I Was Chased by the Queen

It can't be from an ordinary person. What kind of family background does it have to be? What the hell kind of bloody plot? Poisoned to death

Don't you plan to change this beginning? It's quite toxic.

That's outrageous. How rubbish are your songs? Give it to anyone

I don't know about the writing style or what, but the male protagonist he portrays is childish and can't speak.

The writing is so childish, and the way of speaking is also childish.

When I read the first chapter, I felt like it was written by a female writer, and then I read it and sure enough,

Seeing that you are so harsh in what you say, I won't say it anymore. Author, just treat it with a normal heart. Oh, it's so miserable.

The grievances of rich families are not grounded nowadays. Reading is common to ordinary people. It would be good to see how ordinary people can counterattack through time and realize their dreams. Rich families are still paying off mortgages and car loans, and saving money for their children to go to school and get married. That resonates with them.

The beginning makes people feel quite inexplicable, but I don't know how to change it. It can be seen that the author wants to force the heroine and the hero to establish an intimate relationship immediately But it may make people feel a little bit poisonous.

In fact, I think it's well written. The system doesn't have a strong sense of presence.

In fact, it can be seen that the author really wanted to write well, and it cannot be said that the writing is not good. Some fragments, some details of the interaction between men and women, and some sweet dog food can even be said to be very well written, but the overall writing is still broken. It can be seen that the author is a very delicate person, but there are three big problems. First, the overall setting of the world is too thin, the stage is too small and simple, and the characters are too silly and childish. Second, there should be only an outline and no details. It seems that there are a lot of foreshadowings, but they cannot be developed. Third, he has too little experience and should be in the state of a high school student, so the dramatic tension is too weak. The frustrations and growth of the characters, the motivations and behaviors of the characters, and the conflicts and progress of the plot all have a strong sense of playing house. To sum up, come on, don't give up, write more short stories to train yourself, gain more experience and insights, watch more dramas like House of Cards, The Wire, and Cyclonus to experience how complicated the adult world is, and you will definitely be able to write good books in the future.

The starting point for making a fool of yourself is second to none.