Red Mansion Turns the Tide

The Red Mansion must be written so that people can read it comfortably! It's really not suitable for a cool and awesome male protagonist! Especially Dream of Red Mansions! Appropriate pretense is understandable! Author, you have to hold on!

Jia Yucun is just Lin Daiyu's teacher, that is, a private school teacher. He is not a master and apprentice, and he cannot be called a mentor. This is just an employment relationship, and there is no apprenticeship.

Lin Daiyu is the fourth generation of the family, her father is a prostitute, and she comes from a well-educated family. She is smart, sensitive and delicate. People with sensitive personalities are generally more wary and wary of people they are not familiar with. Jia Lin's emotional breakthrough occurred when Lin Daiyu was about 13 years old when she returned from Yangzhou. The relationship between brother and sister only sprouted when they met again. The main reason was Lin Ruhai's death, leaving her helpless and alone. Jia Baoyu entrusted Lin Daiyu's family affection and love, but it was a pity that the entrustment was inhumane and drifted between Lin Xue. Therefore, it takes a long time for Lin Daiyu to fall in love with someone. The author's relationship line between the male protagonist and Lin Daiyu is a bit rough. The progress is too fast, one is unreasonable, and the other is not good for the layout of the whole book.

Embarrassing cancer. I'm thirteen years old. Isn't it because a powerless foreigner is asking for death if he interferes in so many things? Jumping up and down like a clown, treating everyone like idiots, forcibly subduing people, forcibly matching people, having foreign men running around in the back house, is that possible? You might as well write about studying with peace of mind, take the merit test, join the army, and then look for opportunities to save Daiyu. What else should you write about going to the foreign husband's house for dinner? Do you understand the defense between men and women in ancient times? The first ten chapters and the following ones simply don't seem to be written by the same person. They can't be different novels that have been edited together.

I really can't hold it anymore. The minimum of a village in Ningguo Mansion is four to five thousand taels. The original text Wu Jinxiao once said when he came here. Even if it's a recession, the total is 2,500 + per village. This is a year. Eighty-nine villages in Ningguo Mansion earn tens of thousands of taels a year. You can't kill people just because of these 240 taels. And Lin Daiyu said, "Let's advance and retreat together." I really don't quite understand how a person who is dependent on others can say this: eat others and use others, don't worry about what's going on behind the scenes. People do enough on the surface. If you say this, it is equivalent to ruining your reputation.

The writing was pretty good at the beginning, with no flaws. But later on, I felt that the author was writing "as he pleased", using modern knowledge to crush the "wisdom of the ancients" at will. He could enter and exit at will in high-ranking houses, palaces and courtyards, and could he deceive the emperor and the powerful with just a little bit of modern knowledge? It's so taken for granted! Don't be happy just for the sake of being happy, it must be logical. I hope the author can watch the similar "Red Mansion". As long as these shortcomings and the pattern of being happy for the sake of being happy can be changed, and the writing is like the one at the beginning, it will be a good book.

The author, I personally suggest that the disciple rules are too early, the protagonist cannot abide by them at all, and he is only 9 years old. He is too young and is not suitable for both civil and military skills. He must be at least 15 years old. A tree is as beautiful as a forest, and the wind will destroy it. It is better if you are older, and it still feels a little bit intellectual. The author can take another look at it yourself.

Is it really good for you to write disciple rules when you are 9 years old? China has not been like this for five thousand years. You have to say that you are older, fifteen or sixteen years old, and you will be pretty much the same after taking the exam to become a scholar.

This monthly ticket is real or fake, 7.50 Thousand words, 760 monthly tickets.

Laughing to death, this was the first time I saw the protagonist who wanted to save Jia Rui. When I see that, I leave immediately

The writing is okay, but how could the author expect the protagonist to take over the Jia family? Jia Zheng is only the second eldest brother, and the title of the Rongguo Mansion belongs to the first eldest son. Unless the first eldest son and the second eldest son are always harmonious, the second eldest son will have to move out once the old lady dies. Therefore, even Jia Zheng himself cannot guarantee that he can live there for a lifetime. How can a nephew of a small clan succeed the big clan? Even if Jia Lian is the last, there will still be people like Jia Zheng

I don't understand what's going on with this author. He likes the comments when he sees them, and then gets no reaction. I don't know if he agrees or not. I'm speechless😥

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The city still needs to practice. A nine-year-old kid has no roots and no foundation. What do you want to do?

Introduction to extremely poisonous, has anyone tested the poison?

Ningrong's second mansion is located across a street from east to west? How to build the Grand View Garden? Has the author ever thought about it?

How many men have the Twelve Beauties in Red Mansions changed?

The writing is quite good, with the flavor of Red Mansion

Is it necessary to establish a book at the age of nine? I'm afraid you haven't been burned before

Your writing is getting more and more boring. I guess it's because of my poor writing skills. I just wanted to show off, but it ended up being a crapshoot for a long time. I still don't know what to write now. It has no focus and no main line. It's just a hammer here and a shot here. The plot is dragging, and there's nothing exciting about it. It's almost unfinished.

Personally, I suggest you sit back and collect the harem without going too far.

Depending on the protagonist's ability, he can completely start a new business.

Although I haven't read the book yet, but after reading the comments, the author pointed out the problems and really corrected them. It is much better than the stubborn explanations

As far as the sixty-odd chapters are concerned, they are still interesting!

After watching Wan Tian Qing and watching other Red Mansions, I always felt that something was missing.

The emotional line with Lin Daiyu was too fast, and it was a bit inappropriate to say "I support you" in less than twenty chapters. Moreover, at that time, the protagonist and Lin Daiyu met three times, once informally and twice formally without saying a few words. Your feelings here are a bit too early, and the protagonist's psychological activities are also a bit strange. It's quite satisfying. It feels like the business between two people is up and down, and two people kill each other. At that time, the clan was bigger than the sky, and people like Jia Zhen were still the patriarchs. The protagonist basically had no capital to fight against him before he had fame or great fame. The writing here makes the protagonist feel like a knight-errant who is showing off his bravery, and completely lacks the wisdom of making decisions before taking action. I hope the author will consider it😊

All the novels in Qidian Red Mansions are about the harem. . Don't you get tired of watching it?

Is the main character's wife Lin Daiyu? Will he take Baochai and Baoqin as his concubine?

I tried to imitate "Wan Tian Qing", but the result was completely different, the writing style was far inferior, and the plot was incomprehensible.

Return to the military... The Wang family died because of military power.