Start with Menghualu

Write the novel as if it were prose. . . There is no market, and there are too few people who can continue to look at it. Moreover, the narrative is unclear, and a lot of psychological description takes over the main focus. The story reads intermittently and is uninteresting.

Didn't her sister die in Zhao the night before she deregistered? And I also want to ask, what should Gao Hui do? Become a concubine to the protagonist? Even if she is willing, do you think their family can be willing? ? ? ? ?

Stills of the heroine in the book 2. Still Zhao Paner

I can't stand it anymore after reading forty or fifty chapters. The author may be dreaming. Can you read it yourself after you finish writing it? It's a mess. You write prose, right? Write whatever comes to mind.

Forget it, can you be less self-indulgent with pig's feet? There are a lot of beeps, a hammer here and there, a stick here and there, I want to sigh with emotion every time I fart, it's so annoying to have past lives and past lives.

Doesn't this author even look at his own comment section? Why is he posting all the nonsense?

This is the most rubbish book I have read in the past two years. After reading four or five chapters, I still don't understand what he wrote? Rubbish

I have read about forty chapters of your novel, and the biggest feeling is that it is too confusing and confusing, with no main line, and it just goes here and there.

Brother, remember you are writing novels, not high-end prose poems or anything like that! Don't have too much and you won't get enough! Just cool writing! I see you have gone through dozens and twenty chapters! Still talking nonsense!

Stills of the heroine appearing in the book 1. Zhao Paner

Damn, you just posted a few chapters and it was all messed up. What do you think? Let's deal with it

This writing style is so unsuitable for online writing. . The author can learn from the styles of novels of the same type. It's normal to have a lot of psychological descriptions at the beginning after time travel, but later on the psychological descriptions do not decrease but increase. . The character's psychological activity is excessive. . The plot progress relies on psychological description. . Very uncomfortable. I'm just a new author, so this book is just for practice, so keep up the good work.

This book is awesome. If it were written with the same quality as before it was put on the shelves, it would definitely become popular. It just sometimes goes too far, and it's two chapters later when I bring it back. It can be seen that the author has something in mind and a strong desire to express himself. At the same time, I have no experience in writing online articles and cannot control the rhythm well. Writing out the inspiration that broke out today does not necessarily have to be stuffed into today's update, it can be arranged into a more suitable plot later. If inspiration shines through, you can even schedule conflicts separately, rather than shoehorning them into the day's updates.

The protagonist looks like a psycho, verbose, persecutory delusional, and has two arms.

The writing is too messy, rambling here and there, half of a scene is written, and then the psychological description and memories of self-excitement with pig's feet are inserted in the middle, and the self-excitement and self-orgasm are like babbles in sleep for several chapters.

Big update! Others think I look down on it

Photos of the heroine Forgot about Miss Gao, then this post is all about her! 9. Gao Hui