I Have a Treasure House

When writing a novel, your writing is neither clear nor clear, and you have to show off your words when you have nothing to do. Your writing is incoherent, and you lose the desire to read after reading a few pages.

Speechless, brother, at least write clearly, I always feel like you are piecing together things😤

The writing is not literary, it is not white, and it is not pretending to be cool. A living person appeared out of thin air and traveled through time. In ancient times, there was no way to obtain identity documents, so it was no surprise that a government soldier captured it.

Keep it simple. Keep your writing method simple. You are not a writer, so why bother with words?

This is too messy, with a hammer here and a stick here and there.

After reading Chapter 16, I don't remember a single character except the protagonist. I can't figure out what the protagonist is doing. I don't know where the props he got came from. It seems that the protagonist is playing the second game. He knows everything, and the reader knows nothing.

In fact, I think it would be ok if the Eastern DND stream writes left-dao spells, Daodao, side sect levels, plus Taoist Feng Shui rituals and the like. You can also add some shamans and the like. To exorcise corpses and summon ghosts, just wait for Nebi's summons. The inner and half planes of Fudi Cave and Sky, Feng Shui formations, are analogous to magic circles and enchantments. Magical alchemy equipment is analogous to magic weapons 😁 After all, the great gods of the Toril world cannot easily interfere with the material world. The gods here end up too quickly. It feels like the main character is beating up a lot of people without even leveling up.

What kind of nonsense is this written about?

What is this you wrote? Can you write well?

I found that your writing was too dry and compressed. Other authors write at least 150+ chapters when the protagonist rises to the Yin Shen realm. You can finish it in just a few dozen chapters. Just polish it up a bit. In the new volume, there is no explanation as to why the protagonist becomes an underground doctor at the beginning. The spider silk used to treat injuries, how to establish a friendship with Spider-Man, the relevant plot can write at least 50 chapters. The specific situation of that organization is not clearly written. There is also the creation of gods. Other Western fantasy protagonists need at least hundreds of chapters to become gods in the late stages, but you can finish it in just a few chapters. This is too dry, need more water. Many things and plots that have been skipped should be expanded upon and fleshed out.

Back and forth, always jumping too much... What's wrong? Readers still need to figure it out, right?

The writer just wrote something random, everyone should leave.

His teeth are big, so few people see him. Is there any other job salary?

Make a suggestion. There should be a clear plot line for the protagonist. I feel like the protagonist is like a headless chicken, running into trouble everywhere and always being led by the nose.

There are various inconsistencies. Often the previous chapter does not make sense with the following chapter. I read it for a long time and did not understand what I was writing

Isn't the author tired? A book has not made a dime for several months. It is a completely loss-making business. It is worse than a eunuch.

I think it's better to finish Teeth, adjust yourself, and write the next book well.

The main reason is that each of Teeth's books does not have a clear main line, and many parts are incomprehensible

How come I can't find this book written by the author, The Righteous Scholar? I just came here after reading that book, and I wasn't very interested in the other books. I think the author is very talented and has good writing skills. I would like to make a suggestion. Writing classical fairy tales is more suitable for your writing style. This type of book has many potential readers and will eventually become popular. In fact, there are very few authors who can write fairy tales well and have a fairy spirit. For example, there is a book called Gui Zang Sword Immortal. Many people like the classical fairy tale style. However, the author's second book changed the style and used a set of vernacular, which is disappointing.

My health is probably in decline. I have been very tired from lying down at home for the past two days. I'd better rest for a while! Everyone, I'm off.

I just found the tooth and dug a small hole. The reader is confused when reading it. It is estimated that the content is about ten or twenty pictures. Unexpectedly, the author spent a lot of time to include the small hole in the front. To sum up, the upgrade is too fast and the jump is too fast. I am not used to it 😁😁😁😁

The author's imagination and setting can be summed up in one word~strong

Why is the protagonist missing from this volume of Xiaoyaoyou?

Brother, hurry up and write. I'll order it as soon as it's on the shelves. Monthly tickets are indispensable.

What is this? A mess

I finally understand. The author was so drunk that he wrote it.

Brother author, do you have any plans to write a new book?

Everything in the Treasure House looks like a garbage collector.