The Starry Sky in the Distance

The author's literary talent is really good, and the details are well described, but there is too little foreshadowing and the plot is too fast, which makes the characters' emotions stand out very stiffly. It is sweet, but if you are making a long-term plan, you must hide these sweetness among the characters. Casual conversations, expressions, titles, and even a mental description are left to the readers to find out on their own, which not only increases the interactivity of the article, but also pave the way for the relationship between the male and female protagonists, so that some feelings will not come so suddenly, otherwise they may become a poisonous point. Also, I hope there will be more description of the environment, actions, and expressions. For example, as the sun gradually sets, the golden color in the sky seems to have become the main theme of the world, unintentionally intoxicating the people who stare at it. The boy rides a bicycle with the shy girl behind him, and launches a charge towards the sunset, gradually disappearing... This not only increases the sense of substitution, but also improves the number of words. As a qualified writer, these foundations are necessary. Come on💪, I am very optimistic about you. I really think your literary talent is good. If you practice more, you will definitely succeed in the future!

Hello author! I got to know you through the channel of Writer's Assistant, and then I read your book, and here are some judgments that are too sloppy. 1. Character description. In terms of language, you did a good job, but the main problem is that you don't know how to write concrete characters, so you use a lot of good-looking words to describe what the heroine and other characters look like. This is an obvious shortcoming. No matter how beautiful I say this person is, without a positive and concrete description of her, it is difficult to know what she really looks like. But this is usually the case with the first book, so you slowly accumulate experience. 2. Another thing is that someone has already mentioned that the plot develops too fast. I understand the idea of ​​wanting to unfold the storyline quickly, but if there is not much foreshadowing, directly entering the next chapter or short story will give the reader a very strange impression. When I read it, I felt a strong sense of fragmentation, so it takes a lot of ink to prepare and describe the beginning and end of a story, so don't be stingy with it. 3. Advantages. It can be seen that the concept is still relatively fresh and refined. Although it is still an ordinary romance campus novel, but based on the current performance, if the story concept can be further developed, then I think the beginning of the first book is very good. As well as the description of writing and the application of various idioms, I still have a good grasp of it. Generally speaking, it is very good for a new author (I am also a new author myself, why do I say this) No more

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The book is very good. I hope the author can finish writing 100,000 words and sign the contract as soon as possible I will be the first to reward you.

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It's too short and not enough to read!

Here I Come This book is so sweet!

The stars are shining brightly, and the breeze is blowing on my face, as clear as the moon.

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Congratulations on the completion. Thank you for your hard work. Thank you for your hard work.

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