Elf Progress

I just read a few chapters, so I couldn't help but give some advice to Up. It can be regarded as my own opinion. It doesn't matter if you don't adopt it. Of course, I haven't read a few chapters yet. If Up has changed, just think I didn't say it. The appraisal eye of Up at the front directly indicates the qualifications of rock dogs. This is something I don't like very much. It is normal to pursue powerful individuals, but there is no need to be too utilitarian. Pokémon The main theme is bondage. The reality is already very dark. There is no need for the novel to be too realistic. I don't mean that the Pokémon of the protagonist must not be excellent. I will list out what I think are the outstanding works among Pokémon fans. Fang Yuan's Pokémon Master, Tingshu's Fairy King, Teacher Lu's I really didn't expect the trainer, Li Xiang's I am not a supporting character in the Pokémon novel, and Luther's Five Heavenly Kings, excellent works like this can be used for reference. They will not directly write about the qualifications of this elf. They will show the excellence of this elf from the side, such as Fangyuan's Eevee with unstable genes, Tingshu's Tanabata Blue Bird with only this powerful dragon gene, Li Xiang's Koga Ninja who can hide in the spirit, Luther's big stomach king Mariluli and Ke Meowth, who controls the ears, is like this. There is no need to directly say what qualifications a Pokémon has and what level it can reach. Only such Pokémon have characteristics that players can remember and like. Of course, this is all my opinion. After all, I am not writing a book, so I can only talk on paper. If I start, I will probably faint. Anyway, give this seedling some water first, hoping to thrive.

Evaluation of this book: Not bad, you can take a look 8.1 Points (out of 10 points) Advantages 1. The opening setting is clear, the protagonist goes straight to the theme after traveling through time, without too much gossip. The level classification and skills of Pokémon are quite accurate! (Of course there are some minor problems) 2. Use the simulator to expand the full text. This is something I didn't expect, and the setting is quite novel. 3. Whether it is animation or games, the most important thing for fan fiction is to fit in with the original work! The names, attributes, skills, characteristics, etc. Of the Pokémon that appear in the article are all well integrated with the original work, without being abrupt or magically changed. This can make the work more attractive to readers who like Pokémon! Giving suggestions: One of the controversial aspects of fan fiction is that it is too monotonous. The quality of the works is basically polarized, either very good or very bad. The quality of this book is close to good. However, the types of readers who read fanfiction are very limited. Taking this book as an example, there are only two types of readers: loyal fans of Pokémon, or casual passers-by who don't know much about Pokémon. The shortcoming of this book is that it is ordinary. The protagonist's time travel has no shining points, and it cannot attract more readers. In fact, I think that the author can arrange some major events, such as adding some secretly controlled villains, leaving a suspenseful week, which can also make some readers want to read on. I hope the author will continue to work hard!

I hope there is only one characteristic, and multiple characteristics are fan fiction settings.

It would be nice if there were less jokes. Emmmm, I suddenly saw Ai Kun and Lychee Monster while reading a book.

In fact, it's not impossible if the author wants to write about the unpopular elves, but the plot should be better and more reasonable And most people who watch elves are to see the bond between elves and people, so there can be villains, but try not to make it too frustrating. And the kind that is too dark and too dark, Of course, it's okay if you write the real version, but it's best to mark it in the introduction. Some people can't accept that kind of thing. It's my personal suggestion. It doesn't matter whether the author adopts it or not

It's a bit ridiculous, and there are a few points that I can't understand. 1. The simulator directly gives the Pokémon. 2. Forget it. It has nothing to do with the simulation content and is very unpopular. It seems that the rock dog belongs to Alola, right? Just take it out without considering the actual impact? 3. There is no champion in China, and the peers from the other world who crossed over before are gone. . . A bit poisonous

Not long after he got the elves, he started dealing with Team Rocket Mewtwo? This is too fast, isn't this supposed to be content in the middle and later stages? I have read a lot of Pokémon books, and most of them are about entering the secret realm by mistake, and there are a lot of things that happen. I don't understand why they are written in this way, and I am a little tired of reading them.

Brothers, take a look, it's very important. Everyone, please read it, don't keep reading.

I have some suggestions. After reading more than ten chapters, I feel that the dialogue and plot written by the author are too stiff, and there is also water. For example, the introduction of the Pokémon, if you do it like this, it feels like water for the sake of water. Oh, and the dialogue. People are rarely at home now, and parents still call their sons. Those who call their sons usually call them by their nicknames. If you do it like this, I don't know about other people. Anyway, I feel very embarrassed when I watch it. A good work, if you can The most important thing in the early stage is not to keep people around. You are like this. Well, I feel a little discouraged. Then the dialogue with other people was written just for this way. However, it is not vivid at all. It feels like other than the protagonist, everyone else is NPC. Well, these are just some small suggestions. Um, of course, it all depends on you. You think it is good and you can accept it. I am very happy, but if you think it is not good, it doesn't matter. Just treat it as my writing. Don't affect your mood.

Rock Dog

I hope there won't be any fancy foreshadowing of the mystery. I really hate the Riddler. He pretends to be profound and talks halfway, but basically abandons it on the spot. Just keep the story straight and straightforward. It's not a literary novel. Anyway, as far as I know, the person who creates the foreshadowing will either become a great master or just go to the street. Ninety-nine percent of the time, he will fall into the street.

The original version of Rock Dog can also inherit Fire Fang and Thunder Fang to fill blindness, as well as evil-type raids. You can dig deeper. Dusk Dog's physical attack and characteristics are okay, but it is a bit brittle. It has 5 weaknesses: water, grass, steel, ground, and fighting. The most important thing to pay attention to is the ground type. There are not enough. To deal with it, the water type can use Thunder Fang, the grass type uses Flame Fang, the steel type uses stomping and the power of the earth. There are no moves to deal with on the ground. In fighting, you can use Spirit Fang. It is recommended that the second elf choose Water Flying for zone defense and transportation. This has to be the popular elf Gyarados, highly recommended.