I Learned from Maoshan in the World of Hong Kong Movies

You are a time traveler, but you are just a legend about the underworld. Don't act like a native, okay? I'm speechless...

I have read about a dozen of them, and based on my experience of reading books for more than ten years, I would like to give some advice to the author. After all, it is not easy to trust the author. I'm not good at writing, so I'll just give you a rough outline. The issue of character design is that Pig's Feet has traveled through time and it's okay if he doesn't give the system a golden finger. Then Pig's Feet is not smart enough. Author, you must first understand that this is not reality. This is just an online novel, or a comprehensive movie-type novel. If you don't give Pig's Feet a golden finger in this kind of article, then Pig's Feet must have a brain, be decisive in killing, and make decisions before taking action. But I read about a dozen of them, and the pig's feet did nothing, and they looked very depressing. Author, we readers are here to read a cool article, not a documentary tragedy. Even if you want to write about depression first and then breaking out, you should at least break out in the five-card category. For example, in the five-card category, you wiped out the few gangsters who bullied the original owner and the original owner's sister. This seems to be refreshing, but there are more than ten chapters in your article, and those gangsters are still there, and you don't talk about avenging the original owner and sister. Why do you make us readers want to continue reading? In one, if you want to write about the image of a good brother who dotes on his sister after the original scumbag owner was transported to heaven, then you should describe your sister more. But in the first picture of the article, you describe your sister so pitifully and the original owner as a scumbag. But I didn't see any changes in you later on, so what's the use of your time travel? At least you have to spend some space describing the paragraph about pig's feet doting on your sister. If you don't describe the plot of doting on your sister, then why did you write such a miserable first page? This kind of comprehensive film article, without the writing style of a great master, must have a pig's feet and a system, so that some unreasonable things can be explained by something incomprehensible like the system. If I were to write it, I would definitely give Pig's Knuckle a system, and then give Pig Knuckle's martial arts skills in the second one, and then wipe out those gangsters in the third one. This is called the three golden chapters. It doesn't feel satisfying. Once your golden three chapters are over, no one else will read the fourth chapter and leave. Then in the fourth chapter, I started to think of ways to make money, and began to change the image of the original owner in my sister's heart, becoming a good brother who dotes on my sister. There can be many chapters about doting on my sister, provided that your writing skills are good. Forget it, my writing skills are not good, so I won't talk about it. The author took a look at your original text, and the writing is really depressing. New authors all have literary youth disease, and online novels want to be enjoyable. Why are novels about urban gods of war so popular? Why does a daughter live in a doghouse? One hundred thousand soldiers will return with one order. These are popular novels. Although these are novice novels, they rely on the pleasure, and novice readers just like them. The beginning of your book is very depressing and not exciting yet. Who will read it? Write it as I said, although it is a bit cliché, but it is fun, annoying and makes you want to read it. Add in some warm plots with your sister, and it will still be worth the money if it is put on the shelves. With your way of writing, it will be sold out before it is put on the shelves. If no one sees it and it doesn't make the money, you won't want to write it. Of course, I didn't say anything about generating electricity for love. It is recommended that the author read your book from the beginning as a reader.

After reading a few chapters, I felt that there were many demons in the temple, many bastards in Chi Qian, and the protagonist had just started, but there were a lot of enemies there, and they still pushed the protagonist to death. If the protagonist was really like Long Aotian, he would just fight anyone he saw. However, the protagonist did not show off. He just nodded and shouted to kill. I don't know if the villain is brainless or something. The overall feeling is that it is a bit abusive to the protagonist. Although the times were difficult, the protagonist is the protagonist after all, and there is no need for unnecessary hardships. The protagonist is a reincarnation, not a bastard. He can adapt to the environment after one or two hardships. If there are too many hardships, it will feel like he is abusing the protagonist. Of course, if the author writes about abusing the protagonist, just take it for granted.

I felt a little uncomfortable when I saw the first picture. She treated her sister so specially. Did I become a great saint?

First, the writing is very messy, and I have no idea what you are going to write. Second, you have already injured others, and you are protected by a master. It was not a strange thing to kill bad people who came to your door during the Republic of China. Third, the setting problem, the fetal breath skill is about the same as preaching directly in the ancient times? Otherwise, you can't learn it from just a book. If you have learned true preaching, you can at least achieve it.

Xue Maoxian's zombie control technique. If you don't sincerely become a disciple in a world where you can live forever, what's the use of learning it if you live forever?

No wonder it's like this, the character of the main character is very poor. Too noob

Don't write yourself like a native, otherwise you will end up in the street sooner or later

The pig's feet are like being chased by a dog, but it doesn't hit the dog with a stick. With great effort

The plot arrangement is very weird. I don't know what to think.

The writing is okay, but the plot is terrible. The world view is too confusing. The plot of Zombie Taoist Master is basically from the Mainland. Plan A was forced on Hong Kong Island. There is no world view at all.

The first volume of this book mainly describes Kung Fu films of the Republic of China

What about one hundred taels of gold! I don't use pig's feet to improve the food. What the hell are you writing? I'm just practicing Qigong all the time.

Looking at the introduction, it seems that the timeline is very confusing? The late Qing Dynasty and the Republic of China and modern times are mixed together?

It's enough to fuse the ghost movies in Hong Kong movies, but it's against the line to fuse the Heroes series.

The setting of the martial arts system is okay, but the description of the characters is too thin and each one is too violent. The development of the plot is monotonous and boring. The villains are all selfish and then conflict with interests to kill the protagonist. The protagonist works hard to cultivate and then kills him.

I like the subject matter and background very much, but the setting of force and secularity is too bad. Come on, the next one will be better.

The writing in the first two chapters is okay, but the writing about the martial arts school in the later chapters is a bit too rough!

The author is a novice. I feel like I want to write one piece at a time. The writing is not detailed and looks very messy. Also, the supporting characters are too flat. There are no supporting characters around me when I write this. The turning point is too fast. There is no excessiveness. Mao Shan is overly praised. Zhang Bingdao is good at fighting, but it is not highlighted. The line of Prince Ni is also very shallow. Plan A is a bit anticlimactic. The zombie prince has not appeared either. The author doesn't have a complete Maoshan Kung Fu yet. Don't you want to live forever? The author still needs to pay more attention. Let's make an outline.